He circumcised my eyes
My point of view
He circumcised my voice
He circumcised my hearing
He circumcised my heart
He circumcised my love
Copyright 2010 Patrick Granfors
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|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|Unique, clever and meaningful. Well done, Patrick. Love and peace,
|Reviewed by Annabel Sheila
|Wasnt' sure what I was going to find when I opened this one, Patrick. Nicely done...
|Reviewed by Sage Sweetwater
|Muleskinner foreskin! Paul Simon's Slip Sliding Away...the validity in this poem is for cleanliness and religious purposes? Cut!
|Reviewed by Artūrs Lūsis
|suddenly word circumcision pops up in my email, turns out - a new poem. well, i've always been careful with these 'heavy' narrow meaning words, but this piece is ravishing for its wonderfully handy way of tricking the word into building feelings of suspense and completion simultaniously, still keeping its heavy weight.
why do i stress my opinion on the words employability? it is a motionless word, too fragrant and expressive as it is, with its connotations & accompanying sensations, symbolism of diverse kind, taboos, etc. overused, even; but this poem, with masterful word-puzzling makes a sensational journey, that of a being - could be man or woman, the narrator/protagonist; i'm telling by the fact that circumcision is used on both sexes.
rest of the words used here - also imaginative for their original qualities, keeping in balance with connotations of 'circumcised/cision. so, without excessive manipulation, but tasteful approach to words' magical powers each one of them hold, you have created a piece of poetry that possess the indistructable force of all these words put together, making them tell a story; sing & whisper & cry, keeping absolutely silent in motion & still.
proves a monument can be of few words (unlike this review of admiring appraisal, after being slightly conflicted; only literary analysis could help)
|Reviewed by Paul Berube
|Well done, Patrick.|
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|a unique and exciting poem,Patrick!|
|Reviewed by Vesper Darby
|jeez louise patrick...you caught me totaally off guard w/ this one... left my peabrain pondering...who beee-ith 'he'
i need to know so i can punish him severely...hmmmm
|Reviewed by Peter Schlosser (Reader)
|Perfect poetry through and through. I love this! Very well done.|
|Reviewed by Ronald Hull
|Sure glad he didn't get me! Very thought-provoking poem, Patrick. Especially the word, desecrate.