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This isn't a school anyway.

If I were famous like Stephen King,
I would be very understanding with others writing.
It's not in me to hurt feelings,
being a jealous critical jerk, less appealing.

A lesson I've learned in life,
especially from my wife,
right or wrong,
she still wants to be left alone.
She doesn't care to be constantly corrected,
even when she is disconnected.

I've tried for years to help friends and others get on the right track, only to come under attack. You got to be careful how you correct, or you'll end up being a reject.

Most people only want praise,
even when they're in a daze.
I'll only help another,
if asked to bother,
tired of getting my feelings hurt,
 trying to help those who
don't want or appreciate help, even when it is quite evident that they need help.
(out of den)

My wife and I have tried for years to help some of our not so in touch family members and friends. Instead of appreciation we get,

agitation and intimidation,

quote, "what makes you think you're so right?"
then comes the jealous simple fight.

What makes us so right?

Well, we both keep our jobs and take care of ourselves very well, we don't run around leaning on other people, borrowing and not paying back.
In other words,
we're responsible.

We're the good guys being treated like the bad guys.

this den isn't any different.

it's a cyber community,
so I take my immunity.

Ask I'll help,
don't ask,
I'll mind my

I'm not teaching
in review
of you.


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Reviewed by Julie Donner Andersen 11/4/2003
Yep, I'm with Sandie. E-mail your critique. It's more private, whereas posting under someone's work here isn't. While I don't mind public criticism if it has merit, I am opposed to anyone simply saying "I don't like it", and not offering a reason. No one should be in this business if their ego is too frail. Thick skin is a requirement, as rejection abounds.

Grady, this poem was well penned and emotional. I find your work to be brutally honest, which is something I admire. Write on!

Jules :)
Reviewed by E. Richardson 11/4/2003
Grady, I would not change my way of doing things if I were you.
By posting work here, an author opens the door to the thoughts and opinions of others. If all they are looking for is kudos, or if they are miffed if someone does not like their work, then they will never grow as writers.
You did well with this piece...keep up the good work.
Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU 11/4/2003
"WritingFighting" comes flowing and striking thoughts on feelings and community's understanding.

It came like an answer to a request. This does make one think and ponder about "Review and comment" and read and praise.

We have to face the facts as they are. The sign says:

"Review it! - What do you think of ...?"

If readers "review" and comment on the work posted, whoever posts here, should be ready to read the "REVIEWS" and all comments left on the review-board, and ponder on the opinions left with a professional mind, and then take the favorable ones to please her/his heart.

The diversity of opinions will show what the WORK posted means, and will give the author an idea on how her/his work would be accepted by the general public.

Blest be the one that is criticized, and happier be the one that is praised.

Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU

Reviewed by Ian Thorpe 11/4/2003
Good piece expressing some obviously deeply held opinions. I agree with you, there are too many people at this site who only want to be told they are wonderful and any hint as to how they might improve their technique, no matter how politely phrased, is taken as an insult. But we must be thick skinned and keep on doing it because if well ment criticism is rejected then whem people encounter brutal criticism having been allowed to think they are good they will just feel destroyed.
Ian Thorpe
Reviewed by Tinka Boukes 11/4/2003
Well wwritten Grady!!

love Tinka
Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado 11/4/2003
Grady, you have a gigantic and caring heart, and that is what I love about you! I hope you continue to write; the den would NOT be the same without you, that is for DARN sure! A terrific write; well done, my friend! (((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Texas, Karen Lynn. :D Keep on keepin' on; you are definitely in my prayers!
Reviewed by Linda Hill 11/4/2003
I agree with Sandie on this one, my friend...
EMAIL is the best way if one wants to correct another.
Not in the den for all to see. You have a gigantic
heart my friend...your writes reflect that. I hope
you keep writing as you do, and never change. You
have brought me a smile many times when I didn't think
I could.

Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader) 11/4/2003
I've been in that postition too, but you won't stop trying to help, because you have a big heart and you care.
Reviewed by George MacLean Akurunwa 11/4/2003
A good heart always seeks to help even when it cost them much. It is a calling. Thanks for sharing this.
Reviewed by Sandie Angel 11/4/2003
Just because they're crittics does not make them right.

Grady, I had gone to movies that were greatly criticised by the movie crittics, yet I found some of the movies were interesting due to my own judgment and opinions. You see, everyone's opinion is different, including your own.

Be the critiques good or bad, it's upto you yourself to evaluate them whether to use their suggestions or nor. I think if people needed to help another poet, then they should give honest constructive criticism THROUGH E-MAIL. I had received some very well-meaning advice to my work through e-mail from helpful authors here in the den, and I'm glad about it.

Amongst their advice, I picked or choose, and I must tell you that I did get some well-meanings ones, and the rewards was quite fantastic. Remember always, you are the ones who chooses how your poem should be, so be the critiques right or wrong, you are the one who makes the final judgment to your own work.

Honest critters who really wants to help another should make their suggestions through e-mail. I think this is more acceptable to the poets.

Have a great day!

May Lu a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)

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