I just wished and wanted and dreamed
And dreamt and schemed and kvetched for your
love to manifest itself. But
all I got was heartache and
eternal desire . . . unanswered
in darkness and light, in joy and
sadness, in sickness and health. YOU
nor I, were ever there to care.
Oh, we did, but all we showed were
words, not deeds, our actions
lost in obligatory promises.
I never saw you . . . much, you never me.
Yet . . . we cared. But did we? We needed
but we couldn’t. Our lives were separated—
as one (no two lives), in annihilation.
Our chiseled marks upon existence led to
work, family, drink, longing and sorrows.
Loss could not be any less potent than
hard tears for choices made before time
found us in its evolutionary path.
I am not sorry, but angry.
For I chose you, to choose me . . . choose me
. . . choose me . . . choose me . . . choose me.
© 2009 Sara Coslett
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|Reviewed by Dark Knight
|I know what this like all too well-great poetry|
|Reviewed by F William Broome
How well you write of the anguish of a one sided love! Yes, the endings is superb....and just right.. A great bit of writing, Sara. - Bill
|Reviewed by Edwin Hurdle
|Excellent and powerful poem,take care
|Reviewed by Michelle Mead
|Wow, great ending, this desperate plea comes full circle.|
|Reviewed by jude forese
|a very powerful emotional plea for acknowledgment and support ...|
|Reviewed by Cryssa C
|A write filled with emotion...or the void thereof in what was once termed love. There is much to like in this poem, but my favorite lines are the last two...
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
|The inTENsity of these lines - raw emotion - powerfully penned - undone, Sara. Undone -
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. :(
|Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan
|Reviewed by John Flanagan
This is fine writing in every way, the phrasing, the repetitions, the intensity of feeling, the understanding of loss and its consequences.
|Reviewed by Gene Williamson
|Great write, Sara, of what appears to be a one-sided love affair.
The closing lines are perfect. -gene.
|Reviewed by JMS Bell
|YOU HAVE EXPRESSED YOUR FEELINGS WELL IN THIS WORK THAT EXPOSES THE DISDAIN THAT IS FELT WHEN IT'S OVER, BUT ONE STILL 'FEELS'. BLESSINGS AND THANKS FOR SHARING.|
|Reviewed by Carolyn Red Bear (The Bear Paw)
|Hi Sara, This is a great example on how difficult life can be when we live on emotions. Great write, Sara....
|Reviewed by Dallas D'Angelo-Gary
|Very nicely done, Sara! I like the repetition at the end. It can have different levels of meaning.|
|Reviewed by Felix Perry
|Our minds are often controlled by our hearts and sadly our hearts don't always make wise choices...hope yours does. Great write girl.
|Reviewed by Liana Margiva
|NICE, VERY NICE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva|