I put my hand into your fire for you,
flames are squelched
roses flow from mouth to mouth
with scents I smell
from those other beating hearts
which surround you
and you smile
your eye mine.
I place my head into the sun-oven and bake
tan and muscle brown
your eye candy;
You lift your arms
point to me with brown rounded headlights
and I see yellow in the sky behind you,
blue nights in those eyes
I'm close enough for you now
to touch and you reach
with your candy cane licking
knowing I will wait
in that forever instant
between the offering and the satiation.
You know how to give your self to me
and you love its dance
I am just learning how to receive
on my fire-dipped tongue
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|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|Sensually engaging, I love the images as well, Lonnie. Well done! Love and peace to you,
|Reviewed by David Young
|The arousing taste that oozes the verse into candy cane striped lines, a well crafted sweet heart piece.|
|Reviewed by Janna Hill
|Whew! Well done.
|Reviewed by Annabel Sheila
|Romantic writing, Lonnie...passionate yet tender and sweet! Well done...
|Reviewed by J Howard
|your words danced from the page, a gentle slow dance of love and delight.|
|Reviewed by John Flanagan
|Everything Christine said, Lonnie, ...and more;
this is excellent blend, perfectly chosen image
and top-drawer writing.
"...in that forever instant
between the offering and the satiation."
|Reviewed by Christine Tsen
|A magical blend of love's sweetness blended into the fierceness of erotic fire, and you know how to write marvelously!