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Perfection
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Nicholas Alan Tillemans
Monday, March 03, 2003
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It's my destiny.
When I look at you, what I see
Are changes to be made,
Sushine cloaked in shade,
A heart to shape and use
And tenderness to bruise.
You should see it in my eyes
Behind my sweet words, insincerity and lies,
The ugly creature wrapped in skin
With fists, teeth, hatred and sin.
But you guard your dreams,
The wind in your hair and the world at your feet.
And you dream your life away
As I decay.
Copyright 2003 Nicholas Alan Tillemans. All rights reserved.
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| Reviewed by Vesna TwinFlameunion |
8/10/2005 |
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And you dream your life away
As I decay.
..this hit home..hard!!!
vesna* |
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| Reviewed by ~ Chanti |
8/13/2004 |
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Ouch! This is one of those that leave me a bit speachless. I find your poetry intriguing...well written but seeming to make some sort of statement. By shocking perhaps you make a more powerful statement. This is the antithesis of all I believe but it is where I once was.
Chanti |
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| Reviewed by Jim Dunlap |
6/5/2004 |
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Intriguing pic.
You are certainly a non romantic poet. Nitty gritty drives this one.
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| Reviewed by Mike Philbin |
9/22/2003 |
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| If you haven't already, you gotta check out the NEKROMANTIK series of movies, by German director Jorg Buttgereit who is quoted as saying, "RED HEDZ (my first novel under the pseudonym Michael Paul Peter) would make the PERFECT David Cronenberg movie." Great poem, Nicholas. |
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| Reviewed by Birdie Houston |
3/4/2003 |
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| Good poem full of depth !!! |
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| Reviewed by C. Gourlay |
3/4/2003 |
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| powerful stuff |
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| Reviewed by na na (Reader) |
3/3/2003 |
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| Nicholas, it seems you are trying to build perfecton and yet decay inhabits your personal self. She seems to see perfection in her self; while you see change and growth toward perfection; which you cannot bring about due to your personal decay. With decay inside of you = perfection would seem impossible? Bill |
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| Reviewed by Sandie Angel |
3/3/2003 |
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Why not dream together? Nice thought-provoking piece!
Sandie Angel :o) |
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| Reviewed by ... ... |
3/3/2003 |
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Ditto. Very deep, but well written.
~E |
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| Reviewed by Lady Peg |
3/3/2003 |
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Oh this one is deep.
peg |
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