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While reading the poem "Cinderella" I decided to do this. I had read it before the cretins in my class got the first line of the stanza done, and cretins is the nicest thing I can say of them. I didn't want to deal with them, so I started writing. (P.S. I'm sorry if I offend anyone, it's not meant to be an attack on either gender. Appologies in advance)
One does not usually see
What corsets once did to noble and royal Lady!
Made her into a Maniquin
An object for men to admire
Such things have evolved and become revealing clothes
Quite replulsive, methinks
That society run by men has sunk so much
Most don't realize it's till the same
Chains like this are to make the man
Superior to the woman
But he is not
They were made to be equal and not just
Most men know not of Balance
Only of Chaos and Destruction
Raping any woman they wanted
Because they were the enemies
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|Reviewed by Dark Knight
|I suspect in real life you are a woman of great passion and deeper thoughts--well done|
|Reviewed by Masood Lohar
|But Elizabeth, if the world has no Cinderellas and there are "Goliaths" on both sides, what is the reason for living. The "balance" is only possible when a cinderella is there to outscale the Goliath.
I respect your views and even though i don't agree with the topic your poem is very powerful and intelligent.
|Reviewed by Cles Wilson
|Great job. I liked this...|
|Reviewed by Ronald Hull
|A good start on a feminest writing career. Don't let those creetins get to ya.
|Reviewed by Ron Dondiego
|I enjoyed reading your poem very much. It had a very powerful message. Let's be thankful most men are not like that anymore, well, hopefully not.|
|Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU
Contents and poetic essence are very rich.
"Property" is a powerful poem striking the good sense of
You have the tools and the poetic soul.
Never rest Your pen, Poet!
Please consider revising this writing.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
|Reviewed by Richard Christopher Suarez
I have so much to say about what you've stated so creatively here;
I was raised by both my parents and I love them both because
without being stuffy my mother has always been the perfect example
of what being a woman and a lady truly means; An ADULT FENIMINE
Individual with morals, ideals , ethics, decency and spiritual
responsibilty that comes with being a person , while my father was
super masculine, he supported in every way naturally to his person.,
the adult male showing the sex difference as just that.
Both adults entitled to mutual rspect , rights, consideration and
In fact , because my mother carried us each ,( all four) for nine
months, he fortified her authority and believe me, he was one of the strongest, street wise and book smart ,macho men I will ever know, but
his masculinity only propelled him higher into the importance of the
female Adult Individual and the emphasis taught to us as kids was;
Woman are to be up-held ; as mothers, sisters , daughters and one day as wives....always and first as indivduals.
It's my personal opinion that women are naturally smarter than men
because the balance exists in this way;
Men are stronger physically and they protect the faimly on that level
women are stronger mentally and they protect the famlily on that level.
I hope this made the positive sense I set out for it to?
Rich Criso Suarez
|Reviewed by Jim Dunlap
|Reviewed by Peter Paton
This is a marvellous and honest endeavour , and probably true
|Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
|Reviewed by Nicholas Stember
|Excellently done ~smile~ Very intense and full of emotion.|