|Reviewed by Diana Legun
|When reading the first two lines, I felt an immediate kinship to the words: "There they are...", as though I was 'them' both, and this is a startling reaction which I like. Then, "They do not hate, but curious," . . . more identifying with 'them' I found. After reading the last line, I was adding the opposite, to the 'shame' and 'doom', the opposite being inherently....curiousity and 'growth'. Heftily-packed eight lines, which for me contain both shadow and light. ~~ Diana|
|Reviewed by Mary Ann Biddinger
The Garden of Eden bestowed curosity.
Splendid thoughts upon centuries passing.
Lady Mary Ann
|Reviewed by Adriaen Valerius (Reader)
|This story has been passed on for thousands and thousands of years before it was written down for the first time.
Hand down a story to five people and see what is left of it.
But it still keeps intriguing.
I good re-written summery Jerry
|Reviewed by Vivian Dawson
|Ages old, but so cleverly
re written *Jerry* of
|Reviewed by Odin Roark
|For all those who embrace the supernatural, sin is sin is sin. For those of different subscription, there is often a persuasive argument as to the origin of the species' evil. Of course there is always the trumpeting voice of Reed to brainwash the minions that justified deceit is not a sin. Always an interesting debate, this so called right hand of God espousing sin as sin, while the stealth of the left hand of his so-called messengers scam millions of dollars from the innocent and the ignorant in his name. Of course, such opinion is backed by "fact check" which remains a dirty word for the hucksters' goals. One can only hope, as your work here posits, that both the metaphoric, as well as the more pointed identity of the "murderer," someday gets its due.|
|Reviewed by Morgan Merriweather
|Age old story and never loses it's interest for sure.|
|Reviewed by Lily of Lough Neagh C. Dennis-Woosley
|A story that many know of like many famous stories
Nice write Jerry :)
Love and Light
|Reviewed by Laura Fall
|A deep and meaningful write as always great poetry Laura|
|Reviewed by Joy Hale
|Eve was fooled by the snake called Satan and was weak in her ways. Adam followed suit. Eve's punishment was to have pain in childbirth ... passed on to all women forever! I'd like to have a few words with this lady!! Clever way of writing about original sin, Jerry. Very good.
Joy L. Hale
|Reviewed by Ronald Hull
|Jewish guys wrote this fable to make sure that their subjects toed the line, like those in power always do. No one should ever be ashamed of living free. But people should be ashamed of destroying our natural Eden, our environment, our source of food and life, for-profit, left to future generations to deal with.
|Reviewed by Budd Nelson
|again my friend you put a definate different spin on things, for us to contemplate
|Reviewed by Jane Noponen Perinacci
|There you have it...original sin! Great way to put it!!