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blue door and bar flies (flipside of the curtain call)
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jeanne rene watson
Tuesday, January 27, 2004
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not all dreams in hollywood are bright
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off sunset blvd Jay behind the bar was a good keeper when you’d trip thru the blue door into his low-watt dreams and neon hangovers he’d flash his dandy smile and wipe the glass clean for the next round of beer and shots of tequila for you and for Al, the drunk lawyer who dropped by each day in between depositions of life’s excuses
Jay, the soul keeper set up the chasers for you and for Dan, the aging out-of-work actor who bet on his dimples and sexy cleft chin to charm his way into your reason as to why the blue door
and Jay kept the peanuts filled up to the top over in the corner of the make-shift cabana where we all made love to the blackballed pool table and swayed the wishful night moves round the lonesome jukebox
and we were all welcome come hell or high water thru the blue door but Jay the bar keeper kept a stool just for Lizzy who smelled of Channel poured over the street and whose legs were long and dim witted smile was sweet when she stood inside the blue door
so Lizzy would laugh with the world at the top of a red leather stool that kept her love spinning and they'd slip thru the door of untapped delusion stacked in crates at the back of the cabana to lick Lizzy's delight because Al, the drunk lawyer and Dan, the matinee idol along with the hungry cue sticks all pooled their money together and Jay added a tip for Lizzy’s health and welfare that she bought on the street
come again Lizzy
come 2 am he'd wipe down the counter and dumped the left over peanuts back in jar to be eaten tomorrow because the image in the mirror turned off the lights caughting Jay’s eye and gave him a wink but there was no cleft in his chin as he locked the blue door at the far end of sunset blvd
jeanne rene 1/04
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| Reviewed by John Leko |
2/10/2008 |
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...many colors here...sides to be read...and swatted characters...with scent of Channel and peanuts...make this a damn good piece.
excellent imagery jeanne...
John |
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| Reviewed by Morning Star |
1/5/2008 |
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Love how your words captured
Such beautiful imagery and vividness!!
Stunning Write!!
Love Peace and hugsss....Morning Star |
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| Reviewed by Sir Leonardo |
12/28/2007 |
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| Loved the images you wrote here-made me think I was actually there |
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| Reviewed by Christian Ward |
12/7/2007 |
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| I like the image of 'low-watt dreams'. Good metaphor. An enjoyable narrative poem. |
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| Reviewed by Charlie |
11/17/2007 |
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| Holy, Holy Cow! What a story, and how you tell it.... awesome! --Charlie |
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| Reviewed by Axilea Uzumcuoglu |
10/5/2007 |
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Excellent writing skills that make the reader drink until the last drop, read until the last word.
Axilea |
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| Reviewed by No Longer Member (Reader) |
1/28/2004 |
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| I was a fly in some of those bars, swatted at often, flying to bigger and better glasses |
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| Reviewed by Gaye Dale (Reader) |
1/28/2004 |
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This is VIVID!
I enjoyed this brilliantly portrayed picture of the down side.
Eye catching title! |
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