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Beheaded
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Kate Burnside
Sunday, November 01, 2009
Rated "PG13" by the Author.
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... seems an appropriate weekend to post this, though I have been struck by the thoughts herein before now. Based on fact, I think, according to a few things I've read, though I haven't Googled the medical side.
Apart from this, hope you've all weathered Halloween more-or-less intact! :)) I'm afraid I shall always be the spectre at the feast on this particular holiday as I hate Halloween, which is no big deal over here, but guess it might seem extraordinary over with you where it is more one Big Carnival. Believing, as I do, that all life is spiritually governed, it seems ludicrous to me to actively stir up more provocation for fear and unpleasantness than already exists, even if it IS only in jest. But maybe that's just me. Anyways, thought I'd just like to square that one, in case peeps was wonderin! Be well, people! :)) xx
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BEHEADED
Words are the spoken
voice of the heart
so, if body from lips
is sundered apart,
if someone should take
that long-bladed knife
and, with it, seek to
end mortal life
by laying your neck on
a scooped wooden block
and with one flashing blow
deliver that shock
which severs your orb
to soiled basket below,
(yet your brain is alive
and continues to know),
in the two minutes it takes
before conscious is lost
what would you deliver
(without fearing the cost)
as they lift up your crown
by hair of your head
to prove to those watching
you’re now more than dead?
To whom would you speak
those last words before night
(aware of the faintness
that’s stealing your fight)?
Should they offer you up
served on sleek silver platter
what oaths would you curse,
what foolery natter?
Would you plains-peak some bile
to one that deserves it
or confess out your stains,
your soul to preserve it?
What secrets divulge –
loving, sacred or brave –
that otherwise die with you,
laid low in the grave?
To whom must you go,
craving pay-back or kiss,
before you depart,
head, heart, body,
to bliss?
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| Reviewed by Sheila Roy |
11/13/2009 |
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One of your best, Kate. The rhythm in this poem makes your words feel like a legend. You recreate several more Tudor moments for me. What stirred me the most was the line about last words. Very thought provoking. It would depend on the circumstances, of course, but I would want to speak my peace. Hugs,
Sheila |
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| Reviewed by blue soplain |
11/11/2009 |
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clever cleavering little sonnetish thing :)
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| Reviewed by Kate Clifford |
11/8/2009 |
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| Very orginal and great questions. |
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| Reviewed by Gianetta Ellis |
11/7/2009 |
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| This, again, is terrific writing. I love the intellect, wit and spirit behind your overall composition that is weaved so beautifully with the most remarkable word choices and effortless, seamless rhyme. Your imagery is clear and cutting (pardon the pun) and your transition from teasing the mind's eye to stimulating the reader's hypothetical reflection is smooth and easeful. |
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| Reviewed by Dale Clark |
11/5/2009 |
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so if beheaded what would I say... where did my bod go lol
this is rich, Kate... I don't care for Halloween either |
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| Reviewed by Dallas D'Angelo-Gary |
11/5/2009 |
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| Good qestions all, Kate. Nicely done. I doubt, though, that there would be any voice, with the larynx gone. |
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| Reviewed by Susan de Vegter |
11/3/2009 |
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Take a bow Kate and keep your head held high. You are one of the best. Love,
Susan |
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| Reviewed by Debby Rosenberg |
11/3/2009 |
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i imagine an unawakened soul would find all sorts of thoughts ready to blurt forth whereas the master of consciousness would already have left the building :)
as to Halloween...I find a way to laugh at it and neither polarize myself to fear or adoration...and its a lovely excuse to wear orange and brown :) |
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| Reviewed by Cryssa C |
11/3/2009 |
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Chilling in some ways... yet not at all, but rather reflective and contemplative... It made me think.
Cryssa
P.S. And for the record... I detest Halloween for the same reasons and don't allow much for decorations other than happy pumpkins at my home...and no morbid or scary costumes. I dislike the darkness of Halloween and don't enjoy the sugar overload and greed that it brings either... :~) |
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| Reviewed by Paul Berube |
11/2/2009 |
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Kate,
I see your point. It all makes me wonder where Alice's Queen of Hearts HEART was at. Do you think the thought process is really the last to go? Scary thought. Bless You Always, Paul. |
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| Reviewed by Patrick Granfors |
11/2/2009 |
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| For one who doesn't favor Halloween this is a pretty chilling visual offering. It is softened however with some thought provoking questions. Don't know what I'd do. Don't want to find out either. Excellent work. Patrick |
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| Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner |
11/2/2009 |
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Chillingly, effectively penned, as only you can do - I am jealous, Kate, jealous! To write like this ... sigh.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. |
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| Reviewed by Dawn Wilson |
11/2/2009 |
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| Kate, what can I say that hasn't been said?! The imagery, fantastic...chilling, powerful, original....but what else could be expected from you?! |
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| Reviewed by Charlie |
11/1/2009 |
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Great mind, yours! Great questions to ponder too.
I think I'd be write in the midst of deciding when, Whoops! Too bad! Too late! ...and then on to my Maker. What will I say before Him? Crash, knees bowed, head on floor, prostrating self--my ridiculous self--before Him. He's the only one who knows my heart, and I can only vaguely hope that the good I do will account for something, and He'll make up for what I lack. --Charlie |
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
11/1/2009 |
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| the important factor when departing is to remain whole ... luv the visuals in this poem ... |
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| Reviewed by John Flanagan |
11/1/2009 |
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From Robespierre to John the Baptist to the final thoughts of the dying you cover the ground, Kate, with passion and blood, literally; the second stanza is chilling but thankfully you switch to more philosophical, reflective mood after that and the quick rhymes help to diffuse tension and starkness. Love it!
John |
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| Reviewed by Sherry Heim |
11/1/2009 |
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Well, you leave me breathless with your intense visuals in this poem, Kate. More than the fantasies of Halloween, this rings solidly of execution for deeds, assumed or actual;like the burning of the witches, which so often took the lives of the sages, seers or healers. I got chills reading this, but did I read it again??? You bet I did. Fantastic job, Kate, Kudos!
Take care,
Sherry
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| Reviewed by Christine Alwin |
11/1/2009 |
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oh my Kate, What a question and write...I am wowed...great visuals and I sure hope they are out of MY head before I go to bed :)...at least it is still attached to my body..my Halloween was at a church with little bumble bees and butterflies lol
Christine |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
11/1/2009 |
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| Riviting read, quite provocative,and superb,as per usual given the Kate treatment! ;-)...ET |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
11/1/2009 |
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Chilling and meaningful, this certainly gives the reader pause for reflection. Thank you, Kate. Love and best wishes,
Regis |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
11/1/2009 |
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Enjoyed this sweet Kate, I once wrote a short story...semi horror, of a man who after having a heade transplant awoke to find the body they had transplanted him to was a woman...the moral, ethical and sexual questions that it would truly arise. Would your wife still be your wife, would you now be your childrens' othe mother...interesting but I digress...great write KATE enjoyed.
hugs
fee |
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| Reviewed by Rebekah Rosie Lang |
11/1/2009 |
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Loved it! Good rhyming too!
Thanks for the heads up! (Ha)
Beckers |
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| Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan |
11/1/2009 |
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| gruesome for sure but thought provoking--not much for halloeen myself :) |
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| Reviewed by Steve Chering |
11/1/2009 |
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No one really knows how long it takes to lose ones sences-since no one has every been able to answer that question after thehead rolled off down the lane, into ditch and lost,,lol
but the next time I see a body-less head,,I'll ask for you,,lol
great poem ..Steve |
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| Reviewed by Amber Moonstone |
11/1/2009 |
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To be beheaded is the severing of mind and soul, however I believe the soul lives on and after the brain and body are dead, the soul continues to know. I love the two last stanzas, they sum up your message quite well. I have one big secret and I am not telling!!!! lol
You will have to behead me to find out!
Peace, love, and light,
Amber "V" |
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| Reviewed by Art Sun |
11/1/2009 |
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An after thought of a Holloween treat Kate, we could view it in two ways, one the eiry thought of a poem of the Hollow night, and two the reality of those moments of death experienced by oh so many. Either way you bring us to a realization that death is a part of everything, even within the craziness of celebration it surrounds us...
nice work Kate...
Art Sun... |
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| Reviewed by La Belle Rouge |
11/1/2009 |
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| Being beheaded is a primal fear and you have chilled me to the bones Kate, even if you didn't mean to. |
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| Reviewed by Jerry Bolton |
11/1/2009 |
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| I totally agree with you on Halloween, although when I was younger I really got into it / It is like so many of our holiday's, it is of a monetary value / I have often wondered about the beheading / On the one hand it does seem to be the "quickest" and more humane way of ending one's life, but it stands to reason that the brain will still function a few seconds after death / There are certain people don't care if their execution is humane or not / Child predators is but one class of that bunch . . . Enjoyed this . . . |
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| Reviewed by George Carroll |
11/1/2009 |
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| Maybe a last spit in the eye would be appropriate for the beheader from the beheaded. |
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| Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado |
11/1/2009 |
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Good thoughts here, Kate; well done! BRAVA!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn in Texas. :D |
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| Reviewed by LadyJtalks LadyJzTalkZone |
11/1/2009 |
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| Good write and the thought to ponder. LadyJ |
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| Reviewed by Georg Mateos |
11/1/2009 |
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Some women had really lost their heads for a man an yet, they seems unable to stop talking about!!! LOL
Georg
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