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John T Banasiewicz Jr

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by John T Banasiewicz Jr
Thursday, July 22, 2004
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Dark as moon light slips thru the low hanging clouds

Slipping thru the jungle underbrush not making a noise

Only thing I feel is my sweat dripping from my brow

Step by step slowly I move until I see a shadow in the distance

Stopping to stare thru the dense foliage only making out a silhouette

Knowing this is my target tonight

Lowering my body to lie on the ground

I become like a snake to just slither along

Each inch becoming more deadly than a cobra

Not rushing taking my time planning how I shall strike

Now I am so close I smell the body odor

Hear his heart pounding and see eyes with fear

Within arm reach, lying still to watch before I strike

Then without warning like a cobra I strike

With arm around his chest holding tight

My free hand uses the knife

Swift and without a sound

My victim is left dead on the ground


John Thomas Banasiewicz Jr

Copyright 2004



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Reviewed by Rose L 8/1/2004
Knowing you as I do, I know the circumstances surrounding this poem. It's very interesting to me that folks see it in so many lights - perhaps a positive testament to the true nature of this subject - time nor place have an anchor on it.

You put us right in the eyes of this killer - a rare glimpse from the other point of view.

Well done.

Reviewed by Kate Burnside 7/31/2004
Hmm... for me this would have been difficult to do as I am not good at living without conclusions!! At least, you have in fact completed the suspense-filled scenario here, but have left us, I am sure, with many nagging questions as to who, what, when, why...etc! This is therefore, in my book, a very accomplished work as you leave us with lots to think about and ponder on! Well done! Thank you and take care!!!! Kate x
Reviewed by Mary Quire 7/29/2004
Very powerful and very well written.

Reviewed by Amira van Kerk 7/29/2004
That is quite something.
What or who is the victim?? I somehow got the impression it's a human being. Which makes the whole poem scary; leaving the question open: Why???
Excellent write though.
Reviewed by A Serviceable Villain 7/28/2004
Tommy -

Haunting prose - well-conceived and written!

Reviewed by Katy Walsvik 7/24/2004
Yikes, Tommy.. though not lengthy, I found myself reading slowly, at the pace of the suspense.. only dropping a line at a time, scrolling, reading... you have a knack for delivering some full-impact poetry! This is superb! I was there, indeed! katy xox.
Reviewed by Evelyn Simon 7/23/2004
Excellent. Well done.
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader) 7/23/2004
Good. I want you for my team.
Reviewed by Tinka Boukes 7/23/2004
Oh Boy this is scary...but masterfully penned Tommy!!

Love Tinka
Reviewed by Fletcher Bailey (Reader) 7/22/2004
Hi this one gives me goose bumps...excellent lead up to the final kill...great poem...Fletcher B
Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger 7/22/2004
Tommy, I read and re-read this powerful, teeth-clenching, heart-stopping, nerve-shattering write, and just had to review it before I went to bed. (not that I will be able to sleep now mind you) Its just an absolutely incredible well-written piece. One must do what one must do. Excellent work my friend. Have a great weekend.
Reviewed by jude forese 7/22/2004
excellent poetic characterization of a terrorist ...
Reviewed by E T Waldron 7/22/2004
Wow! Now I know what terrorism is! Superb write Tommy!
Wonder what brought it on!?
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson 7/22/2004
I agree with Sandie, and is
excellently penned....
Reviewed by Sandie Angel 7/22/2004
Wow! This was dark and scary!!!!! Well-done John!

Sandie May Angel
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