Breathe (for my Dad)
by Michelle Close Mills
Monday, April 11, 2005
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For those suffering with emphysema, like my father...may they never know his pain.
He gazes outside,
no longer embracing…
a world meant for those
who can breathe.
and loads of regrets…
for cigarettes smoked,
for mottled, scarred lungs…
for time lost
with each drag he took.
I sit watching this man,
who vanquished my foes,
who fed me,
who clothed me,
who helped give me life,
I hold tightly to faith…
praying for miracles…
Yearning to return
a part of my life…
so my Daddy
may continue to breathe.
Michelle Close Mills ©
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|Reviewed by Richard Christopher Suarez
I really think this is outrageous i a great way! Exqusitely Honest and Brave because there's a courage to appreciated when one write such moving pieces as you have just very creatively done!
I love it. I saw my Father Dying and i found my sister just 2 years
after...just 2 ago. I applaud you for an incredibly moving poem .
You definitely reached me.
Rich Criso Suarez
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|A touching poetic offering, Michelle. Your verses leave no doubt in the reader's mind. Well done. Love and peace to you. Regis|
|Reviewed by C. J. Stevens
|This is a beautiful poem! It touches the heart as few poems do. The words are so eloquent and simple, the emotion is so poignant.
|Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
|I have emphysema also. Unlike a lot of people I do not blame anyone. Especially I do not blame the makers of cigarettes. We knew they were bad for us way back when we were kids, that's why we used to call them cancer sticks. I, and everyone else that smoked, made their own choices because no one thinks it will happen to them.|
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
That picture is breathtaking. And so is this write--you may have saved many lives today from the ravages of the stormcloud of emphysema and lung disease, caused by smoking.
I am a smoker. I know, I know it's not good for me, but I'm hooked into them tighter than Tillie. I've tried to quit, and TRUST me, ask Karen, I am a pure tee bitch if I don't have a ciggie. I am rude, crude and don't give a damn, ya know? Pray for me--
Thank you, dear Poet, for touching my soul (lungs?) today--I'm saving this one to read again and again. Perhaps it's just what I need to say "NO"!
The best of love, luck and many prayers to your father--and to you, for watching him decline.
(((HUGS))) and *tears*, and much love, Karla. *tears, tears, tears*
|Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado
|emphysema is hell for all who are caught in its gasping, smothering grip...you never know how it is to be able to breathe until you can't do it; and that is a very scary thing to have to live with. my aunt had emphysema, and it was hard to see her suffering. hope things turn out better for your daddy; he (and you) are in my prayers! powerful write, michelle; very well done! brava!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in tx., karen lynn. :(
|Reviewed by Paul Williams
|A powerfully touching write Michelle...Bless you, I hope things turn out for the best. What a beautiful picture too.
|Reviewed by D May (Reader)
|Oh Michelle, this is so...painful. You have written this well and your words jump at the reader. So well done, my friend. Hugs to you.
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|Painful read...I know little about this ...because my one son suffers fron asthma!!
Love & Hugs Tinka
|Reviewed by Susan Barton (Reader)
|Blessings on you!|
|Reviewed by Dawn Richerson
|Michelle, he breathes easier with your love close to his heart. This was painful, but so beautiful. I could feel the love jump right off the page. Blessings to you and to your father. Dawn|
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Michelle,bless you, this is so moving. I've nursed patients with
Emphysema and one of my very good friends had it.I will keep you and your your Dad in thoughts and prayer, hoping God will ease his pain and surround him with comfort.I'm glad he has you to love and pray for him. Keep the faith!