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| Reviewed by Johanna Fields |
9/21/2009 |
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| Carole,This is lovely done Johanna |
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| Reviewed by Annabel Sheila |
9/1/2009 |
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Wow! Your crafting of words is beautifully done! Amazing...so glad I found your work!
Anna |
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| Reviewed by Kate Burnside |
8/26/2009 |
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| Beautiful proposition and transition here, Carole. The rhythm of your writing follows the course of your thoughts and indeed this poem breathes easy and lightly. You have captured this ambiguous conscious state vividly and so clealy. It's certainly not an easy one to define, but you have taken us there so that we can almost experience while yet being fully awake! Love your conclusion, too. TY Kate xx |
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| Reviewed by Jon Willey |
8/24/2009 |
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| the subconscious is an integral friend and foe of obscurity -- both judge and jury if you will -- so that when dawn is imminent, reality attacks our senses, seeking out the surreal in spasmodic fits of welcome and denial -- dawn is a beautiful experience, albeit profusely complicated -- as you beautifully proclaim, "a slippery landscape" -- until at last, we succomb to the grip of ambiguity -- "then dawn arrives" -- and we relinquish the rites of nocturnal bliss -- yes Carole, I love the way you have captured this daily experience -- peace and love my dear friend -- Jon Michael |
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| Reviewed by Mark Lichterman |
8/24/2009 |
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Carole, how absolutely lovely. Your command of words and your knowledge of where and how to use them is wonderful. A truly "dreamy" poem.
Your friend, Mark |
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| Reviewed by Shay White |
8/24/2009 |
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| A nice way to awaken from a sweet dream into the reality of a new day. Thanks for sharing! |
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| Reviewed by Georg Mateos |
8/24/2009 |
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When dawn arrives, morning will give me a big yawn inviting me to sleep a little longer...
Georg
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| Reviewed by Michelle Mead |
8/23/2009 |
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| Great ending-the picture really adds to the feelings in the poem and vice versa, good stuff. |
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| Reviewed by Carin' Spirit |
8/23/2009 |
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| Totally Awesome! |
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| Reviewed by John Flanagan |
8/23/2009 |
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Carole,
Dawn is when I know I have a chance at another day...this speaks to me strongly and your rendering is very fine indeed.
John |
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| Reviewed by Lori Moore |
8/23/2009 |
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| Very creative. |
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
8/23/2009 |
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| i like the alternating states of consciousness expressed within this poem ... |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
8/23/2009 |
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Like the way you blended reality and imagination into these precious lines to create a bedtime story that offers release and at the same time hope for the morrow.
hugs
fee |
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| Reviewed by Liana Margiva |
8/23/2009 |
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| 'Then dawn arrives pulling you farther into today covering the illusions believed to be truths with clarity'--------- I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva |
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| Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado |
8/23/2009 |
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Gorgeous, Carole; just fantastic! Well done; brava!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D |
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| Reviewed by Joyce Bell |
8/23/2009 |
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YOU DESCRIBE WITH POETICAL BEAUTY THE PROCESS OF 'WIPING SLEEP OUT OF OUR EYES' - EXCELLENT. THANKS FOR SHARING AND BLESSINGS.
JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
8/23/2009 |
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Then dawn arrives
pulling you farther into today
covering the illusions
believed to be truths
with clarity
This poem "speaks" to me, Carole. Thank you. Love and best wishes,
Regis
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