by Megan D Bossler
Friday, May 18, 2001
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Uniqueness is suddenly unpopular in the people of this world. Unpopularity is despised. Being despised is unacceptable; being unaccepted is despised. Round and round we go, in an endless circle of identity.
I hope the spin stops on individuality.
French manicures among hangnails,
False eyelashes and an overdose of mascara.
Another lost identity;
One more vicious mind raped
And robbed of a discreet identity matrix.
Burying their heads in the text of pages,
They print the ink of deceit subconsciously on their faces,
And feel they must rhyme and advocate hatred
Of individuality and beliefs, and become hypocrites on stages.
Pink swans among ocean waves,
An aloof cow basks in white sand.
Unbiased clouds swim through the vast sky,
Blue as a reflection of the ocean;
And we ice skate on the sea,
Blue as a reflection of the sky.
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|Reviewed by William DeVault
|I like the imagery, very well done|
|Reviewed by Cliff Daigle
|Makes me want to write in rhyme again, very nicely done.|
|Reviewed by Josh Jenks
|I feel I can connect with you on this poem simply because I too know the complex "matrix" swirling around High School(yeah, I'm only 18 =/ Graduating in five days... *sigh*) Anyhow, I'll basically go through stanza by stanza and explain what I thought...
Stanza #1. Good, I like the way you give some examples and suddenly slam us with "One more vicious mind raped", Was the mind vicious before it was raped of the identity?
Stanza #2. I like the way you explain that they print a false ink and have to "rhyme" and have to hate certain individuals or beliefs.
Stanza #3. You use extensive color and landscape/nature imagery in this one, which is up my alley.
Overall : I liked it.