|Reviewed by Sandra Mushi
|Says so much! Great haiku, Pacific!
|Reviewed by Kate Burnside
|I take it this is 5-7-5 three lines and that the "Experiment" is either a statement or an exhortation?! And I like the hook of the title, adding yet another dimension to 17 syllables that already suggest and bring to mind far more images than are actually alluded to. Again, for me and my preoccupation with Spain, very Dali-esque: reminds me of something that I was toying with in my Big Wave write.
Thank you so much, too, for your ever-helpful comments. Had wondered whether you would find "frail flesh" too much of an easy phrase in Press Reset - and you are right about the straining for effect with the distancing of the final line in each stanza: smacks a bit of pretension! Significance should be quietly earned and not affected. TY Kate xx
|Reviewed by Sandie Angel
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
|That desert sounds like it needs a good watering...|
|Reviewed by Sherry Heim
|A perfect Haiku should say a lot in a few words and create many thoughts and visuals for the reader. You scored a perfect 10 with this one, Pacific.
|Reviewed by jude forese
|a successful experiment mapping out the distance between two souls ... brilliant!|
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|So much said with such an economy of words. Excellent haiku. Thank you. Love and peace. Regis|
|Reviewed by Aberjhani
|Excellent write that zooms straight into the heart of a unique compelling image filled with a moving depth of need and longing.|
|Reviewed by George Carroll
|A first rate Senryu|
|Reviewed by Mr. Ed
|A most thought provoking poetic experiment, Pacific Ink.|
|Reviewed by Peter Paton
|You map out out an intriguing composition Pacific !
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