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a POETIC TALE of innocent love, tragic loss, and ultimate hope ...
art: rlc
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It’d been many years
Since they’d fluxed together
Hidden away from levering eyes
And the endless flowing judgments
Of embittered men given to destruction
Theirs was
The purest of love
That burst open fragrantly
When it was stirred
She was to him,
In those early years, a
Vision of unsullied pearls
Arrayed on pure black sand,
And he to her a loving protector
Keeping at bay all that threatened,
And both walked the prototypic paths
Hungry to animate their treasured dreams
And between them
Arrant water flowed and,
In the fortress they’d built, many
Memories were (safely hidden) from
The schemes of malefic forces bent on the
Dissemination of loves steadfast bond
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Hidden
Far above them
A lofty throne sat on a
Vast floor of tessellated crystal
Excelling in splendor and magnificence,
And, roundabout, myriads of ageless Watchers
Assented to the unfeigned beauty of innocent love.
Expressed in all purity these witnesses lauded the giving
Of one’s heart to another in whiteness sincerity and purpose,
So they forged in all hope [together] through every
Challenge placed before them
But the years passed and
Their hearts were weighed down
With all the difficulties of this world
And when he was renounced by her
This shadow of former self came forth
Manipulative,
Despondent,
Embittered,
Garrulous,
Stubborn,
Incapable of intimacy,
Given to substance and salacious intrigues,
A shadow-man creeping his way along defiled paths,
Straining to mollify those for whom he had no deference -
A bankrupted idealist accepting there was little now to
Life other than his failures and wretchedness,
Nothing above, nothing below,
Nothing at all to live for
Nothing but misery
No one to trust
No hope
Nil
O
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Still,
Far above him,
Was a lofty throne on a
Vast floor of pure tessellated crystal,
Excelling in great splendor and magnificence,
And roundabout this Great Glory, whom no eye
Could behold, ten thousand thousands of everlasting
Watchers were looking down with tears and interceding
For another wounded soul who had lost his way
richard lloyd cederberg
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| Reviewed by Sheila Roy |
1/15/2011 |
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Richard,
This piece easily could have been written about a friend of mine. For me, the 3rd-to-last verse resounds like a drum. Truly, I think most of middle America is shifting towards this feeling. I like how you developed the purity of this relationship, too, especially since we live in a world where folks marry for all the wrong reasons. Excellent piece. Love and Hugs,
Sheila |
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
1/14/2011 |
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| exceptionally penned ... visually, emotionally and contemplatively stimulating ... |
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| Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan |
1/13/2011 |
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| this is such a tale of humanity and brokenness-well written |
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| Reviewed by Douglas Bentley |
1/13/2011 |
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Every time I read your poetry Richard you amaze me!
This poem is so personal
Yet speaks to everyone
Very Well Done!!
db |
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| Reviewed by La Belle Rouge Poetess Of The Heart |
1/12/2011 |
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| I am always amazed at your poetry, the depth, the beauty. You not only touch the emotions you stimulate the brain. Can it really be completely lost, innocence? Or is it just covered with the dirt of life? |
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| Reviewed by Amor Sabor |
1/12/2011 |
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| Pure genious presented here in these verses forming poetic perfection. |
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| Reviewed by Gene Williamson |
1/12/2011 |
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Richard, not only am I moved immensely by this poetic tale,
but again I am overhelmed by the depth and erudition of your
magical and matchless skill with the pen. Yours in great
and sincere admiration. -gene. |
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| Reviewed by stan nassano |
1/12/2011 |
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Interesting opening, and a great wrapup,love the progression to the ending
.......good stuff
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| Reviewed by John Flanagan |
1/12/2011 |
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For me, Richard, this has Garden of Eden overtures as well as the hope belief engenders and then the disillusionment of lost and unfulfilled dreams...you speak of worldly ambitions and attempts but, too, of spirituality and the difficulties of attainment.
Kudos!
John |
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| Reviewed by Liana Margiva |
1/12/2011 |
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| EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! POWERFUL,GOLDEN WORDS!!!!!!!!! MOST TALENTED!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I JUST LOVE THIS HEAVENLY BEAUTY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva |
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| Reviewed by Karen Palumbo |
1/11/2011 |
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Such solemn sadness to find one's self alone under the watchers who cry for the depth of a lost soul...
Be always safe,
Karen |
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| Reviewed by Peter Schlosser (Reader) |
1/11/2011 |
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| book of enoch jumps and weaves through contemporary shakespearean-esque poetic tale of love, tragedy, plight of man and spirit, reaches inside, outside, upward, connects the fragility and frailty of the human condition straight into the reader's heart, yet lends hope and everlasting assurance that the watchers above, the spirit god, ever-present, omnipotent, weak hands turn over into strong, sense of purpose and contentment is never lost. microcosm of the human epic brilliantly brushed with your typical master-stroke of artistry and perfection, reveals the light between. tremendous!! |
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| Reviewed by Roger Wayne Eberle |
1/11/2011 |
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| venturesome, indeed, this vista of years bordering on infinite progression... discursive yet elegant, digressive, yet eloquent... there are movements here too deep for words, wound expressively to... vertical ellipses that says so much without saying anything at all, and yet what pulls inexorably towards that low point, punctuated with periodic intensity by the push towards intercessory prayer... that is the fierce push and pull at the heart of your masterpiece.... rare and rarely indeed is the poem that manages so well to convey the vicissitudes of a lifespan within the frameless work of infinite wisdom and grace... you my friend, you have a gift. |
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| Reviewed by Christine Tsen |
1/11/2011 |
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This reader finds this a rare treasure of a poem. Rendered in such an interesting way, and almost musical in nature.
Blessings,
Christine |
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| Reviewed by The Poetess |
1/11/2011 |
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| This is a work of art, both visually and poeticly. |
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| Reviewed by Debby Rosenberg |
1/11/2011 |
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| wow, moving...seriously engages the reader...this describes a majority of western man, clueless to "above" and have only lived in the illusion of the material world. Powerful write Richard. |
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| Reviewed by Ed Matlack |
1/11/2011 |
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| Lost innocence on this end so very long ago, not sure I want it back, even if I could...e |
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