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| Reviewed by Selena Dobbin-Gillis |
8/6/2007 |
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A beautiful poem dear sis, looking forward to the second part.
Love & hugs |
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| Reviewed by LadyJtalks LadyJzTalkZone (Reader) |
8/5/2007 |
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| You've penned a beautiful moment in your life. Thank you for sharing. I know that lonely moment you speak of. When the illusion that the first marriage would last forever. Lady J |
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| Reviewed by George Thompson |
8/5/2007 |
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One word: EXCELLENT!! THIS is worthwhile reading!!
George |
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| Reviewed by Chantilly Lace (Reader) |
8/5/2007 |
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| AS I said before Excellent rose...HUgss |
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| Reviewed by Amber Moonstone |
8/5/2007 |
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Rose,
I have been there, I am still trying to get that deep relationship out of my head..It takes time, and that time is in Rose time!!!!
Peace, Love, and Light,
Amber "V" |
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| Reviewed by ~ Holly Harbridge (Reader) |
8/5/2007 |
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| An intense write Rose, love Holly |
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| Reviewed by MaryGrace Patterson |
8/5/2007 |
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| I can really relate to this! I wrote a poem called ,," A Second Chance" and "Loves Enchanted Time". They tell about finding my true love. They are posted on AD. Sometimes we rush into marriage when we're young or vulnerable and it doesn't always work out.......M |
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| Reviewed by Cedric III |
8/4/2007 |
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For the hurt I’d hidden deep inside,
Could be washed out with the rocks.
could or couldnt be...?
perhaps you were waiting for them TO be washed...?
im not sure... something in this line doesnt quite work...?
He sat and listened to me attentively,
To every word I sigh,
you should prolly think about changing 'i sigh' to 'i'd sigh' or 'i sighed' to keep the tense all the same throughout the piece
i think 'stroll' is a most delightful word.
it gives one the illusion of unhurried moving through life...
in this case the idea of strolling through ones soul sounds very... cathartic.
i think if you dont take the occaisional stroll through your soul/emotions/etc then you become very out of touch with your feelings and your ability to move on from hurts and pain is impaired.
i also think beaches are the most magical things.
the way the waves pound against the shore when youre angry and the way they sand with the sand when your dancing and singing for joy...
i shall have to try and catch the second party of your story because i feel you left this at the crucial moment haha! |
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| Reviewed by Southern Comfort |
8/4/2007 |
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Oh Beautiful Rose! This was so beautiful and heart touching! It deeply touched my heart and misted my eyes. I can't wait fur part 2.
LOVE YA! SC |
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| Reviewed by Victor Buhagiar (Reader) |
8/4/2007 |
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| Yes it is always a pity when one marries quickly and so many do so for the wrong reason. I heard this on Italian TV. They married after three nights they met because their lovemaking was wonderful. Separated after three days of real life. Makes one wonder. Victor |
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| Reviewed by Barbara Smith |
8/4/2007 |
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| Rose, releasing and cleansing the soul is the only way to a cure. You never really know a person until you've been with them for a while. You've expressed the hurt and pain clearly and in this writing & I can't wait to read Part 2. God Bless. |
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| Reviewed by Gloria Gay |
8/4/2007 |
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| Baring your soul with such heartfelt warmth and ease is truly poetic, Rose and many people can identify with your very personal account. |
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| Reviewed by Connie Faust |
8/4/2007 |
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Very nicely done, Rose. The ocean, or even a lake, in solitude is such a fitting place to look back and look within. I like your picture of your hurt being washed out to sea.
God is the maker of the sea and the refuge from the storms of life.
May He bless and renew your spirit.
Love,
Connie |
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| Reviewed by Mr. Ed |
8/4/2007 |
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| A very heartfelt stroll through your soul, Rose. |
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| Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan |
8/4/2007 |
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| so very well done-a mini look back on a piece of life-very introspective |
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| Reviewed by George Carroll |
8/4/2007 |
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| Insightful write on how love can knock on the door once again and be true. |
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| Reviewed by William Bonilla |
8/4/2007 |
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An excellent write
Of deep feelings felt within
Peace be with you
William
Love & Peace |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
8/4/2007 |
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Part one grabs the heart and the attention as we wonder who this stranger is and I am sure part two will offer the answers. Very good so far Rose...filled with real emotions and feelings. Look forward to the conclusion...
Hugs
Your Cuz |
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