Along The Darkened Path
by Rose M Rideout
Wednesday, July 23, 2008
Rated "G" by the Author.
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Sometimes going for a night time walk can be relaxing and other times scary, it's all according to where you decide to walk and at what hour.
Along The Darkened Path
I walked along the darkened path,
Not knowing what was beyond,
I knew there could be danger,
For a place I did not belong.
Why had I chosen to follow my thoughts,
Which led me far from home,
Now off in the middle of nowhere,
In the debt of the forest alone.
What were the sounds I was hearing,
What sights would there be ahead,
Why did I follow my instincts,
When I could be home in my cozy bed.
What was the sound I just heard,
Who’s shadow is following me,
Too afraid to turn around,
I shiver at what I might see.
A voice is whispering softly,
Not scary, nor frightening at all,
Just the sounds of birds rustling through trees,
For it’s now coming on fall.
Soon they’ll be flying high,
Off to the warmer lands they’ll roam,
The cold weather here would freeze them,
They need the warmth for their home.
Now I’ll just turn myself around,
Go home to where I belong,
For these walks along darkened paths,
At this late hour is wrong.
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|Reviewed by Selena Dobbin-Gillis
|A very detailed piece of work and very imaginative. You are certainly still growing as a poet dear sis.
Love you sis,
|Reviewed by Elizabeth Price
|Great details really add to the tension and haunting quality of this poem. Wonderful. Liz|
|Reviewed by Victoria's Poetry & Voices of Muse
|Rose I Love Your Photograph You Have Choosen!!
Your Dark Walk Was Frightful.....leering...lurking...
Then Actually Very Beautiful :)
Embraced ~ Embrassé
|Reviewed by Axilea MU
|It's interesting to see how the place's atmosphere can awaken fears that are in one's mind and heart. So many questions that you share here, with those softly whispering voices that need to be confronted... just an impression I had. :)
|Reviewed by Kate Burnside
|I'm afraid my vivid imagination and a couple of terrifying experiences as a child/teenager makes me hypersenstive to walking anywhere too alone these days, Rose. But this has such atmosphere, coupled with a gripping train of thought, strongly expressed in both sense and sight. Also love the metaphorical thoughts that are perhaps contained here. Kate xx|
|Reviewed by Bernice Lakota
|Yes, please don't walk in the dark by yourself, there is evil(someone, some crazy lunatic)that might be waiting beyond, I've always heeded to my sisters wise saying "just because you have God in you, doesn't mean you should tempt the devil"|
|Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan
|pretty darn spooky!|
|Reviewed by Karen Palumbo
|Very perceptual photograph! Mysteriously intriguing, yet one that reaches into one's soul for the depth of truth....
Be always safe,
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|To me, this can be interpreted on a number of levels. Nicely done, Rose. Love and best wishes,
|Reviewed by John Flanagan
|You create an atmosphere of uncertainty and tension very well. This is strong, Rose.
|Reviewed by Morning Star
|Beautifully writing and expressed thoughts
Its very dangers to walk the
areas your not familiar with at night
I love the visuals your words captured
Its awesome and dark!
Peace Love and Light...and hugsss....Morning star
|Reviewed by Paul Berube
|Very well done Rose.|
|Reviewed by Staci Gansky-Wagner
|A little dark for you, very well written! enjoyed.|
|Reviewed by Christine Alwin
|.... and the mind can sure get away,,,lol ,,, run run home.|
|Reviewed by Linda Law
|Rose... this work is very much one of those that should be considered exceptional. I believe you have alot more where this came from....keep searching... :-)) lindalaw|
|Reviewed by D Johnson
|Rose, I think this is one of your best...
|Reviewed by Southern Comfort
|OOOOO Sugar! This un was a real insight into yore writer's mind, a writer is always a thinkin drama and sees and hears thangs that other folks ignore! GOOD UN! HUGS! SC|
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
|Wow. Different from you - have me looking over my shoulder! Well done, Rose.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
|Reviewed by Georg Mateos
|And just think, as you go along a disturbed coyote belt out one of those blood curling howls just behind you, your exit going back home will beat olympic track times.
|Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado
|Excellent write, Rose; brava! When I take a walk, I go with someone; have already been threatened a few times a few years back; ever since, I go with a buddy (my twin mostly).
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :(
|Reviewed by Felix Perry
|Had me looking over my shoulder cuz, maybe you'd better Fred to trail along behind you on the Harley...lol Good write though and defiantely breaking out of the box one for you.