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The Story
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Axilea M Uzumcuoglu
Sunday, May 24, 2009
Rated "PG" by the Author.
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"Imagination is more important than knowledge" Albert Einstein
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(So what’s the story?)
It’s in a lonely place
the people are all around
but the bunker is isolated:
it feels strange
to be cut out
and yet, so near…
there’s a world out there
where they’re all smiles and noise
Sunday afternoon with sunglasses and ice-cream
-- why is she so isolated?
she can smell the sea and the bakery
why is she so lonely?
(what next?)
Change
switch
light switch
her huge eyes see
everything looks kind of green
the coldness of a fridge
and the fresh death
of edible items:
a change of light
and the perspective changes
surgically
On cold white tiles
blood, from what once was...
and became a nonsense today,
spilled from a piece of meat
heartless
The smell of bleach barely hidden
by mimic citrus
molecules that trick your brain
limbic paradises of yesterday
when she still had a choice,
now there is none and the smell
doesn’t even try to cover up
their greedy price tag
their greedy price tag
price tag
While she is sleeping,
I want to know;
gestapo nightmares
and gestalt therapies
the hissing of a whip
that I call “the snake”
and sneaking from the bathroom
I see, it lies there:
the corpse
its heart beats
but it’s a corpse
stripped, stricken
by my friend “the snake”
Analyzing
putting things on the freudian plate
of a partial balance,
knowing the rule
before the measurement
knowing…
analyzing all the same
(What did she say?)
Dimmer lights
and the world is grey
like the kitchen sink
the pale promise
the squalor
the broken promise
like a by-passed morning
(What is the story?)
Child left alone
to play with vibrating
sounds of her theremin soul
hands in the air
up above
to lead the orchestra
suspended thoughts
and eyes open wide
to the presence of the world outside
-- outside the bunker
But inside
all is crime
and smell of chlorine
all is murder
her face is half-hidden
from presence half-human,
her honest determination
surrounded by darkness
yet always carrying the light within
Stains still remain
despite the executioner’s obsessive
quest for perfection;
she swears that she will
expose the deeds
and collects nauseous lies
nicotine stained nail
and the filth of years
The memory of life
dripping like a red candle
Redeems
When the light comes in
through the cracks made
by the flowers in her
that called the rays inside,
she is up
standing, ready,
her sensitive skin drinks the changes
in the air
she is the witness
(What was the story?)
Lies thorns and bushes
tangled at her feet
kicked away,
senses overstimulated
by the reality of the world
outside the bunker
skin glows
tear-words flow
the rest is
over.
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
6/19/2009 |
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Truly powerful and completely compelling poetry, Axilea. My words will not do this justice. Thank you. Love and best wishes,
Regis |
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| Reviewed by Dawn Wilson |
6/16/2009 |
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| You are a true poet...there are no other words necessary. |
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| Reviewed by ~ H (Reader) |
6/14/2009 |
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| Truly awesome work! Love Holly |
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| Reviewed by Charlie |
6/3/2009 |
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So much like a lucid dream, reality trying sleepily to change things into some semblance of some sort of logic, but always returning to the nightmare at length... the bunker, the remains, the turning from it, but finally a reaction and then its over.
I must say, that I think your repetitions are very effective in underlining mood and meaning. And this piece is true-Axilea style in that it is full of atmosphere and affects the reader to the roots, even though meaning is illusive and dreamlike. --Charlie |
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| Reviewed by Elizabeth Price |
5/28/2009 |
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| Awesome. The dark that is split by the light within her. Awesome. Sordid story but life can be that way. It took time but she conquered. Inspirational and thought provoking. Excellent. Liz |
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| Reviewed by Cryssa C |
5/28/2009 |
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Words don't really do this justice...
It is gripping and sad and yet...I can feel the release at the end. I believe we all have our bunkers where we hide pieces of our past that somehow hold us fast.
Cryssa |
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
5/27/2009 |
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| a superb poetic journey through imagined thoughts brought into existence by the creative powers of a crafted poet ... |
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| Reviewed by Ronald Hull |
5/27/2009 |
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You weave a sad, sad story of a life lost in living. Like an abstract painting. Exquisite.
Ron |
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| Reviewed by Kate Burnside |
5/27/2009 |
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| My goodness, Axilea. I can't begin to imagine all the pent-up energies and convoluted thought processes that you must have sifted through to distil this masterpiece of narrative plainchant. It would seem to have come from somewhere very deep, both real and imagined. Your acute eye for telling detail depicted with surgical clarity and precision is awesome - but combined with chilling evocation and literary affect with the settings and the distancing, it is like a journalistic lens - both subjective and objective. You have a great sense of timing in your writing, and a flair for real drama. How you manage to weight the poem so that we, too, inhabit that bunker and labyrinths of imagination in order to escape it - THEN to find that, on leaving and rejoining the throes of society that "the rest is over", leaves me winded by sudden finality. I love your play with voices, just like voices in and off stage, inside and outside the head. Superb in every way. TY Kate xx |
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| Reviewed by John Flanagan |
5/25/2009 |
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Axilea,
A narrative not told so much as felt and imagined; indeed it is the world of response and interpretation, the real inner world often so difficult to grasp and certainly difficult to express. Kudos!
John |
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| Reviewed by Edwin Hurdle |
5/25/2009 |
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A well written poem,take care
EDWIN |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
5/25/2009 |
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Awed and as Kathy said silenced by the absolute power of this one...
fee |
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| Reviewed by Gene Williamson |
5/24/2009 |
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A masterpiece, Axilea. Einstein is probably right, but somehow
this recalls a favoritie quote of mine from Thomas Wolfe. It goes
something like this: There is no way to know what knowing is until
one knows what knowing is like. -gene. |
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| Reviewed by L. Figgins |
5/24/2009 |
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| No words. Just a silent tear. |
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| Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado |
5/24/2009 |
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Good write, Axilea; good to read you again! Well done!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D |
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