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overeaters anonymous
by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
Sunday, April 25, 2004
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Thundershowers last night inspired this one. :-)

the storm is hungry, it must eat to live,
it gorges on heat and humidity.
the storm shovels it in with fork'ed hands,
ever increasing in turgidity.

the storm inhales and chokes on chunks of ice,
and its visage turns a ghastly blue-black.
the storm sees lightning dance before its eyes,
it vomits in resounding thundercracks.

the storm works up a sweat and it rains down,
its appetite, one law it won't rescind.
the storm's stomach growls, it's hungry again,
it sucks up clods of earth in a whirlwind.

the storm finally slakes its hunger binge,
its appetite, for now, under control.
the storm lies down, ready to take a nap,
a diet is not on its protocol.

(C) Copy written, 2004, by Karla Dorman.

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Reviewed by Kate Burnside	4/26/2004

Fantastic, Karla! It's probably not meant as a children's write, but I'm sure the sophisticated little darlings of our age would just about gobble this one up as much as us adults! And good on you, too, for showing that storm who's boss! Your triumphant pen, that's who! Really strong, visual writing this.... thank you. Kate xx




Reviewed by Kate Clifford	4/26/2004

Love this description of a storm and sooooo original!




Reviewed by Mr. Ed	4/26/2004

Wow. An extremely powerful write, Karla. Really like this one. Never quite thought of a storm in those terms; but now I will. Well done!




Reviewed by Ed Matlack	4/26/2004

This is really great, hon, I love storms & you hate them, but I can understand your hate through your writes about them, this is so vivid, I can feel the storm. To compare it to something as minor as overeating is pure genius...you get better with each passing write...Peace thru the Write, Ed & Rufuz




Reviewed by Tinka Boukes	4/26/2004

Well expressed write Karla!! Love Tinka




Reviewed by Mitzi Jackson	4/25/2004

very creative have that been said? cause it is really true great write lady hope it's a long sleep




Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)	4/25/2004

This is well done. Karla imagine what happens in drizzle rains SMILES....




Reviewed by Gwen Dickerson	4/25/2004

Very creative, well expressed poem, Karla! Bravo!




Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)	4/25/2004

Karla, You use a thing you kinda don't like then write this great piece. Well done..




Reviewed by A PAX	4/25/2004

you are a wordsmith...........this is great! the storm finally slakes its hunger binge, its appetite, for now, under control. the storm lies down, ready to take a nap, a diet is not on its protocol.




Reviewed by Rose Limongi	4/25/2004

Karla, I hate diets as much much as you hate storms, but WOW do you know how to write about them!! Well done!! ~Rose~




Reviewed by john zimmerman	4/25/2004

karla,c This is a fine example of your developing voice as a poet. I know how much you " love on " thunderstorms which makes this work all that more amazing. Nicely done, keep it up! love, john+




Reviewed by E T Waldron	4/25/2004

Karla I agree with Katy! An exceptional write! You are on a roll! You may hate storms, but they love your pen!;-)




Reviewed by Katy Walsvik	4/25/2004

Jaysus, Karla.. you could knock me over with a feather just now.. this is one bloody amazing poem! If I were to quote you the parts that dropped my jaw, I'd be writing the entire piece here.. sincerely true! I just couldn't stop reading... and won't need to, since it is about to journey to my library, where I can savor it again and again. THIS is damned great writing! katy xox.




Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen	4/25/2004

Karla This is a great write, keep it up... God Bless Michelle~




Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)	4/25/2004

Oh this one is super great Karla...I never quite thought of a storm in that way.. great description..floria




Reviewed by Sheila Jones (Reader)	4/25/2004

This is wonderful poetry, Karla! Well done! Love, Sheila




Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado	4/25/2004

(((Karla))) Oh, my! What wonderful words you have used in this poem; terrific imagery! You clearly are developing into a gifted writer; and you deserve to be published or become famous! May your dreams of becoming published become a reality! I believe in you, and I think you would make one hell of a bestselling author and poet! (((HUGS))) and much love, your twin (and biggest fan!), Karen Lynn. :D




Reviewed by Lisa Hilbers	4/25/2004

And I was so glad to see that sunshine! I know we needed rain but I think my mind needs the sun worse! Good write Karla! Lisa




Reviewed by Sandie Angel	4/25/2004

Hi Karla: Your writings keeps getting better and better. I like the choice of words in this one. ~ Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu ~

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