An Uncle's Memory
by Jane S Buttery
Sunday, August 31, 2003
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An old man remembers the mountain 's coolness and his job on the coal
"Look, right up there. See
That's where we used to come as boys.
It was cool up here after a day on the coal.
Awful life it was, mind you, for youngsters
Down the pit at twelve, loading or hacking
Coal with a pick axe till we wore out.
Just stopping for a snack from our boxes
Then back at it from morning till night.
Aye, aye; I remember it was often dark
When we came up.
Our faces blackened by the coal,
Our lungs filling with the dreadful killing dust!
No wonder we longed for the cool mountain air.
My father used to tell us how the valleys
were once bright and green before the pits.
All we knew was the dust and tin baths
But now, the pits have closed down,
The dust has done its worse and the
Valleys will be green and fresh again.
See, by here, evergreen trees grow strong
Where slag heaps dominated our valley.
We can enjoy the cool breeze, knowing
That our mountains will thrive
Thank God, I've lived to see it.
Not like some, lost in explosions,
I'm still alive."
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|Reviewed by Ken Chartrand
|Hello Jane, I read your Poem,"An Uncles Memory". I found it very real and touching. Great imagery! Sad story but with a positive ending. Please feel free to visit my site here in the "Den".|
|Reviewed by Susan Bailey
|This poem makes one stop and think how hard life must have been for the miners. Very well written Jane. Thank you.
|Reviewed by Poetess of The Soul Sheila G
|WOW! this starteled me, your imagery is amazing!
Thank you Jane B!
Your writing is honest and truthful and clearly written!
I enjoyed your style~!
even with this sad and poingnant write!
that must be said and written, as you wrote it!
Warmly, Warrior Lady purple Sheeeoox
I just had to start Tracking/Following your heart and soul, as of tonight! I am happy too... Write On!
|Reviewed by ~ Holly Harbridge (Reader)
|So beautiful and uplifting! Well done!|
|Reviewed by Joyce Hale
|How lucky are those who are on the receiving end of memories and remembrances of time past! A soft, stark reminder of the lives of coalminers. Well-done, Jane.
Peace. Joyce Hale
|Reviewed by Gwen Dickerson
|Powerful -- and very well written!|
|Reviewed by Tracey L. O' Very (Reader)
|Wonderful story and a respectful one at that. Bringing forth all the dangers and all the miners deal with that most often we never give a thought to .
I love this and I loved that happy ending!
Tracey and Gang 43xoox(c :)
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|A most beautiful uplifting write, wonderful imagery!|
|Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya
|Reviewed by Kay P Devenish
|So very interesting,I am so glad you were able to write those last two lines.