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old men by Steve Patterson Thursday, August 11, 2005 Rated "G" by the Author. Share Print Save Become a Fan old men sittin' in a bar room
drinkin' beer and whiskey feelin' fear feelin' frisky used to be 7 one died went ta' heaven now there was 6 what a mix old men sittin' in a bar room sayin' remberin' when back then was then remeberin' when was then feelin' thin old men sittin' at the bar stool bein' an old bar fool "rember back? remmber jack?" "hey, how about kate, man we couln't wait..." give me another beer..pleas if you please please ease my mind help me to find yesterday or today anyway i'll be frisky give me a whiskey i'll be riskey let me drink it down forget my frown we done buried him down "here's to you" jack & jill done climbed that hill do as you will do as you can just rember an old man old men remberin' when sittin' in a bar room waitin' to die tearless they cry as life passes bye but then old men they be thin always livin' back then with kate who they loved too late back when they were young men old men sittin' in a bar room remberin' back when... wishin' they had a broom to sweep it all away and go back to yesterday �

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Reviewed by Cheryl Shoemaker	8/13/2005

Hi, my name's Kate ;) order up, I'll have a beer while I wait I got this broom needin to sweep this room very soulfull, great write!! love it




Reviewed by Richard Christopher Suarez	8/12/2005

reminds a bit of the Days of Wine and Roses', great expresssion! peace', Rich Criso Suarez




Reviewed by Ed Matlack	8/12/2005

So, which of the 6 men are you, unless you were the 7th...not bad do you write from the other side...;) Ed




Reviewed by Leah Wilson	8/12/2005

sounds like the voice of experience speaking...lol ! This is actually a sad, and woeful truth that you have written about. Some people really do sit at the bar, wasting their time and energy and not accomplishing anything constructive in their life...every day. And the only things that they can talk about, concerning things that they did do, are those things that happened in their past. There is a lesson to be learned from your writing of this, and that would be to Live Each Day To Its Fullest! I enjoyed reading this. Love, Leah