Six Feet to Forever
by Dawn Richerson
Wednesday, February 09, 2005
Rated "PG" by the Author.
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Darkness pressed down as she knelt
before the gaping hole
and her future now defined
by a void stretched six feet
She trembled beneath the weight
of the rose. Behind swollen
lids flashed images of what
she imagined to be
his last moments.
Punctuated by machine-gun fire,
bits of conversation
plucked from the past, she watched him
rush the hill, each muddy step
The enemy in retreat,
he gazed out across a sweeping landscape.
The glint of a rising sun
reflected off his blood-stained helmet.
Cast in an eerie rosy glow, he thought
of carefree childhood days in Alabama,
of running home to Momma after a game
of King of the Mountain with his best buddies,
of her throwing her wide arms and hugging him,
saying he would make a difference in this world
He knelt there, the gaping hole
too ponderous a thing
in the battle’s aftermath.
He took off his helmet
and lay his weapon down.
He wept for her.
He wept for him.
He wept for her long future without him.
He wept even for the wild-eyed boy
rushing up the hill toward him,
knowing the weight of war
would press down upon him, too,
Unwilling to surrender,
but tired of the game,
he stretched his arms
six feet across
and raised his head
to face down death.
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|Reviewed by Carole Mathys
|a profound write...|
|Reviewed by Phillip William Allen
|Very strong pen.|
|Reviewed by Al Swanson (Reader)
|alot of power rested in this one Dawn, struck to the root, Al|
|Reviewed by Judy Lloyd (Reader)
|Very powerful write and it does haunt you.|
|Reviewed by Janet Parker
|This is so powerful. It stabs me in the heart and leaves me grieving.|
|Reviewed by George Jackson
|A powerful, very well written poem.|
|Reviewed by Sherry Heim
|This is stirring and haunting, Dawn. Great writing.
|Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
|Sure is deep..No pun. But very real and pungent..|
|Reviewed by jude forese
|extremely vivid images haunting the soul in search for the ultimate victory ...|
|Reviewed by M. B.
|This is a gut punching piece of spectacular work. Wow!|
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Superb poem Dawn. One that goes deep to haunt the senses.
|Reviewed by Lori Moore
|A powerful piece. Excellent poetry.|
|Reviewed by Marilyn Seray
|WOW! this is good|