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Hypocritical (Senryu)
by CJ Heck
Saturday, February 10, 2007
Rated "G" by the Author.
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Senryu 5/7/5

To proclaim a Godly self, 
yet write hate in verse.

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Reviewed by Taylor Ryan 3/2/2007
oh CJ...such wisdom and careful observation in your well chosen words.
Reviewed by Richard Orey 2/15/2007
'Tis well to remember that the stinger sits close to the honey.

Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper 2/12/2007
I'd say you did a pretty good job and quite a few could fit the verse
Reviewed by Randall Barfield 2/12/2007
quite clear. oooh, don't know if i should've read this one.
Reviewed by Paul Berube 2/11/2007

This is deep and so true my friend.
Reviewed by Brett Moore 2/11/2007
Very straightforward piece, CJ. Hypocritical indeed.

Reviewed by Approximately Naive 2/11/2007
Or as the Psalmist puts it 'His speech is smooth as butter, yet war rages in his heart' (55:21)

Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson 2/11/2007
Too true..
Excellent write..
Reviewed by Carole Mathys 2/11/2007
Very profound, CJ...
peace and love, Carole
Reviewed by jude forese 2/11/2007
Reviewed by ~ Holly Harbridge (Reader) 2/11/2007
Amen to this poem CJ, Amen!!!!!!!!!!!! love Holly
Reviewed by Kimmy Van Kooten 2/11/2007
Oh...this can stir many a guilty conscience...
"The fawning, sneaking, and flattering hypocrite, that will do, or be anything, for his own advantage". Stillingfleet
The ways of this world seem to be leaning in such direction...
very well done, CJ...I have yet to try a Senryu~
Isn't it fun venturing out? Smiles!
Love and Peace~
Reviewed by Tinka Boukes 2/11/2007

Goodness knows I know such a person!!

Love Tinka
Reviewed by Michael Mathieu 2/11/2007
Strong and to the point,Amen on this write,
Reviewed by Jeanette Cooper 2/11/2007
Woe are the sins of the vulnerable and secular man--wish we could all be Godly instead of just reaching for the Holy Grail and God's own grace. Your poem strikes a strong message.
Reviewed by Lynn Barry 2/11/2007
Reviewed by Susan Sonnen 2/11/2007
This is an excellent senryu, CJ! Isn't writing fantastic...a release of frustration!
Reviewed by Mr. Ed 2/11/2007
Very powerful, CJ.
Reviewed by Alexandra* OneLight*® Authors & Creations 2/11/2007
Self-appointed “anythings” always make me rather suspicious… and cautious. ;0)
This is a great first “senryu”, dear CJ. Unlike “haiku”, which must indeed be about nature, “senryu”, using the same structure and syllabic count, was classically used with a humorous, rather satirical intention. Here, you used it as a critique of one of the “snakiest” types of personality there can be – the hypocrite - and you did it brilliantly!
Love & {{{{{{{{{{hugs}}}}}}}}}
Reviewed by George Thompson 2/11/2007
Congrats on this senyru! Perfectly done and tells a sad tale at the same time.
Reviewed by Victor Buhagiar (Reader) 2/10/2007
Such is man, wants to play God but always failing. Victor
Reviewed by Larry Lounsbury 2/10/2007
Now this is a powerful message.
Reviewed by Sandie Angel 2/10/2007
Hahaha!!!!! I thought I was the only one who knew they exist...

Sandie Angel :o)
Reviewed by E T Waldron 2/10/2007
Excellent ku CJ! Potent topic, point well made!

Reviewed by Sue Hess 2/10/2007
yes i've known a few..regrettably even her at ad
Reviewed by Kate Clifford 2/10/2007
Fantastic hard hitting Senryu!
Reviewed by Joyce Bowling 2/10/2007
Great job CJ you've said much in few words, just as it should be with've given one a prompt to self examine....enjoyed this. I also admire you for trying a new style...I've got something on my mind and heart to try soon...great job CJ!!!
Joyce B...
Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK 2/10/2007
El Presidnete Bush Sez: God Bless You But, Has Blown Over $1 Trillion+ $100 Billion Your $TAXPAYERS MONEY$On Iraq War,i.e. HATE-HUH!


Reviewed by Felix Perry 2/10/2007
Well for a first attempt I think you rang the bell for sure with this strong message that rings out in truth against those who deserve it. Well done CJ.

Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan 2/10/2007
Reviewed by H. Lena Jones 2/10/2007
Hey CJ, that's good. Vulgarity is also not a Godly trait. Great Senryu! Shocks the senses, I think. :)

God Bless
Love always
Reviewed by Rusty Daily 2/10/2007
CJ, This is one of the better examples of using brevity to speak volumes. It required talent and bravery to post this excellent reminder to all of us to be what you are in voice and spirit and nothing else. Thank you
Reviewed by Susan de Vegter 2/10/2007
Yes!There's one or two of them around. Just know that you see them as they are and forgive them. They'll hate that.
Great Senryn.
Reviewed by Zahala San Simone 2/10/2007
Hi CJ,

This seems to be more of a senryu, since a haiku is generally about nature...Nevertheless, you've nailed the syllabic count--with a stinging line 1. Nice work.

Reviewed by K. Mulroney 2/10/2007
Now that hits BACK! I had to re-track everyone that I was tracking because the site is not going to correct whatever went wrong. So I am not recieving emails when you post! Bout time eh? Great stuff!
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