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| Reviewed by Taylor Ryan |
3/2/2007 |
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oh CJ...such wisdom and careful observation in your well chosen words.
Love,
Taylor |
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| Reviewed by Richard Orey |
2/15/2007 |
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'Tis well to remember that the stinger sits close to the honey.
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| Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper |
2/12/2007 |
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| I'd say you did a pretty good job and quite a few could fit the verse |
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| Reviewed by Randall Barfield |
2/12/2007 |
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| quite clear. oooh, don't know if i should've read this one. |
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| Reviewed by Paul Berube |
2/11/2007 |
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CJ,
This is deep and so true my friend. |
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| Reviewed by Brett Moore |
2/11/2007 |
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Very straightforward piece, CJ. Hypocritical indeed.
Brett |
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| Reviewed by Tactfully Naive |
2/11/2007 |
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Or as the Psalmist puts it 'His speech is smooth as butter, yet war rages in his heart' (55:21)
Regards
Dai |
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| Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson |
2/11/2007 |
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Too true..
Excellent write.. |
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| Reviewed by Carole Mathys |
2/11/2007 |
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Very profound, CJ...
peace and love, Carole |
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
2/11/2007 |
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| excellent! |
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| Reviewed by ~ Holly Harbridge (Reader) |
2/11/2007 |
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| Amen to this poem CJ, Amen!!!!!!!!!!!! love Holly |
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| Reviewed by Kimmy Van Kooten |
2/11/2007 |
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Oh...this can stir many a guilty conscience...
"The fawning, sneaking, and flattering hypocrite, that will do, or be anything, for his own advantage". Stillingfleet
The ways of this world seem to be leaning in such direction...
very well done, CJ...I have yet to try a Senryu~
Isn't it fun venturing out? Smiles!
Love and Peace~
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
2/11/2007 |
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THIS IS SO TRUE!!
Goodness knows I know such a person!!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by Michael Mathieu |
2/11/2007 |
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Strong and to the point,Amen on this write,
Michael |
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| Reviewed by Jeanette Cooper |
2/11/2007 |
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| Woe are the sins of the vulnerable and secular man--wish we could all be Godly instead of just reaching for the Holy Grail and God's own grace. Your poem strikes a strong message. |
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| Reviewed by Lynn Barry |
2/11/2007 |
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| AMEN! |
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| Reviewed by Susan Sonnen (Reader) |
2/11/2007 |
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| This is an excellent senryu, CJ! Isn't writing fantastic...a release of frustration! |
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| Reviewed by Mr. Ed |
2/11/2007 |
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| Very powerful, CJ. |
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| Reviewed by Alexandra* OneLight*® Authors & Creations |
2/11/2007 |
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Self-appointed “anythings” always make me rather suspicious… and cautious. ;0)
This is a great first “senryu”, dear CJ. Unlike “haiku”, which must indeed be about nature, “senryu”, using the same structure and syllabic count, was classically used with a humorous, rather satirical intention. Here, you used it as a critique of one of the “snakiest” types of personality there can be – the hypocrite - and you did it brilliantly!
Love & {{{{{{{{{{hugs}}}}}}}}}
Alexandra* |
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| Reviewed by George Thompson |
2/11/2007 |
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Congrats on this senyru! Perfectly done and tells a sad tale at the same time.
George |
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| Reviewed by Victor Buhagiar (Reader) |
2/10/2007 |
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| Such is man, wants to play God but always failing. Victor |
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| Reviewed by Larry Lounsbury |
2/10/2007 |
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| Now this is a powerful message. |
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| Reviewed by Sandie Angel |
2/10/2007 |
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Hahaha!!!!! I thought I was the only one who knew they exist...
Sandie Angel :o) |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
2/10/2007 |
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Excellent ku CJ! Potent topic, point well made!
Love,
Eileen |
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| Reviewed by Sue Hess |
2/10/2007 |
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| yes i've known a few..regrettably even her at ad |
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| Reviewed by Kate Clifford |
2/10/2007 |
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| Fantastic hard hitting Senryu! |
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| Reviewed by Joyce Bowling |
2/10/2007 |
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Great job CJ you've said much in few words, just as it should be with Senryu...you've given one a prompt to self examine....enjoyed this. I also admire you for trying a new style...I've got something on my mind and heart to try soon...great job CJ!!!
Blessings,
Joyce B... |
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| Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK |
2/10/2007 |
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El Presidnete Bush Sez: God Bless You But, Has Blown Over $1 Trillion+ $100 Billion Your $TAXPAYERS MONEY$On Iraq War,i.e. HATE-HUH!
Neat...
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
2/10/2007 |
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Well for a first attempt I think you rang the bell for sure with this strong message that rings out in truth against those who deserve it. Well done CJ.
Fee |
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| Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan |
2/10/2007 |
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| NICE JOB! GOOD FOR A REALITY CHECK AS WELL |
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| Reviewed by H. Lena Jones |
2/10/2007 |
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Hey CJ, that's good. Vulgarity is also not a Godly trait. Great Senryu! Shocks the senses, I think. :)
God Bless
Love always
Lena |
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| Reviewed by Rusty Daily |
2/10/2007 |
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CJ, This is one of the better examples of using brevity to speak volumes. It required talent and bravery to post this excellent reminder to all of us to be what you are in voice and spirit and nothing else. Thank you
loveya
Rusty |
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| Reviewed by Susan de Vegter |
2/10/2007 |
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Yes!There's one or two of them around. Just know that you see them as they are and forgive them. They'll hate that.
Great Senryn.
Susan |
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| Reviewed by Zahala San Simone |
2/10/2007 |
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Hi CJ,
This seems to be more of a senryu, since a haiku is generally about nature...Nevertheless, you've nailed the syllabic count--with a stinging line 1. Nice work.
Wendi |
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| Reviewed by K. Mulroney |
2/10/2007 |
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| Now that hits BACK! I had to re-track everyone that I was tracking because the site is not going to correct whatever went wrong. So I am not recieving emails when you post! Bout time eh? Great stuff! |
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