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| Reviewed by Carol Grace |
10/14/2009 |
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| Love it, even your choice of using small case with only "YOU" in all caps. Great write. |
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| Reviewed by Dale Clark |
10/13/2009 |
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Powerful! Words are power!
'so easily erased on paper.
yet spoken?
explode like a bullet from
the barrel of a gun.'
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| Reviewed by Joyce Bell |
10/1/2009 |
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| THE TONGUE...THAT SMALL BUT SO SIGNIFICANT APPENDAGE THAT, IN THIS CASE, BEGINS...AN END...LEAVING ONE...SO UNDONE. PENNED WITH REMARKABLE IMAGERY THAT IS FILLED WITH THE DEPTHS OF EMOTION THAT SEEPS FROM A HEART THAT IS BEING BROKEN. THANKS FOR SHARING AND BLESSINGS. JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS |
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| Reviewed by David Hightower |
10/1/2009 |
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Dawn - "undone" is the perfect title for this poem. The refusal to believe the words in the first stanza, then the line "YOU – i - us"
indicates the diminishing of the narrator, while the simile of the unravelling quilt furthers that sense of coming undone. Especially liked the irony of the spoken word as more lasting than the written:
words…such strange things…
so easily erased on paper.
yet spoken?
Then the last stanza and the gun simile powerfully expresses the effect of the words. - David |
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| Reviewed by Sheila Roy |
9/29/2009 |
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Love the similes in this poem, Dawn. For me, this poem has powerful dramatic moments. I say moments because each verse feels so unique, though part of the whole. Love it!
Sheila |
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| Reviewed by Dallas D'Angelo-Gary |
9/29/2009 |
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| Amen! Words spoken aloud are about as easy to recall as pushing toothpaste back into the tube. |
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| Reviewed by Cryssa C |
9/28/2009 |
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It is amazing how easily words travel to our hearts and brains...and the affect they have on both the mind and soul.
Cryssa |
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| Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan |
9/27/2009 |
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| so very true and so well written! |
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| Reviewed by Gene Williamson |
9/27/2009 |
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| Undone...well done, Dawn. -gene. |
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| Reviewed by L Hippler |
9/27/2009 |
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| Really powerful poem, dawn. |
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| Reviewed by J'nia Fowler |
9/27/2009 |
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| They surely can and often do. Well penned once again. I love these short and insightful pearls of wisdom. Hugs |
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| Reviewed by Liana Margiva |
9/27/2009 |
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| I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva |
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| Reviewed by Mr. Ed |
9/27/2009 |
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| Words can be so powerful - as are yours right here. |
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| Reviewed by Georg Mateos |
9/27/2009 |
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Spoken words are like tooth paste...how you put them back inside the tube when realizing what was said immediately afterward?
Georg
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
9/26/2009 |
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| Superb descri[tive poem Dawn! gun shots perfect similie for strong spoken words... |
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| Reviewed by Karen Palumbo |
9/26/2009 |
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There is so much internal pain in this piece, yet you present it well...
Be always safe,
Karen |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
9/26/2009 |
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Wow so chock full of emotional turmoil and heartache and yet we have all been there at one point in our lifes or another.
Fee |
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| Reviewed by John Flanagan |
9/26/2009 |
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....and once spoken (and heard) can't be taken back, Dawn. I always try to keep in mind that the tongue can be the ugliest organ in the body when used badly. I hope this poem isn't completely personal.
John |
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| Reviewed by Ed J. |
9/26/2009 |
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I do hope this is an old poem. The emotion and power that coems with spoken words makes them far more emotionally effective and once said can never be taken back. Such care must be taken before uttering negative words. wonderful write
Stay well and keep writing
Ed |
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| Reviewed by Jerry Diamond |
9/26/2009 |
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You know Dawn if words are spoken with true love and honesty they can only educate you. That is what I believe.
Jerry |
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| Reviewed by Kate Burnside |
9/26/2009 |
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| Indeed they do, Dawn, and where on earth do they come from? I have to say, in the heat of the moment, I can scarce believe what comes out of my mouth - but, oh the relief once they have been said. On both sides of the coin, words have power and when breathed and invisible - i.e. spoken - as opposed to written, they are indellible in the heart and mind of the recipient. Positively, negatively, words do unravel the inner feeling too long concealed. Fabulous write, thank you. xx |
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| Reviewed by richard cederberg |
9/26/2009 |
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Yes they do dear Dawn.
And everyone uses or wields them differently
to express what flows through them.
The simile you employed in the
second stanza is superb.
Enjoyed!
Blessings ... |
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| Reviewed by George Carroll |
9/26/2009 |
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| Friendships have been lost because of careless words spoken and once trust is gone forgiveness may happen but as Liz stated it will always be in the back of your mind. |
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| Reviewed by Elizabeth Russo |
9/26/2009 |
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| Unfortunately, once those words slip from out lips, they can never be taken back...and even if they are forgiven, they are seldom forgotten. Painful and emotive piece, Dawn. Well done! ~Hugs, Elizabeth |
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| Reviewed by Jeanette Cooper |
9/26/2009 |
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| This is really great--your descriptions relates an event that happens all too frequently. Well done. |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
9/26/2009 |
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words…such strange things…
so easily erased on paper.
yet spoken?
explode like a bullet from
the barrel of a gun.
This is so true, Dawn. Words uttered from the mouth of an uncontrolled individual can be devastating but it is even worse when such an individual means to use the words as a destructive weapon. Thank you. Love and best wishes,
Regis |
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| Reviewed by Marcia Miller-Twiford |
9/26/2009 |
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Love this poem Dawn. Reminds me at the end of Maya Angelou's quote: "People will forget what you did, people will forget what you said, but people will never forget how you made them feel."
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
9/26/2009 |
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as long as you don't take words personally, the gun can only shoot blanks ... at least, that's how i see it ...
you poem on the other hand, shoots right to the target ... |
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| Reviewed by Christine Alwin |
9/26/2009 |
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So very true...a balance of a good relationship can be teetered with words that are loud and harsh...you see it with children as well all the time..heartbreaking.
Christine |
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| Reviewed by Bernice Angoh |
9/26/2009 |
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| Words can do two things only, they either create or destroy, Great poem. |
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| Reviewed by Jerry Bolton |
9/26/2009 |
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| Very good, Dawn. Amber said it best, I'm not going to try to outdo her. Excellent. |
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| Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner |
9/26/2009 |
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Dawn,
Words can heal - or kill. Effectively penned message in these thought provoking lines - well done.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. |
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| Reviewed by Amber Moonstone |
9/26/2009 |
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Wow, this is one powerfully written poem. My, My Dawn, such emotions set in this dramatic poetry presentation! I can feel your emotions pouring onto the page.
I wish you all the peace, love, and light the Universe can offer,
Amber "V" |
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| Reviewed by Gianetta Ellis |
9/26/2009 |
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| The energy behind a word never fully dissipates - it lingers, attaches to like-intentioned words and burgeons in effect. I read an interesting book about words and how water molecules react to them. It was amazing how when harsh words are spoken, water molecules break down or become otherwise negatively affected. While when beautiful and loving words are spoken, the molecules are themselves at their most beautiful. Considering we are largely comprised of water molecules, this concept is especially striking as it relates to the words we say to one another. Words do matter; words can hurt - if our own self-talk aligns with those words thrown at us. But, we can immunize ourselves against toxic words by thinking only that which is good and loving - directing that goodness and love deep within our every cell. I try to teach my young daughter this as I believe that if more of us grew up with this understanding, we could have avoided a lot of pain and misgiving (in both the giving and receiving). Now, see what you've done here Dawn? You've got me rambling. Anyway, I love your form here - the style is smart and creative. I'll take this one through my day to remind me to be conscious of what I say and how I respond to what's said. |
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