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| Reviewed by Ian Thorpe |
12/19/2004 |
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Lori,
I have had a lot of conversations with Nordette on the same subject (we think alike on it)and you are right to raise the point, but what the hell, the moment people post their work or comment on that of others they invite responses, not all of which will be positive. Footnote are useful though to sometimes make a poem more accessible. For example as I read this I was thinking of one particular individual who delights in making scathing comments about other but is quick to scream "abuse" when any of his bile is flung back.
Good poem and well done for speaking out against bullying.
Ian |
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| Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner |
12/13/2004 |
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(((lori)))
BRAVA!!!! on such an outstanding piece--SPOT ON, SPOT ON, SPOT OOOONNNNN!!!!!!! :)
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :( |
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| Reviewed by George Jackson |
12/13/2004 |
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| There is much wisdom here, and a whole lot of talent. Great work, this. |
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| Reviewed by Kate Burnside |
12/13/2004 |
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Well, I'm just another little footnote here, and yeah, this reminds me of "there was a crooked man and he had a crooked - uh... mouse ... and they all lived together in a crooked little house..." sounds like the house of The Osbornes - or perhaps a little closer to home these days??!! Thank God for The Beatles, I say - Andy could obviously see that comin'! But then, we wee folks have to stick together - wet paper sack or no! Hey, Andy... how about some papier mache... Reminds me of a certain Formula One racing mogul...but then, not sure that idea translates TransAtlantic... never mess with a Judge, that's what I say (bein married to one...) LOLOL Kate xx
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| Reviewed by Janet Parker |
12/13/2004 |
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| It kind of reminds me of an adult Mother Goose Rhyme. Something funny on the outside but holding deep truths and lessons within. Very creative, Lori. |
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| Reviewed by Lisa Hilbers |
12/13/2004 |
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There ya go...It couldn't have been said better...
Lisa |
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| Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie |
12/13/2004 |
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Wow..powerfully expressed Lori, excellent!
Reindeer |
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| Reviewed by Handsum Hart |
12/12/2004 |
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A splendid write Lori.
Take care |
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| Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK |
12/12/2004 |
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Why APOLiGIZE FOR Illiterate El Estupido People ,i.e. Why_
The Meek (Weak) Will Inherit This Holy Hell Earth_
Excellent!
TRASK |
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
12/12/2004 |
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| luv your sense of black humor ... |
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| Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger |
12/12/2004 |
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| Lori, a very unique well-penned observation you’ve poetically composed here. Some tales need to be told. The closing stanza really sets this off. Take good care and be well. |
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| Reviewed by Sara Coslett |
12/12/2004 |
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| LOL...this is funny. Nice take on the line, "he can't even find his way out of a wet paper sack." ~ Sara |
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| Reviewed by Nordette Adams |
12/12/2004 |
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| Fantastic, strong write, Lori! And you're right to note that when people are offended and think something's aimed at them or "the shoe fits," sometimes it's their conscience. It's sort of like being in church and the pastor preaches about a particular sin. If it's your sin he mentions and you feel guilty, you start wondering if someone's told on you. ;-) But then again, in the absence of coincidence, a skilled writer knows her audience. Superbly penned. |
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| Reviewed by Edwin Larson |
12/12/2004 |
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Great write from a poet who does'nt delete reviews...and Andy's right, the Beatles song 'Nowhere Man' does come to mind..lol..
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| Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader) |
12/12/2004 |
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must be about me, being 5'52 tall, and sleeping in a wet paper sack.
You really know how to hurt.
Hit a man when he's down,lol
PS Did you know Englishmen have much larger(Thinks. Don't brag)
Tell the truth shame the devil..
My g/f got the sack. She took it on the chin.(Thinks. I'll go to hell for that)
Reminds me of the beatles know where man. But don't start kate B off.. |
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| Reviewed by William Bonilla |
12/12/2004 |
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Oooops! Did I step into something here?
Powerful write ....Lori
I hope the "whoever" will get the message.
Season's Greetings
William ......Peace & Love |
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| Reviewed by Carole Mathys |
12/12/2004 |
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| an interesting take on an age old problem...great wirte |
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| Reviewed by ~ Chanti |
12/12/2004 |
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What a rhythm and rhyme you have going here. This is excellent! The lesson in it is unavoidable!
Chanti |
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| Reviewed by Judy Lloyd (Reader) |
12/12/2004 |
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| This reminds me of a play that was done by my highschool about a man in a box. That one won superior and your poem is just as fine. |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
12/12/2004 |
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You certainly did make your point Lori but unfortunately men like the ones you speak of, usually have to big an ego to accept that such writing could be intended for them or if they do tend to justify it by accusing the writer. Anyway though I don 't know who it refers to I'm sure it is well warranted.
bye for now.
Felix
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
12/12/2004 |
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Thanks for this offering!!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by A PAX |
12/12/2004 |
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My goodness........this is
fantastic! |
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| Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader) |
12/12/2004 |
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| Hate to answer Elieen in this forum but it isn't always little men who deny their true self, some of you ladies have a pretty good hold on that idea also. The poem put whomever you were writing about on notice, that's for sure. |
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| Reviewed by Sherry Heim |
12/12/2004 |
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Whoa, whomever you wrote this about won't be able to deny much anymore. A powerful write with an air of whimsey tucked in, making for a most entertaining read. Remind me never to get on the wrong side of your pen, Lori. This is really good!
Take care,
Sherry |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
12/12/2004 |
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Lori that's a sad bio of someone, but I think it fits some little men I have known to a T. The problem is the denial of their true self.
Excellent write on the subject! |
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