by Carol Culver Rzadkiewicz
Tuesday, February 19, 2008
Rated "G" by the Author.
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Iíve never noticed the way you sleep
With your mouth open and snore,
Or the way the covers rise and fall
As your eyelids flicker
At visions of worlds Iíll never see
I feel alienated
Here, in the gray hours before dawn,
Watching you and listening
To the silence, punctuated by your breath,
Though we often come so close
We are one,
We are still separate,
Each alone within ourselves.
And so I wait
For the sun to rise
And your eyes to open,
Blinking at the day,
And hope youíll gradually turn and smile
As though you had never been away.
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|Reviewed by Kathy Kopp
|Carol. I enjoyed this poem for the powerful impact it had on me, in a quiet, soothing manner. I like your indentations, they work! The rhymes are effective by being scattered throughout. You're a very excellent lyrical poet, indeed! The message I got was reassuring, that even though partners do part when sleeping, they wake up together again.|
|Reviewed by Karen Palumbo
|Thoughts before the breaking of a new day as two souls slowly rise becoming one again, just lovely....
Be always safe,
|Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado
|Carol, this is lovely! Very nice!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D
|Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU
Inspiring and enchanting words in "Reunion" stimulate romance and togetherness.
Keep posting, Poet.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
|Reviewed by Paul Berube
Yes, my friend we are all individuals with our own idiosyncracies. Loving each other for whom we are and not for what we do is all part of the big picture. Peace, Love and Blessings Always, Paul.
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
This is beautiful, with memorable lines - particularly loved,
" ... I feel alienated
Here, in the gray hours before dawn ...." (and you say you're not a Poet LOL)
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.