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Underground
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Lloyd Lofthouse
Monday, May 18, 2009
Rated "G" by the Author.
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A poetic memoir moment about being in the United States Marines in Okinawa prior to shipping out to Vietnam.
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It was 1965 when three Marines,
Barely out of high school
And dressed in jungle fatigues
Invaded a World War II
Japanese bunker in an ancient, Okinawa cave.
Scorch marks on the rock showed where napalm had once roared.
We examined the spot where
The Japanese soldiers placed their machine gun.
Imaginations traveled back in time
Where killing turned soldiers into hometown heroes.
At the back of the cave, the tunnel narrowed
From vertical to horizontal.
Like acrobats, we twisted our bodies into worms
Crawling through mud
With solid rock inches above our heads.
It was tight in that damp, narrow space beneath the earth.
We were cockroaches crawling through a volcanic vice
That could easily close with an earthly shudder.
We knew that Okinawa was home to deadly snakes
Lurking in dark places
When the lights from the military flashlights flickered.
With the light gone, the darkness was total.
There was no dripping water, no echoes
Just silence,
And no way to tell which direction was the way out.
Panic was not an option.
To move, we shoved with our feet
And clawed with our hands.
After an hour, there wasn't enough room to lift our heads
While plowing through the muck
Wondering if it was possible
To make a U-turn and return to that cave
While surrounded by a starless midnight.
When we neared the notch in the side of the gully
Outside Camp Hanson,
That light at the end of our journey appeared,
And we tumbled free and swore never to return
To that natural dungeon.
Most warriors are eighteen
When they go to war.
We set boots in Vietnam a month later.
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| Reviewed by Lori Moore |
10/14/2009 |
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| Powerful images. Thank you for your service and for sharing. |
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| Reviewed by La Belle Rouge |
5/22/2009 |
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| Most warriors are more boy than man, boyhood lost forever in the dark caves of war. A truly compelling write. |
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| Reviewed by Edwin Hurdle |
5/21/2009 |
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A well written piece,Great work,take care
EDWIN |
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| Reviewed by Chantilly Lace |
5/20/2009 |
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| Great writing sweet man..enjoyed very much...stay safe and well..Hugss |
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| Reviewed by Gwendolyn Thomas Gath |
5/20/2009 |
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"Undergraound"
Complete and such vivid detail.
Have heard not that I went on the "Tunnel Rat" tour but my husband has. Had the opportunity but that is one adventure regardless "once a Marine always a Marine" I just did not want to try! Regardless, I know this was not a tour by description instead reality and you have shared it from a bird's eye pov~Thanks!
Sure my husband will know exactly what you are portraying after his 30 yr stint in MC <smile>.
Take care,
Gwendolyn
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| Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner |
5/19/2009 |
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War is hell, as you aptly pen here, Lloyd. Well done.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. |
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| Reviewed by Rosemarie Skaine |
5/19/2009 |
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| The not so glamorous side that is usually not written about. You have many experiences for the world to read about. Excellent write. R |
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| Reviewed by Gene Williamson |
5/19/2009 |
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Lloyd, this should become a classic of wartime memoirs.
I find it difficult to think of anything more frightening
than to be stuck in a wormhole.
Aside: I was there for the invasion of Okinawa, on a navy DE
a few miles offshore. It turned out to be the worst naval
engagement in U.S. history. I was a baby at the time.
-gene. |
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| Reviewed by m j hollingshead |
5/19/2009 |
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| well said |
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| Reviewed by Dawn Wilson |
5/18/2009 |
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| The use of imagery and the detail in this are incredible. Your last three lines tore at my heart. |
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| Reviewed by John Flanagan |
5/18/2009 |
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Lloyd,
This is splendid in detail, tension, imagery and language, I was hooked from start to finish; I've never been to war and it's through such well expressed and vivid telling that its dangers and indeed horrors come home to me. Thank you so much for this.
John |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
5/18/2009 |
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You have very effectively shared what truly must have been a most fearsome experience. Thank you, Lloy. Love and peace,
Regis |
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