|Reviewed by Joyce Devenish
|Wonderful write. It breaks my heart to think of someone in this hopeless situation. I don't know 'why?'|
|Reviewed by jacqueline amos
|Master poet you are so creative with your pen, and the words cry from the soul, missionary of God.|
|Reviewed by Patrick Talty
The compasion in your heart undoubtedly gave power to your creative talent to enable you to write a poem such as this. Had you not signed it I would have believed it came from the lips of the African mother, who is the persona of your poem.
You should send this one to World Vision or Save The Children Fund, or even an appropriate UN agency!
From a technical point of view, the free verse form of the poem and the literary tool of effective, forceful repetition results in a sharing of your emotions with the reader, a most desirable aim in all good poetry. Where it is handled with skill (as in this case)it will usually enhance the dynamic effect of free verse.
Brava! and best wishes from this Sandgroper to a talented Banana-bender. (I live in Australia's best kept secret, beautiful Albany on WA's Rainbow Coast.)
|Reviewed by David Young
|Great write with a dynamic message for poverty is the world greatest disease.|
|Reviewed by William Bonilla
|A heart wrenching piece
Felt in the core of my painful hert
Bless you for this Well Penned composition
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|A compassionate piece expressing the needless suffering in this world. Thank you Kay. Love and peace. Regis|
|Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie
|This was so heart-wrenching, just breaks the heart,
|Reviewed by A PAX
|When my own child is ill, i worry and fuss, I cannot imagine the horror in a situation like this......its a crime.....we have so much, if only it could be distributed fairly, so little could mean a universe.....this is a very disturbing and needed reminder........
ty for this
u are an evolved human spirit.........as we should all aspire to be.
|Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger
|Although Kay, this is a very heartwrenching subject, it is also one of the best appeals I have ever had the opportunity to read!!!… It is such a timeless creation, and should be installed on the front wall of every Government Building across the globe!!!… It looks to me that every conceivable word has been used to describe this magnificent write!!!… May the gods above, finally step in, and STOP all this needless suffering once and for all!!!… Thank you for sharing your remarkable talent, and compassionate heart!!!|
|Reviewed by A Serviceable Villain
|A real tear-jerker; great compassion - super!|
|Reviewed by Mark Mahoney
|Kay this is an amazingly honest and true write, and how i wish i was wrong in saying that, this day and age and there is still famine and disease and suffering in this world, we can bomb the asses of people the other side of the world for whatever reason, justified or not, but we cant feed those and help them that are dying every second of every day....wheres the wisdom in war when all some people need is literally the basics, i.e water and food, i'm sorry if this sounds like a rant and well maybe it is but i get so wound up about the whole situation in the world and the total unfair manner in which the powers that be choose to see what they want...i wrote a poem once called Jesus are we all bleedin blind.....it reminds me of this situation now, again i'm sorry if i'm banging on here, thanks for writing and sharing this piece, i just wish we could all read it and reflect on it....take good care, God bless you and yours and them and those...Mark xxx|
|Reviewed by Jimmy Holder
|It is an exceptional piece .....
If the world could open its eyes, what would it really see?
|Reviewed by Mitzi Jackson
|exceptional piece.....such pains
in what most take as a simple pleasure
it is happening here too...cry into the darkness
|Reviewed by Kate Burnside
|This impassioned, personalised plea puts things in a nutshell, Kay... we feel bombarded with statistics and polit-speak when, put like this, it's about a mother like me desperate to safeguard the life of her child. With the vastness and "otherness" of the globe ever-shrinking as we connect like this as one human being to another via www and telecommunications, we no longer have the ability to shirk our responsibility to become personally involved as one compassionate human being to another. If even some would do what they can on behalf of one other's desperate plight, I am sure there would be a groundswell of change from whence pressure can be applied to pursue true humanitarian justice before we just blow ourselves to kingdom come instead. If we can put man on the moon, surely we can provide basic rights for those two-thirds of our population here whose needs are for basic survival. But we have to move beyond our own comfort-zones which have become the stuff of life to us. We are largely imprisoned and shackled by our own greed which says "Can't" to our starving brothers and sisters. Mia culpa. Wounded to the core by this truthful appeal. And many thanks for your kind and appreciative comments on "Tortured Soul". Bless you - LOVED your Biog!! Kate xx|
|Reviewed by Amira van Kerk
|A very touching and sad write.
I leaves us helpless over here, at the other side of the world, not really understanding how people can starve while we just walk over to the fridge to get us a cold drink.
What can we actually do to help these millions of poor people in the third world?
|Reviewed by Ch'erie de Perrot
|I think that you have captured the very essence of an African Mother's plea, because we are all human beings, no matter what race or creed, tis all the same in a mother's eye's.
Love yah for this
Pity the Govt skim off the top!
|Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson
|An awful reality for sure...
We in America are guilty of over eating...shame on us...
You are a special poet Kay.........
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
the wealth get wealthier, and the poor get poorer...the hungry die...the thirsty die...the sick die...such suffering, and it could be helped
thank you for posting this, may we never become complacent and think it won't ever happen--because it can, and does
(((((HUGS))))) and love, karla. :(
|Reviewed by Carmen Ruggero
|Kay, this tore my heart. To think that, as Susan pointed out, there is wealth in the world. I can't conceive of people starving to death in this day and age. Thank you for posting this.
|Reviewed by Kate Clifford
|So very sad and well written.
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|Very moving write Kay!!
|Reviewed by Peter Paton
|A truly moving and compassionate appeal Kay !!
May God be with you !!
|Reviewed by Safi Abdi
|Heartwrenching! Must have been painful to write this, thank you for not looking the other way! Safi|
|Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
|Yes it must look like heaven where we live, conplaining about cold lunch.
Aid we give their govt' keeps.
Looking at it objectivly, like from an aliens view point, how absurd, one world, 2/3 starving.
|Reviewed by Susan de Vegter
|'Eyes dead in sockets"...portruding bellies and cries more like whimpers from the constant aching..." It's all a fear of mothers in countries where there is little or no food. In a world full of access in some places dished out with apathy and greed...the "honorableman",somehow, just doesn't seem honorable to me. With wealth like Trump and the others the obsenity of having a yacht that takes 60K a day to operate causes me to shake my head. Guess that's why I'm not wealthy...I'd give it away to these hungry souls. Thanks for your poem. It is very much needed today.
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Kay you know how to wrench the heart so well!
This is another of your fantastic compassionate
poems that will hopefully be heard.Prayers are most needed
besides financial help. Both are things we can do!
|Reviewed by jude forese
|you've communicated pain and suffering with compassion and empathy ...|
|Reviewed by Dale Clark
|Kay, this is so powerful and sad.|
|Reviewed by Sandie Angel
|The photo and your poem form a heartfelt picture in my mind. This is sad. Well-done Kay!
~ Sandie May Angel a.k.a. May Lu ~
|Reviewed by Mr. Ed
|Heartwrenching write, Kay. And I imagine this could sadly apply to many many impoverished areas of our world, and there are quite a few. Makes one truly wonder how 'advanced' the human race really is.|