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|Reviewed by Dens Dreamweaver (Reader)
Claywoman offered some great advice. Another thing to remember is to hold your head high.. It takes a lot of courage to put your work out there for scrutiny. And you are doing a great job. I didnt find anything sucky about your poem here.. ;) Finding titles is always my problem too. The only one I could think of with this poem is a simple.. Loving you..
Take care... and Welcome to the Den
|Reviewed by Claywoman
|Read the poem out loud and see if you stumble, if you do, change the line..if it flows smoothly then you should be okay. Try and get rid of the 'ya's' in your writing, it detracts from the message...poetry should flow like a soft river and sometimes tumble like rocks tumbling over themselves in the rapids...think in adjectives and the poems will flow...|