by Kacie Rahm
Thursday, March 27, 2008
Rated "PG" by the Author.
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Overbearing voices of morality scold me for the errors I purposely make.
Everytime I inhale, exhale, repeat they melt away in my favorite mistake.
And once the voices are put to rest, I'm a better person, one who is fake.
My foolish escape, my selfish release, the only thing that keeps me awake.
And as the euphoria slips from my skin and my elation sinks to dismay,
I feel my former self return, "the real me", I beg my body to hide her away.
Each time I ignore her and each time she persists, my alias quickly fades.
She's an overbearing voice of morality and she's disrupting my masquerade.
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|Reviewed by Gwen Dickerson
|Extremely well exressed!|
|Reviewed by Barbara Terry
|First Kacie, let me congratulate you on graduating from high school on D-Day. Maybe it is fitting that your class should graduate on this day, when the Allied forces invaded France on June 6, 1944, and started moving the Nazis back toward Germany. Good luck on your chosen major in college, and not too many parties now, study is very important.
As for this poem, I know exactly where you are coming from. I have lived this masquerade for many decades, and when the "fake" me started to come out, I prayed something would happen to shove her back inside, so I could live the life I needed to live. It usually did. Thank you for sharing this honest part of your soul. You wrote this one very well, and very true.
May the Lord Jesus bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and at your side constantly. With much love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & hugs, Barbie
|Reviewed by Michelle Mead
|Wow, it really built up to a great ending! Michelle|
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|So powerfully and honestly expressed, Kacie. Be true to your "self." It is plain to "get" from what you express that you are a goddess. So. Reign on. Love and best wishes,
|Reviewed by John Leko
|...of two...you pen of one...within two...one is hidden...and in lines of poetry...one finds twins.
well done Kacie...
|Reviewed by Karen Palumbo
|Always difficult to know which side of the self to adhere to, guess that is why we sometimes make mistakes. Artfully written...
Be always safe,
|Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
|Naaa, looking at your bio, this is third person fiction. Yet tip top notch prose...|
|Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU
Wise ponderings in "Gemini" make it a poetic-philosophic grand.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
|Reviewed by Paul Berube
Very well written. Your word usage is excellent. Take my word for it, always listen to that overbearing part of you. That's the part that usually cares about your well-being. Truth lies beyond that mask and truth is the part that gets recognition. Always be true to yourself and life will deal you a winning hand. Peace, Love and God's Blessings Always, Paul.