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| Reviewed by June Thompson |
1/23/2005 |
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unimaginable to some
lived by others
this was intense to say the least, one of the first but not the last poems of yours that I've read
shall I follow you to where realities lie
amazing write
thank you for reading reality check. I was certain it would go onseen for quite some time like many of my writes when I post more than one in a day. it made my day in a strange way that you read it and posted a comment on it. my story hadn't been heard in awhile. thank you for reading and breathing it in |
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| Reviewed by Kate Burnside |
1/20/2005 |
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| This is a staggering piece of insight and poetry, Ian. Such wisdom and lucidity that has been intelligently constructed and "forced" with disarming ease into a very tightly metred and rhythmical write. Bravo! This is top class for me today! Powerful sentiments are arguments expressed with stunning imagery - truly inspired! Just love Nordette's comment below. If I am understanding your final stanza correctly, then I agree that the character of the "God" that man has constructed is very much as you paint. But personally, I believe that resolution will come through the workings of the Prodigal Father who more than meets halfway those who sincerely seek His face, and who, having exercised their own free-will, have found it lacking and are looking for "another way"! Peccavimus, but you transcend with this fantastic analysis. TY Kate xx |
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| Reviewed by Janet Parker |
1/20/2005 |
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| This is brilliant and well written. |
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| Reviewed by Zenith Elliott |
1/17/2005 |
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| Ian, my dear friend...such deep thoughts are good for the soul. Very well done! |
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| Reviewed by Nordette Adams |
1/16/2005 |
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Oh, what now? All my life with Christian guilt, now what! Pagan guilt? ;-)
Bad Writing Junkie. Bad!
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
1/15/2005 |
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| Thank you for the lesson, Ian. I love learning new "stuff." Love and peace. Regis |
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| Reviewed by Jane Rodway |
1/13/2005 |
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| This is really well-written, always love that. The message is also an excellent one. |
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| Reviewed by Mitzi Jackson |
1/10/2005 |
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| thanks so much for the explanation....it read so much easier now (for me) Powerful in all its light!!! |
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
1/9/2005 |
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Powerful write Ian!!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by Sara Coslett |
1/8/2005 |
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| Ian, if I didn't know better, I would say you have found G_d. It is imperative that we keep pushing the envelope. As you said yourself, we live in the shadow of a dying star. The only hope for us is to leave this place before that time. The only way we can do that is through technology. What feeds technology...MONEY...GREED...WEALTH. |
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| Reviewed by Brian Pellerino |
1/8/2005 |
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| Powerful! And true, sadly. |
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| Reviewed by Lisa Hilbers |
1/8/2005 |
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Ian, how true it is. Yes we have sinned...the sinner's sin. We've taken for so long that trying to hand back what we've stolen would only be seen in vain.
Loved this write!
Lisa |
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| Reviewed by Judy Lloyd (Reader) |
1/8/2005 |
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| Now this is really a very open and honest poem and thank you for the translation. Yes we have all sinned and no one can pick up a stone. |
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| Reviewed by Sue Hess |
1/8/2005 |
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| wonderfully written and yes we certainly have... |
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| Reviewed by The Bear Paw |
1/8/2005 |
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Peccavimus, we all have sinned,
ignored wisdom for easy gain,
turned each from other to cult of self,
traded with the salesman priest,
bought instant pleasure with future pain,
swapped heritage for short term wealth,
thrown truthless prayers at empty skies.
Earth bleeds. May we yet turn the tide."
A very strong, upstanding write, Ian, and full of universal truth. Yes, we have all sinned.... and so sad, too, that some cannot own up to that...
In Spirit,
Bear |
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