Worries Of an African Child
by konye obaji ori
Monday, March 17, 2008
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Was hope here only when the Amazon queen Nzhinga
and Nehanda, the Mbuya, of Zimbabwe fought to shield us from slave ships?
Was pride gone after Yaa Asantewa addressed the chiefs
in that secret meeting in Kumasi?
Did the warmth of home die with Queen Kahina, when she wrestled
into the swords of the camel riding men?
Was leadership only when Shaka ruled over Zulu?
When Mansa Mussa ruled over Mali? Or when Askia ruled over Songhay?
As dark as the ages were, King Khufu built the pyramids
As dark as the ages were, a University stood in Timbuktu
As dark as the ages were, Imhotep out shone the moon with wisdom
Today shines as if it were twin with the sun
yet we cannot see our way to a better tomorrow.
What chased the once leading and liberal hill-gods away?
Was it the same thing that placed these curses on us?
Kwame Nkrumah, chanted his incantations
Sacrifices were offered by Nnamdi Azikiwe.
Jullius Nyrere performed his rituals,Patrice Lumumba cooked his concoctions
and the divinations of Nelson Mandela
have been great.
Indeed, our native Juju-men have tried
But the land is too sick for a few of them to heal,
Who will complement their works?
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|Reviewed by Lavendar Jazz
|A very moving and majestic write... Keep on writing, maybe someone will step forward and lead the next generation.|
|Reviewed by Charlie
|That open ended question is a stiller, and a mover. The whole poem is one of encouragement rather than whining, and that optimistic energy is very effective in motiviating one to reach out, get up, and do something. Good job. --Charlie Nit picks: your "today the ages shine" line is a bit awkward. It's that conditional tense that's missing. That "if" word throws it in to gear. "as if it were" is gramatically correct... (don't mind me, I'm the grammar queen) ...and likewise, ...divinations of Nelson Mandela "have" been great -- conjugate for plural tense...
But like I said, a powerful, optimistic piece like this is good medicine for the world. Write on!! --Charlie