Poets Online: In Response to July 2009 Prompt: This Was Once a Love Poem by Jane Hirschfield
I Once Was A Victim
Once a battered girl,
beaten with beatitudes and a belt,
trodden like thyme between hard rocks.
Once a bludgeoned wife,
threatened with words and weapons,
branded like chattel upon bruised flanks.
Once a bashful student,
filled with humility and hope,
infused like vodka over fleshy fruits.
Education, errors, and experience;
trials, time, and finally trust.
Then a blossoming woman,
sweetened with kisses and caresses,
softened like chocolate in hot hands.
Now a burgeoning surgeon,
endowed with power and pride,
hardened like steel in fiery forges.
And no longer victim: now cherished lover,
empathic caregiver and truth-speaker.
Joan Huffman 08/02/2009
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|Reviewed by ALMA NELSON-PIKLE
|Beautiful, deep, real, I can relate on so many different levels with the exception of the surgeon part (Lol!). Kudos to you for continuing on inspite of what you might have been through or even what you might go through. We have a choice in life, despite what our circumstances might be. We can choose to either be the victim or be the victimizer; either way, you have a choice. Beautiful word and write, thank you for sharing....|
|Reviewed by Frances Seymour
|Enjoyed the journey, Joan. Blessings...Frances
|Reviewed by Elizabeth Russo
|Strong use of alliteration and consonance throughout, Joan! And the strength of this woman is quite evident ... so satisfying! ~Elizabeth|
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|Thank you for sharing this most encouraging and empowering write, Joan. Love and best wishes,
|Reviewed by Axilea MU
|Assertive lines written with original imagery. Lovely tale of a woman's evolution.
|Reviewed by Lori Moore
|I love the empowerment. Wonderful poetry.|