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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
6/2/2012 |
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You provide much to reflect upon as you awaken thought and emotion via your verses here, Ron. Love and peace,
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| Reviewed by Patrick Granfors |
5/21/2012 |
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| Nowhere sounds like a pretty crappy place. Well constructed and interesting flow of ideas. Patrick...and yes I'm way behind on reviews |
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| Reviewed by Chip Bergeron |
5/20/2012 |
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| There are lots of turns here inm this poerm, Ronald. I really identify with your last stanza and coda. I've felt that way. |
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| Reviewed by Laurel Lamperd |
5/11/2012 |
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| I haven't seen the movie, Last Man Standing, but it sounds quite traumatic, Ron. Your poem is very direct. I think we all feel at times that we are the last man standing. A thought provoking piece of writing. |
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| Reviewed by La Belle Rouge Poetess Of The Heart |
5/11/2012 |
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| Well penned Ron and truly a fascinating write! |
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| Reviewed by Vivian Dawson |
5/10/2012 |
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A stimulation of the senses *Ron*
you have written so well for a
challenge of this magnitude!!!!
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| Reviewed by Larry Matthews |
5/9/2012 |
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I've seen the movie. Your poem is very well written and although disturbing very thought provoking. Impressive write.
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| Reviewed by Lily of Lough Neagh C. Dennis-Woosley |
5/9/2012 |
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How this touches me, but oh how sad that one must see their life in this manner. I have seen the movie, we can regret all we want if the living are about or are gone. To me this speaks inner reflection of one's self. Perhaps I am wrong, but this is my feeling. No-one should have to carry such a heavy burden. What we all must do is let it go. It serves no purpose and adds nothing to our existence. Such desperation Ronald.
Hugs
Love and Light
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| Reviewed by Linwood Noble |
5/8/2012 |
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| I like the way flow great poem!!! |
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| Reviewed by Annabel Sheila |
5/8/2012 |
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Wow! Powerful writing, Ronald! The weight of the world is a heavey burden..and sometimes it does feel like it's all on one's back!
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| Reviewed by Jon Willey |
5/7/2012 |
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| Ron, "limbo" is where we all are at" - "my chances are all gone, there are no more chances left. The world is on my shoulders, and it's too much to heft." - we are all searchers and our individual and collective worlds bear down upon us, unrelenting, yet it is," all we have left" - I wish you love and peace my dear friend - Jon Michael |
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| Reviewed by Axilea MU |
5/7/2012 |
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Like Richard, I am not familiar with the movie. I like the overall impression of standing on the edge of the world that to me seems to be linked to the "human condition". The lines "There was nothing to die for,but so many did." and "Nowhere is a very lonely place, I don't want to hang around." resonate with me.
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| Reviewed by Tom Hyland |
5/6/2012 |
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RON ... SOUNDS LIKE A 'CRY FOR HELP' TO ME.
MAN IS A GREGARIOUS CREATURE ... ERGO, UNWANTED SOLITUDE CAUSES LONELINESS. IT IS SAID THAT A PERSON CAN FEEL TOTALLY ALONE, EVEN IN A CROWD ... WHY?
IS IT MENTAL ATTITUDE? IS IT BECAUSE THAT INDIVIDUAL IS SO IMMENSELY DIFFERENT? DO CIRCUMSTANCES, OR ENVIRONMENT CAUSE THIS DEEP-SEATED FEELING?
"WALK A MILE IN MY MOCCASINS!" COMES TO MIND. 'OTHERS' CAN NOT FULLY EMPATHIZE WITH SUCH A PERSON, AS THEY CAN NEVER EXPERIENCE THE SAME SET OF CIRCUMSTANCES, BUT THEY MAY WELL ATTEMPT TO SYMPATHIZE, WHICH SAID PERSON MIGHT WELL INTERPRET IN A NEGATIVE MANNER, THUS FEELING EVEN MORE LONELY. IS THIS A POSSIBILITY?
"LAST MAN STANDING" ? OR, COULD HE BE JUST A 'DIFFERENT' MAN, UNABLE TO STAND? DOES HE KNOW OF OTHERS, WITH SIMILAR CIRCUMSTANCES, WHO CAN TRULY EMPATHIZE? IF SO, DOES HE COMMUNICATE OPENLY WITH THEM? DOES HE WANT TO? HAS HE TRIED? WOULD HE THEN BE LESS 'LONELY'? I WONDER ...
PEACE, TOM.
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| Reviewed by Sandy Hoynacki |
5/6/2012 |
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Oh the tormented inside which comes out in lines of dark waters..Yes, possibly treading toward the eye of suicide, he walks...
Fascinating poem, Ron... |
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| Reviewed by Mary Ann Biddinger |
5/6/2012 |
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Splendid write in intense emotions Ron.
Lady Mary Ann |
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| Reviewed by R David Fulcher |
5/5/2012 |
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| Good expression of desperation and loneliness...when is the story coming out? |
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| Reviewed by John Flanagan |
5/5/2012 |
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definitely different, Ron, and definitely
interesting; a bit strange, too, and quirky
but i like quirky and strange...and that
reference to limbo has me thinking; yes, it's
where a lot of us are at
well done!
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
5/5/2012 |
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| Interesting poem,Ron ... though it felt a bit forced it was intriguing and well written ... |
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| Reviewed by Richard King |
5/5/2012 |
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I'm not familiar with the referenced movie, but your last stanza, to wit. "... My chances are all gone, ...there are no chances left. ... The world is on my shoulders, ...and it's too much to heft. " ...leaves me with the sense of a pending suicide. Combine that with the title and it leads me to believe the last man standing intends to kill himself, thus ending mankind.
Scary stuff. Very dark, but interesting reading. Dick
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| Reviewed by Jerry Bolton |
5/5/2012 |
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| I believe I have enjoyed reading this more than any other poem of yours that comes to mind. There is just something lost and forlorn and DARK about it that grabs me. Good writing, Ron. |
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| Reviewed by Jane Noponen Perinacci |
5/5/2012 |
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| I enjoyed this tremendously! I've got to have a few Will Smith fan friends of mine read this! I know they'll love it!! Thank you!! |
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| Reviewed by Amor Sabor |
5/5/2012 |
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| I enjoy your ability to write and not allow rhyme to dictate your words. It seems it gets away from most but you have nonetheless mastered it well and the poems theme is never lost. Excellent write, Ron |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
5/5/2012 |
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An interesting and unique write...enjoyed.
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