Recent Reviews for Carissa J. Brookens
Madness (Poetry) - 7/12/2004 12:54:17 PM|
Thank you all for reading and for your comments.
Lady__The Source, This is a male/female relationship.
Sorry, it took me so long to get back to ya'll.
Have a wonderful day ya'll! Hugs, "C.J."
Madness (Poetry) - 7/9/2004 1:07:41 PM
is this a parent child relationship or male/female......either way......its horriffic.......
don't let it repeat........run!
pax and prayers........A
Madness (Poetry) - 7/9/2004 5:37:39 AM
very unpleasantsituation, yet well written
Madness (Poetry) - 7/9/2004 2:49:39 AM
I hope you don't take this wrong. This guy is not a man. He's a bully who loves to beat on the weak and innocent. I'de love 5 minutes in a room with him. Only one of us would be coming out. I never did believe in packing lunches. If you haven't left him I would suggest you do and get help please. This guy is sick and needs to be put away. Best of luck.
Madness (Poetry) - 7/9/2004 2:22:10 AM
deplorable situation -get help ...
Madness (Poetry) - 7/9/2004 2:17:16 AM
Hon I've been there, it's criminal, he should be arrested, and you need to find yourself again, as a normal functioning human being.
Dont take this, he is the one that is sick, not you.
And dont believe the lies, or false apologies.
Abuse is a crime! Abusive types need a big burly bloke to take their anger out on, instead of a defenseless woman. What cowardice.
Co-dependancy no more Hon, before you lose yourself completely.
Plzzzzze think on it, keep in touch
Only Want To Use Me (Poetry) - 7/8/2004 4:52:33 PM
This is sad but sadly, true. I know that of which you write. Love, peace and strength to you, Carissa. Regis
Only Want To Use Me (Poetry) - 7/8/2004 3:22:52 AM
No one deserves to be treated that way. I admire you for your strength in being able to write this. It must have been very hard to do but that is a good sign of healing.
Only Want To Use Me (Poetry) - 7/8/2004 1:33:02 AM
Please read my last write," Surreptitious
It may help.
Abuse is not tolerable no matter what excuse is given.
Fly And Soar Again (Poetry) - 7/7/2004 5:44:17 AM
Very pwerful emotions. Well-expressed.
~ Sandie May Angel ~
Heard It All Before (Poetry) - 7/6/2004 4:50:22 PM
Count Your BLESSING's,i.e. YOU STILL HAVE A MOM_
Literally Millions Us Had No Mom Or Dad,i.e.If We Did They Abused Us!
There's Always The Door--Walk Out And Do Not Look Back!!
You Never Know What You Had Until You Lose It,i,e. She's Dead Gone!
Credit For Write!
Heard It All Before (Poetry) - 7/6/2004 1:35:36 PM
heartbreaking write! keep on writing; it will help you to heal from all that you have had to endure! (((HUGS)))
Heard It All Before (Poetry) - 7/6/2004 12:42:00 PM
Emtional write. Hope things will get better between you and your mother.
Sandie May Angel
Cure Of Eternal Life (Poetry) - 7/3/2004 7:44:46 AM
from the heart and well written ...
Hello Friend (Poetry) - 7/1/2004 8:14:11 AM
Hello Friend (Poetry) - 6/30/2004 9:58:24 PM
Message resonates. Well done.
Hello Friend (Poetry) - 6/30/2004 6:51:34 PM
solid poem on the travails of friendship ...
Untitled 5.21.2003 (Poetry) - 6/29/2004 9:52:50 PM
I understand COMPLETELY. This is where I am with my fiance and where we have been for the last two years. SO frustrating! God bless!
I'm Standing Strong, But... (Poetry) - 5/16/2003 12:09:20 PM
Ahhh, the perpetual victim. This is very good work. Could hear the screams. Well done.
Untitled .05.12.2003 (Poetry) - 5/15/2003 11:21:09 PM
Could be indigestion too. [smiles]
Untitled .05.12.2003 (Poetry) - 5/15/2003 1:38:58 PM
Great expression. Nice job.
Untitled .05.12.2003 (Poetry) - 5/15/2003 1:34:07 PM
Some of my suggestions are;
"Trapped into a marriage"
"I wish I never love"
Silent Love (Poetry) - 5/15/2003 1:22:19 PM
Thank you all for reading. Thank you all for commenting. Thank you for your title suggestions as well. I appreciate it all.
Silent Love (Poetry) - 5/14/2003 5:39:02 PM
good write... how about "Silent Love"
Silent Love (Poetry) - 5/14/2003 4:16:30 AM
You have raised some good questions. You have expressed your love so well. Great write!
Sandie Angel :o) a.k.a. May Lu $*_*$
So Scared (Poetry) - 5/10/2003 7:03:00 PM
I liked this.....so revealing. Teresa
So Scared (Poetry) - 5/9/2003 7:31:53 AM
just beautiful carissa
So Scared (Poetry) - 5/8/2003 4:27:33 PM
Rein is right you have nothing to be scared of.
So Scared (Poetry) - 5/8/2003 2:17:52 PM
Fear is a soul killer, I refuse to be scared any more, you have nothing to fear from me dear, I love your poetry dear CJ.
Weakening My Defenses (Poetry) - 5/8/2003 3:40:46 AM
Good Write CJ...beautifully expressed!
~Nikki aka Webmom~
What's In My Heart (Poetry) - 5/8/2003 2:07:01 AM
Funny how many times I read this one.....
Weakening My Defenses (Poetry) - 5/7/2003 1:43:41 PM
Great write. I'm glad that you have let somebody in. You always give your feelings such flight. Wonderful Job.
Weakening My Defenses (Poetry) - 5/7/2003 1:33:33 PM
a good write--
Special Love...Never Let Go (Poetry) - 5/7/2003 7:12:12 AM
"for the first time you are recognized"
just beautiful Carissa
Special Love...Never Let Go (Poetry) - 5/7/2003 6:38:20 AM
oh yeah.. but a little love for one's self wont hurt.
Thunderstorm (Poetry) - 5/6/2003 12:50:29 PM
ohhhhhh, (((HONEY))) i'm so sorry...i have always been afraid of storms...since moving to texas 20 years ago, my fear has intensified...especially since there's no where to hide...this piece rips out the soul...if you need to talk, e-mail me...i care...((((HUGS)))) and love, karla. *tears*
Would You Run or Stay (Poetry) - 5/3/2003 2:25:14 PM
Good one LB.
Blaming...Me or Regrets (Poetry) - 5/3/2003 12:17:46 PM
It was never your fault dear, never, it was the creep who hurt you both, you must believe that one day in your heart. you are wonderful and good, and kind.
Would You Run or Stay (Poetry) - 5/3/2003 12:15:58 PM
Ah CJ..this is so heart-wrenching and touches me so deeply, I am here my friend, Just a click away...
Would You Run or Stay (Poetry) - 5/2/2003 4:03:47 PM
<Waving "Hi"> Cj what a write this did turn out to be...follow both your head and your heart...yes it is hard and may tear you a little apart but both eventually shall agree...Very Goood Work WebDaughter!
P.S. My dad is finally coughing out the fluid in his lings and the swelling going down...so far still so good!
Would You Run or Stay (Poetry) - 5/2/2003 1:02:12 PM
It can be a slippery slope.
What a leap of faith, to risk a friendship that means the world, in order to share what's in your heart.
In a battle between the heart and head, I usually let my stomach decide. This one would get resolved over a sandwich.
Blaming...Me or Regrets (Poetry) - 4/28/2003 7:16:27 PM
I am so sorry, this is just awful.
Blaming...Me or Regrets (Poetry) - 4/28/2003 1:22:23 PM
I'm so sorry as well, this speaks of incredible pain and it's sad that this sort of thing is more common than we may think..
Hang in there :)
Blaming...Me or Regrets (Poetry) - 4/28/2003 12:05:24 PM
Carissa, how awful for both of you. I'm so sorry your little one got hurt. So are you.
You wouldn't have had it happen for the world. But put the accountability on the one who did the hurting, not yourself. No parent can be with a child 24/7 and prevent everything that happens. Blaming yourself and tormenting yourself with guilt only does more of the "hurting stuff'. It really doesn't do you or the child any good, does it. Do what you can NOW and let the past go. Be blessed.. Diane
Blaming...Me or Regrets (Poetry) - 4/28/2003 12:04:31 PM
sad and heartfelt write, carissa. well done, sweetie! :( (((HUGS)))
Thunderstorm (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 8:39:00 AM
heartbreaking and heartwrenching write, carissa! well done! love, your friend, karen lynn in texas. (((HUGS))) :(
Thunderstorm (Poetry) - 4/26/2003 12:40:04 AM
the storm within your heart is very powerful!
Thunderstorm (Poetry) - 4/25/2003 7:35:23 PM
I love it when a piece bares it all.
What Was I Thinking? (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 11:14:46 AM
great write, i felt this piece... i know how it is...
What Was I Thinking? (Poetry) - 4/17/2003 11:13:49 AM
ahhh the pain and anguish laid bare
Child Of God (Poetry) - 4/9/2003 8:27:48 AM
Thank you both. I am glad you both like it.
Jimmy, this is my way of saying thank you for everything you've done for me. I appreciate it all. However, I didn't mean to make you cry. *hugs my friends*
Child Of God (Poetry) - 4/8/2003 5:57:56 PM
Okay...You've finally done it CJ. I'm whiping the diamonds off my eyes. This was incredible! I just don't know what to say. I am completely speechless. You have just shown me your true self. One that is full of goodness, respect, and happiness. Your inner self has finally surfaced and boy did it surface well. I could never repay you for what you have just done for me. I will continue to whipe my tears away. Thank you very much. LC
Child Of God (Poetry) - 4/8/2003 3:26:48 PM
CJ..this is the most perfect and beautiful poem I have read yet! Jimmy deserves this so much! I love this! Outstanding description of a truly beautiful person.
He will love it!
Broken (Poetry) - 4/7/2003 9:48:34 AM
Ah Cj..I hate men who hit, and I am so sorry you have such a life as this, you deserve so much more...you are a wonderful person and a true friend,
To The Pig (Poetry) - 4/1/2003 1:33:52 PM
so sad, this write, but a very good one, carissa! well done! love, your friend, karen lynn. (((HUGS))) :(
Broken (Poetry) - 3/31/2003 4:31:51 PM
OHHHHHHHHHHHHHH this one made me misty eyed.
I gave you my trust...
I gave you my heart...
I gave you everything...
I gave you my all
And in return you broke me. "
Broken (Poetry) - 3/31/2003 1:50:07 PM
This poem of yours "Broken" is heartbreaking to read. I echo Jim's concern and also hope things become better for you.
Broken (Poetry) - 3/31/2003 1:41:46 PM
This was a poem that saddens me greatly. So much hurt and so much strife. I see a woman who is terrified of her father. That's never a good thing. A family should be where you feel comfortable. I hope things get better for you. I couldn't imagine living a life like you described here. Great write. Jim
Won't Be Your Victim (Anger Packed) (Poetry) - 3/25/2003 4:10:23 PM
sad and emotional write! :( (((HUGS))) hope you will be okay, carissa!
What's In My Heart (Poetry) - 3/24/2003 2:28:07 PM
It's always hard to tell isn't it? This was from a really deep place... Teresa
Never Shall I... (2 Parts) (Poetry) - 3/24/2003 12:59:40 PM
heartbreaking write! :( (((HUGS)))
Untitled (Poetry) - 3/21/2003 3:53:40 PM
Carissa...sad but you are a strong woman and I admire you..great write..floria
Untitled (Poetry) - 3/21/2003 3:10:15 PM
sad yet powerful write...
Untitled (Poetry) - 3/21/2003 8:47:11 AM
...So sad. The end was very very dramatic..powerful words written well. Good job..Teresa
What's In My Heart (Poetry) - 3/19/2003 1:58:54 PM
You are a good friend.
What's In My Heart (Poetry) - 3/19/2003 10:55:29 AM
caught between a rock and a hard spot. well done felt the angst. hope all works out
What's In My Heart (Poetry) - 3/19/2003 9:56:19 AM
wow...classic write...i love this write of urs....BHUWAN
A Peek Into My Heart (Poetry) - 3/18/2003 10:09:44 PM
Magnificent writing beautiful flow and sincerity
The Evil's Return (2 Parts) (Poetry) - 3/17/2003 1:24:58 PM
Descriptive free verse, alive with imagery.
The Evil's Return (2 Parts) (Poetry) - 3/17/2003 1:00:26 PM
>tears < :( (((((HUGS)))))
We're All Meant To Live (Poetry) - 3/16/2003 10:45:29 AM
Inhale, exhale take a deep breath find that inner strength hold on and don`t let it slip away magnificent poem
We're All Meant To Live (Poetry) - 3/13/2003 11:45:54 PM
Carissa, the right word at the right time can do so much to change your viewpoint and allow you to see the truth in many things. This is what a true friend helps you do. See things at a different angle, and with deep understnading. Bill
We're All Meant To Live (Poetry) - 3/13/2003 3:37:45 PM
Sometimes someone comes along with just the right words to make a difference. Means you have a special path to walk if you can hear the message.
We're All Meant To Live (Poetry) - 3/13/2003 3:26:30 PM
Do you have any idea how hard it is to write with diamonds in your eyes. That is sweet little buddy.
Happiness (Poetry) - 3/13/2003 12:54:32 PM
Happy thoughts my friend!
I Am Me (Poetry) - 3/13/2003 12:51:49 PM
Battle wounds are the badges of courage the heart wears.
Maybe If You Knew (Poetry) - 3/13/2003 12:49:48 PM
It had better not be-Little Buddy!
Maybe If You Knew (Poetry) - 3/8/2003 7:08:15 AM
There is sorrow in this and yet I sense great strength, as if the subject was looking for reasons, more than a cry for help to someone else but rather aimed inwardly. Written with a simple passion that I very much enjoyed. Extremely well written! Mal.
Maybe If You Knew (Poetry) - 3/6/2003 9:01:27 PM
I printed this out, because if it is the last poem you post, I want to keep it forever. I hope, that it will be joined by many others.
Maybe If You Knew (Poetry) - 3/6/2003 6:45:02 PM
"Maybe if you knew
This would be the last poem I posted
You would rely with some words
That would touch my heart
And possibly even make me smile."
such a beautifully, painfully well written poem. your words are wonderful.
Maybe If You Knew (Poetry) - 3/6/2003 3:45:37 PM
Very good write
My Love For You (song/lyrics) (Poetry) - 3/5/2003 3:58:53 PM
Carissa, about the song/poem. I ran through it in my mind, and it does have potential to be made into a song. It takes a lot of work and there is a certain structure and form to mke it into a repetitive pattern. Most poetry can be made into a song. But a successful song idea is hard to come up with. Check my last song: "A Castle In The Sand." The strongest thing abut it is the TITLE. When I fooled around, I came up with the title and then it ws easy to work around it. Usually I need to come up with a title and the first line. Note how I broke it down.
Verse, Chorus, Bridge, Tag. I was working with a formula; so that the cmposer could look at it and easily figure out music for it. This is hard work and takes practie. You have to much free flow. To develope a song like this ... you need a skilled composer to be working with you to create music that is not structered. This can be done. Probably, some of you greatest songs are done this way. Take a song like "Moon River" the music ws written first by Henry Mancini and then the lyrics by Johnny Mercer.
This is harder to do. But what I am saying there are many other ways to creat a song.
I used the Nashville formula. And it words for me on most of what I can do alone. Where I teamed with someone ... I could do many other things to create songs. Hope this helps you a little. Your friend ... Bill
P.S. I was able to use what are known as poser words. like ... mirage, sand, oasis.
Working words that connotate strength and force to impact the song. The lack of power words has always been one of my weakness. Also I have a hard time from making words flow. That makes me structure them. Again I need somoone to work with. You are quite a ways from a success song.
But keep trying and try to work around a strong. "A Castle In The Sand." Is a strong song idea.
My Love For You (song/lyrics) (Poetry) - 3/5/2003 3:56:18 PM
I think you did that very well.
My Love For You (song/lyrics) (Poetry) - 3/5/2003 10:09:04 AM
Beautiful songwriting...... Keep it up!
smiles (Poetry) - 3/4/2003 11:35:35 PM
Baby, I will give you a hug, if you promise to wipe the tears from my eye. Hug hug hug hug and a kiss on the check. Bill Murray
smiles (Poetry) - 3/4/2003 4:48:33 PM
this great message for everyone else but I shy away from hugs and physical touch of people but this was a very nice and uplifting poem great job on it
smiles (Poetry) - 3/4/2003 3:07:44 PM
((((((HUGS))))))) for the ones you never got...how sad...to never receive hugs as a child...and (((HUGS))) and your courage in writing this! emotional, heartrending...i love hugs, too...(((HUGS))) and do i need 'em today! love, karla. :(
smiles (Poetry) - 3/4/2003 3:06:38 PM
(((HUGS)))) back atcha, carissa! :) lovely write! love, your friend, karen lynn. :) i am a hugger myself! :)
smiles (Poetry) - 3/4/2003 2:59:10 PM
Wooooh. But true. We all need them, whether in person or in spirit.
Way to go.
The Memories Instilled (Poetry) - 3/3/2003 1:46:35 PM
Vicious circle. You've combined them well. I would title them Verse I, Verse II. Although, I must admit, there are those who can't hear anything unless you shout. As a hearing impaired person, I can appreciate that.
The Memories Instilled (Poetry) - 3/3/2003 12:09:57 PM
it works well and was enjoyed
Untitled (Suggestions?) (Poetry) - 2/27/2003 4:26:20 PM
Your Love is a Four Letter Word, would be subtle, but those of us who have been there will understand. I thank your God you have survived, and the universe that I can share it with you. It might help some to read my poems Sisterhood and Unwilling Warrior's Cry. You may find some solice there.
Untitled (Suggestions?) (Poetry) - 2/27/2003 1:17:41 PM
Very scary to read. To think you have gone through this and survived intact. I salute your bravery. My title suggestion is "Unprotected."
Untitled (Suggestions?) (Poetry) - 2/27/2003 12:43:41 PM
I like Josephines or "Scars On My Heart" and I will say this Carissa...I had a bad childhood but not as bad as yours...times I could have killed my dad...but God says "Honor they father and they mother" by doing this and forgiving them you get the blessing..You turn out to be the beautiful young lady that they dont deserve..You show them how you can turn out on your own..hatred has no place in your heart dear..it only destroys you...My heart aches for you...I pray God give you strength and peace...Floria
Untitled (Suggestions?) (Poetry) - 2/27/2003 12:32:24 PM
Sad write, Carissa. I only hope that it is fiction and not something you had to go through. Be well.
Untitled (Suggestions?) (Poetry) - 2/27/2003 11:41:15 AM
carissa you again stir my soul. "love scars" take care
Untitled (Suggestions?) (Poetry) - 2/27/2003 9:28:13 AM
Painfully written, I suggest that you call it, "Forgiven But Not Forgotten".
Untitled (Suggestions?) (Poetry) - 2/27/2003 9:19:09 AM
Oh My Lord, I am so sorry. This hurt me to read. It's an excellent, hearfelt work and I would suggest the title, "Destruction's Gifts"
Fufilling Your Needs (Please, Try NOT To Cry) (Poetry) - 2/26/2003 4:56:06 PM
What ever you do don't loose your self heads
Fufilling Your Needs (Please, Try NOT To Cry) (Poetry) - 2/26/2003 4:39:46 PM
Carissa this is a really good poem. I hope what you are writing about is way in the past? If not you need to tell someone who can help you get out of this situation.
Fufilling Your Needs (Please, Try NOT To Cry) (Poetry) - 2/26/2003 3:19:23 PM
Carissa this brought tears to me..Keep writing...writing can be very healing...getting it all out..sharing with friends that love you..I am so sorry you had to be submitted to this..God is his judge...try not to let him ruin your entire life...you have your life ahead of you...you are so young..I read your bio..trust in God..there is much strength there..keep looking to the light...Floria
Fufilling Your Needs (Please, Try NOT To Cry) (Poetry) - 2/26/2003 12:50:04 PM
tobeabused is wrong and painful to writeabout it thought takes alot of courage and bravery and taht is special so you should be proud of the fact you have the courage to talk about the abuse this was a very dark and sad look at a very emotional subject i should know since i too have been violently abused
Fufilling Your Needs (Please, Try NOT To Cry) (Poetry) - 2/26/2003 12:44:53 PM
painful but worth the write.. it really does help... Great write!
Fufilling Your Needs (Please, Try NOT To Cry) (Poetry) - 2/26/2003 12:32:56 PM
felt anger after reading this..and sorry and sad for you.. i commend you bravery in writing this one.
Fufilling Your Needs (Please, Try NOT To Cry) (Poetry) - 2/26/2003 12:16:01 PM
a very courageous write,
painful to read---
may it bring you healing
Inspiration (Poetry) - 2/26/2003 12:01:19 PM
omg *bawls eyes out* thank you all so very much, your comments are a great help 2 me
Inspiration (Poetry) - 2/25/2003 4:10:25 PM
Oh God dear you have a poet's heart, and so do we ... at least most of us ... we feel your agony and pain and want to help you ... We want you to reach out to us and let us lift you out of the pit and place your feet on higher ground and we also love you in the name of Jesus. Bill
A Gift (Poetry) - 2/25/2003 11:28:26 AM
I am a cat person myself but I've experienced the unconditional love of a dog and there's nothing like it. I understand.
Daddy's Little...(A Little Harsh) (Poetry) - 2/25/2003 11:24:08 AM
Very powerful. I think it would be even more powerful if spoken.
Inspiration (Poetry) - 2/25/2003 11:22:35 AM
beautiful and touching, from one poet's heart to another, draw upon my strength, and I will help you though, because you see, I've been broken hearted just like you.
Inspiration (Poetry) - 2/25/2003 11:19:50 AM
Your heart is on my screen and it's beautiful!
Inspiration (Poetry) - 2/25/2003 11:16:34 AM
A beauty from a beautiful heart. Thanks.
Daddy's Little...(A Little Harsh) (Poetry) - 2/20/2003 1:20:47 PM
Carissa, this is a very well written poem. Your flow and meter is great. And the sadness runs throughtout the poem. I got words for 'daddy.' I know what he needs! But you are surviving .... and I hope well. It takes time to get over these type hurts. My dad died in his fifties. I hated him then and now. And I hate to say that. Let's hope you find an emotional release and do not need to go on hating. Bill
Daddy's Little...(A Little Harsh) (Poetry) - 2/20/2003 9:19:40 AM
Name calling hurts more than if someone hit you...it is devastating to a child and to an adult...this was sad..Floria
Daddy's Little...(A Little Harsh) (Poetry) - 2/20/2003 9:00:54 AM
A Gift (Poetry) - 2/19/2003 9:08:56 AM
Oh that is loveable and adorable.
A Gift (Poetry) - 2/19/2003 8:58:32 AM
A better gift is on the way. You can bet on that.
I Am Me (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 6:49:38 PM
remember, size is a matter of perspective and you've seen into yourself quite lucidly...
I Am Me (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 5:55:07 PM
I Am Me (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 5:48:56 PM
This is a terrific positive write and I can see why people would try to emulate you.
I Am Me (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 11:50:05 AM
Small always makes the difference this is excellent.
I Am Me (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 11:37:43 AM
wow what a wonderful write. writing down what we feel inside always make us stronge then those that hurt us. Keep up the good work!!!
I Am Me (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 11:14:14 AM
outstanding write, carissa! be proud of you, and be the best you can be...that's all we ask of you! i love you, carissa, and i am proud to call you "friend"! love, your friend in texas, karen lynn. (((HUGS))) back to you, carissa! :)
I Am Me (Poetry) - 2/12/2003 11:06:10 AM
be the best you you can be...sounds corny, but it's true...i like who you are, carissa! and i love this write...(((HUGS))) back to you, love, karla. :)
Checked Out (Poetry) - 2/6/2003 1:39:57 PM
It is sometimes more safe to retreat into such darkness but then again moving about the world is helpful too it is such a two edged sword but anyways I really got into the poem and that was so cool great job!!
Checked Out (Poetry) - 2/6/2003 10:53:45 AM
People who haven't been there just don't get it.
The darkness can be a safe place to go, for sometimes, what we can't see, can't hurt us.
Checked Out (Poetry) - 2/6/2003 10:47:54 AM
I know this darkness. Nice write.
Quite Treating Me...(edited) (Poetry) - 2/5/2003 1:02:52 PM
rant on, baby gurl! it will do ya good! :)
Quite Treating Me...(edited) (Poetry) - 2/5/2003 10:28:46 AM
Carissa....beautiful vent....yes you defintely are adult...and know it and I know it too. Bill Murray
Quite Treating Me...(edited) (Poetry) - 2/5/2003 10:22:35 AM
I hate that feeling to.
Good vent of emotional
Dedicated Despite The Risk (Poetry) - 2/4/2003 2:01:03 PM
despite the risk...there will those that will take that risk...God bless 'em, every one. emotional, intense write...great job! (((HUGS))) and thanks for sharing this...love, karla. :(
Dedicated Despite The Risk (Poetry) - 2/4/2003 1:21:57 PM
awesome write! >tears < :(
Dedicated Despite The Risk (Poetry) - 2/4/2003 12:57:19 PM
beautiful tribute cj
Happiness (Poetry) - 1/29/2003 11:45:43 PM
I not only wish for your happiness Sweetie...I pray for it. Beautiful writing, beautiful heart. Write and let me know what's up...I care! God bless!
Why Did Not You Care? (Poetry) - 1/18/2003 12:02:08 PM
same here, ill never understand why ppl pretend they are blind...it makes no sense. look what happens.
Why Did Not You Care? (Poetry) - 1/17/2003 12:08:48 PM
I will never understand those who turn a blind eye to such as this. Am so sorry that happened to you.
Why Did Not You Care? (Poetry) - 1/17/2003 11:12:07 AM
well done and your right, there is no excuse for turning away
Why Did Not You Care? (Poetry) - 1/17/2003 11:10:15 AM
I hope you found the help you need. Great expression.
Childhood Bully-Caine (Poetry) - 1/13/2003 1:58:07 PM
and i am glad you ARE stronger because of what you have had to endure as a child. i had to endure the same thing; i went through HELL with bullies picking on me and the abuse i suffered at the hand of my two older sisters and grandmother. but that is all behind me now, and i am NOT looking back! i have a purpose in my life now, and i have jesus as my lord and saviour! thanks for sharing this heartbreaking write; i will keep you in my thoughts and prayers! love, your friend, karen lynn. (((HUGS))) :(
Away (Poetry) - 1/12/2003 5:43:52 AM
No, stay and face your demons. Lean on the one who loves you ... your hubby. Grow closer to him each day. Show how you feel and you will find the demons lessening each day. Bill
Away (Poetry) - 1/11/2003 8:04:24 PM
Sad poem moving so sad.
Away (Poetry) - 1/11/2003 7:07:43 PM
Sad poem...but full of emotions...well done...cheers...love n luck..BHUWAN
Giveth & Taketh (Poetry) - 1/11/2003 1:53:40 PM
It is a red-hot mark of the intimate crisis in our society that it is SomeHow not strictly for you and your father to decide.
My heart hurts for you, but don't give up on your countless reasons for being here. Vicky
Giveth & Taketh (Poetry) - 1/11/2003 11:44:18 AM
>tears < oh, how awful, carissa! this is too heartbreaking for words! i am so sorry! i will definitely keep you in my thoughts and prayers! love, your friend, karen lynn. ((((((((HUGE HUGS)))))))) to you, carissa! >more tears < :(
Talking To You (Poetry) - 1/9/2003 6:32:13 PM
Do you think this is going ot work? After all that has happened in your life with your Father? How can he help you if he never before. Bill Murray ((hugs))
Help Me-Help Him (Poetry) - 1/9/2003 7:47:10 AM
Sometimes the sad truth is that some just do not want to be helped and when that is the case there is nothing you can do.
Just For Grandma (Poetry) - 1/8/2003 11:25:55 AM
heartfelt tribute, carissa, to your grandmother. be there for her; it's the best possible thing you can do for her! you are in my thoughts and prayers! and so is your grandma! love, your friend, karen lynn. ((((HUGS)))) :)
Just For Grandma (Poetry) - 1/8/2003 10:58:11 AM
(((HUGS))) and tears...you ask to go instead of grandma...honey, she's lived her life, i'm sorry if that sounds harsh. carissa, your life is just beginning. spend the time you have left with grandma, and make new memories, that you'll treasure the rest of your life...don't focus on the cancer. she'll have bad days, and she'll have good days. on those good days, give her beautiful moments...when she's afraid or in pain, be there for her. this is the most special thing you can do for grandma. this is so heartfelt...my prayers and thoughts are with you and grandma. turn to God, and share your fears...ask Him to give you both strength and courage...and share this with grandma and give her my love...(((HUGS))) to you, too, carissa...and my love...karla. :(
Just For Grandma (Poetry) - 1/8/2003 10:39:22 AM
wonderful tribute of love carissa. this part of life is never ever easy.
Just For Grandma (Poetry) - 1/8/2003 10:25:04 AM
Something sweet like "Just For My Gramma"
poem is so touching. I cried when I got to the part aobut you want ot go instead of her. No, no, no, no. Never would someone her age want you to go and not her. Please, don't hurt her with this idea. She loves you to much to let this happen. Bill Murray
Just For Grandma (Poetry) - 1/8/2003 10:10:50 AM
Very touching. Love the emotion you display.
Look In Your Eyes (Poetry) - 1/6/2003 2:17:13 PM
ohmigod! what a heartbreaking write! my sister (and you) are most definitely in my prayers! i pray jesus heals your pain; you don't need these horrible things that have happened to you! >tears < love, and ((((HUGS GALORE)))), your friend, karen lynn. :(
Look In Your Eyes (Poetry) - 1/6/2003 12:37:22 PM
dont be so harsh on yourself, you were not the one in the wrong.
A touching poem, but wonderfully written.
Look In Your Eyes (Poetry) - 1/6/2003 11:41:01 AM
felt the anguish here also feel the heavy burden. i'm with Timothy on this one.
Look In Your Eyes (Poetry) - 1/6/2003 10:56:04 AM
I'd like to buy a round of therapy.....and a large order of jail time for the old man.
Look In Your Eyes (Poetry) - 1/6/2003 9:42:20 AM
A child can not be expected to carry the guilt that a full grown man deserves. Be there for your sister, let her know she is not alone, and that there should be no guilt on her either. Sometimes the most wonderful poetry comes out of pain. This is definatly such a case. Use everything that has happened and channel it to turn evil into beauty.
Look In Your Eyes (Poetry) - 1/6/2003 9:28:53 AM
I am so sorry that your Father has done this. PLEASE don't except the burden of guilt. It is not yours to carry. Each man is responsible for his own actions. You cannot, as a child, be expected to rise above your fears and take on the evils of this world. To a child the world is supposed to be a safe place and Mom and Dad are ment to be your protectors and your hereoes. PLEASE releases yourself of your guilt. If God can forgive us our sins, surely you can forgive yourself for something which is no part your fault. Is it wrong to be a child? NO! God bless you Sweetie. Beautiful writing. Keep up the good work. It's a wonderful release as I'm sure you know. Be there for your sister and love her and YOURSELF. I will keep you in my prayers.
Took Away (Poetry) - 1/4/2003 6:34:05 PM
tears in my eyes yet again...u want to know what i honestly think? i know u love ur father, but id like to hurt him...that is the truth, im sorry if u dont like it...yes, tragic poem, and im sorry u had to go thru hell like that
Help Me-Help Him (Poetry) - 1/4/2003 6:29:01 PM
omg, wow, i would be sooo scared too...i hope it works out for the best cj...and dont blame urself, soemone told me that blame isnt good for one to hold against ones self
Help Me-Help Him (Poetry) - 1/4/2003 12:02:57 AM
Most people who threaten suicide rarely ever go through it...it is an ultimatum that they generally make for reaction and to lash out in pain. However, you must take it serious every time for one day they will succeed or attempt it. You must contact the local authorities with this threat so they can at least make contact. I know that sounds harsh not knowing whether they will go through with it or not, but you will feel worse if you don't do anything. It isn't your fault if it isn't intentionally inflicted. I hope and pray for the best.
Help Me-Help Him (Poetry) - 1/3/2003 2:23:49 PM
Great expression. Very good poetry.
Help Me-Help Him (Poetry) - 1/3/2003 2:08:32 PM
Title it: "Help Me - Help Him"..............
This line should be: (Than) I can count. You have then.
Last line in poem .... correcting spelling of feeling (feelign)..typing error.
This is a good poem and a serious poem.
I see nothing wrong with it. (Except ... I would find a way to let the readers know in the first part what the problem was. Like he is threatening SUICIDE. You made us guess
till the end of the poem. Let the reader share the problem. By the end, they should be ready to make an intelligent comment.
....but the basic structure and idea presentaion is fine and your feelings come through to the reader. And it is your unique way of writing. The title I suggested can be any thing. I want the reader to be aware that something is wrong out with the Title of the poem. I want them to go into it knowing that here is a need here.
Help Me-Help Him (Poetry) - 1/3/2003 2:03:02 PM
"I Blame Myself" just a suggestion. hope everything will be ok. I'll be sending positive thoughts to you. Did you get my message on your board?
Not 2 Worry, Not 2 B Scared... (Poetry) - 1/2/2003 1:16:15 PM
So sorry and this was so sad.
hugs and prayers.
Didn't Get To Say-I Love You (Poetry) - 1/2/2003 3:23:44 AM
(((((((HUGGLES))))))) Carissa on a sad but beautiful and touching tribute to your Dad. May 2003 provide a means to a end to all your hopes, dreams and wishes sweetie! :O)
"WebMom" aka Nikki
Didn't Get To Say-I Love You (Poetry) - 1/1/2003 5:44:50 PM
You've just pointed out to me something I need to do now, while my father is alive. Thank you Carissa. I'm sorry you had to go through this. I know how it feels. It happened too, with another family member. What a heartfelt write.
Remember I Care (Poetry) - 1/1/2003 4:10:34 PM
Good piece. Such a nice gift to a dear friend.
Didn't Get To Say-I Love You (Poetry) - 1/1/2003 3:06:35 PM
Carissa, I like what you are writing, but it is hard for me to make it coherent in my mind. I didn't know till the clarification at the end of it; (the very last line) that you were writing about your Father. I thought it was a lover until then. And at least there should have been something in it to orient the reader. The first line could have been used to let the reader know who it was about: "Daddy, I didn't get a chance to say I love you." No more than that needed to let the reader know what is happening. I also think the title could be stronger and more orienting, like: "I Didn't Get To Say -I Love You." (but that is only an opinion)
These are in no way major changes. But with them, everything else I then read falls into place. The emotions you express are true and well presented. And I like it and I like your freshness. (((hugs))) Bill Murray
P.S. And who took him away?
Didn't Get To Say-I Love You (Poetry) - 1/1/2003 2:54:23 PM
This is beautiful!
Wonderful poem of tribute.
From a Daughter.
Wish Things Could Be Different (Poetry) - 1/1/2003 2:22:57 PM
Josie is so right! if your poem is rife
with errors, you have killed it. Spelling is so very important. Everytime a word is mispelled ... I have to pause and spell it, correcting it in my mind. Mispell too many words and I give up on the poem.
But you must have worked on it and now.....
LOVE IT. IT IS FULL OF NATURAL EMOTIONS.
EMOTIONS THAT POUR OUT OF YOU.
You keep writing and I'll keep reading your poems. (((((Hugs))))
Took Away (Poetry) - 12/31/2002 8:37:11 PM
Beautifully written poem, tragic topic.
Took Away (Poetry) - 12/31/2002 6:49:47 PM
Carissa...I don't know how you handled all those years. I am happy that you haven't tried suicide for two years. I can't even stand the reading of your poem and article. It is that strong and alive and I feel it and suffer with you. I really do. There is so much hate for the one who did this to you. I haven't felt hate like this in a very long time. I hope you have resolved some of your feelings in this. It takes time and effort to do so. Please we at AD
will noever turn our backs on you. If I can help in any way, plese let me know. Bill Murray. ((hugs))
Took Away (Poetry) - 12/31/2002 2:12:22 PM
I can honestly say that I think you are an extraordinary woman. I am proud to know you. By sharing this part of your life you are helping so many others, and you do it with more class and determination than I have ever seen. I mean every bit of that. I am standing right now, and applauding your strength and your valor.
This piece is perfect.
Took Away (Poetry) - 12/31/2002 1:48:29 PM
It`s hard to know what to write after reading this. Your writing is good, the content.. It`s something that should NEVER happen and does far to frequently. Perhaps a view of the other side of the problem might help?
One day a little girl, a friend of my daughters wanted to see my pc. I sat her on my lap and showed her what I was doing. I was later told, "that wasnt the smartest thing to do these days" it could be misinterpreted.
We all of us lose because of the actions of a few individuals, You, I and a little girl that I pray keeps her innocence until she choses to loose it.
I tell you this, because I know there are a lot of people out there that love you. If you can find a way to let them be closer, then life will be the richer for it. Writing your fears down is a good way to start. Letting someone close to you read what you have written....better still.
Little steps coupled with time will help you to heal.
Wish Things Could Be Different (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 5:29:45 PM
Stanza 5 thios is good!!!
Wish Things Could Be Different (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 3:16:28 PM
very good write, carissa! thanks for sharing! happy new year! love, your friend, karen lynn. (((HUGS))) :)
Wish Things Could Be Different (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 1:36:05 PM
Wish Things Could Be Different (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 12:45:12 PM
Unfortunately it doesn't flow like usual poems, but is a little choppy, though, this could work in your defense! Sometimes the choppy poems are very emotional and precise, and I think you did a fine job of portraying so. It's very complicated to write a choppy piece and I think you did a fine go!
I really am sorry to hear of this pain you're going through. I am one familiar with it as well ;) When in unrequited love, you always have a club of friends ;)
Warm Love and Happy New Year,
*- Brittany -*
Wish Things Could Be Different (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 12:22:32 PM
thank you both
no i won't delete your comments Josie
Wish Things Could Be Different (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 11:01:41 AM
I like this Carissa and I don't want you to take this wrong but there are a few things that you could fix that would help with the over all appeal of the piece. In stanza 1 in the seventh line "Maybe if my live" Should that be "Maybe if my life"? Stanza 3 "Maybe if I was not such a joke" Should that be "Maybe if I were not such a joke" (and you are Not a joke, he's an idiot) Stanza 5 "I feel in "love"" Should that be "I fell in love""? and Stanza 7 A misspell of decided. Now these are simply suggestions to help with the flow, and you can take them or leave them. I think you have some talent and I would hate to see it deterred with minor things. I really like the repetitions, it drives the point home. You can delete this if you'd like. Keep writing girlfriend, you rock.
Wish Things Could Be Different (Poetry) - 12/30/2002 10:37:43 AM
Carissa ((((Huggles)))) things always appear their darkest in their freshest hours but time and pain along with a few shed tears will wash them away! :O) A sad but heartfelt piece!
~Happy New Year~
Remember I Care (Poetry) - 12/23/2002 10:10:12 AM
thank u...over reacted? to wat? i dont remember...wait, i think i do...dont worry about it CJ ^_^ its ok...thank u again, and i will always remember
title? i have no idea...
Remember I Care (Poetry) - 12/22/2002 11:52:32 AM
Beautiful poetry. Bill Murray
Happy Holidays (Poetry) - 12/21/2002 8:58:16 PM
How timelessly sad. This is a tear jerker. I am quite sure your father knows and is wishing the same thing. But look on the brighter side of things (THERE ALWAYS is one): at least he isn't gone forever. You should show him optimisim too, he may need it more than you sweetie. A difficult time. A difficult poem. One person who easily put it together: you. Great Carissa.
Happy Holidays (Poetry) - 12/21/2002 2:08:58 PM
In my life this "Timeless Magic" evaporated in the face of divorce when I was 13 years old. Truly, Christmas has never been the same--but I have learned over the years that the human capacity for love and joy is huge--it is possible to grieve those we miss--and find sincere gladness with what and who we do have at the same time. I wish you well. Vicky
Who Cares? (Poetry) - 12/21/2002 12:06:22 PM
Hand Me a Gun (Poetry) - 12/21/2002 12:03:18 PM
hey, i can only speak for myself, but i would DEFINITELY care if u were gone...
Abandoned (Poetry) - 12/21/2002 12:00:53 PM
i dont really know wat to say...so bad at reviews...i really truly did enjoy this peice and i kinda know how u feel...
A Peek Into My Heart (Poetry) - 12/21/2002 11:57:57 AM
beautiful write CJ...i enjoyed reading this a lot
Happy Holidays (Poetry) - 12/21/2002 8:06:52 AM
My Christmas Wish (Poetry) - 12/21/2002 7:30:13 AM
Thank you, both.
And Happy New Year
To you both.
Maybe your Christmas be filled with happiness
And your new year filled with plenty of new happy memories
Degrading Words (Poetry) - 12/21/2002 7:17:11 AM
oh CJ, i wish i had been there to comfort u...i hope ur doing ok...a lot of things have happened huh? not a great holiday season...im sorry -_-+ u mean a lot to me too so dont do anything i might regret ~_^
My Christmas Wish (Poetry) - 12/21/2002 7:12:05 AM
oh CJ, im so sorry...everything at fireside is falling apart...i wish u could be there too -_-+ its not the same without u...so, i hope u get ur christmas wish, ill make it one of mine too ^_^
Degrading Words (Poetry) - 12/20/2002 11:56:11 AM
don't let people bring you down. you are better than that. please don't give up; you are a valuable person here, and you mean a lot to us here at the den!
Degrading Words (Poetry) - 12/20/2002 9:24:40 AM
don't let em get cha down.
Degrading Words (Poetry) - 12/20/2002 9:20:36 AM
Don't honey! Please! Life can be better, and it will be! If u wanna talk, I'm at kbarletta.hotmail.com
War Zone Part3 (Child's View) (Poetry) - 12/20/2002 8:25:53 AM
Thank you both for your comments.
Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year to you and yours as well.
War Zone Part3 (Child's View) (Poetry) - 12/19/2002 7:29:09 PM
Carissa I agree with Sabor's comments. Keep your chin up hon and Merry Christmas. Bill Murray
War Zone Part3 (Child's View) (Poetry) - 12/19/2002 2:01:14 PM
It is not an easy experience. It is devastating to the young so much that it mostly leaves deep emotional scars and tears many families apart. Many people do not understand the depth of these scars that are eventually carried out in later life in their relationships as well. It is difficult to understand for many of us how a family can easily come unravelled and how it affects the security a child experiences. Excellent write, Carissa. May you and yours enjoy a wonderful Holiday season and a prosperous new year.
Abandoned (Poetry) - 12/18/2002 1:49:05 PM
sometimes these things happen they Can heal, and move forward. best of luck