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The Smile (Short Story) - 7/10/2009 6:58:18 AM
It reads so easily Julie! Nicely done. It reminds me of when I was 7 and heard that grandpa John had died, I smiled too b/c what else is there to do? So I personally related to that aspect of the story, I'm sure others would as well. My question after reading the piece is how does your dad fit into the situation since your mom said 'it's just you and me?' Also, the paragraph starting with 'soon after...' made me chuckle. I want to read more!

The Smile (Short Story) - 7/8/2009 10:23:42 AM
Wow, Julie! Very powerful writing. The stark reality of what happened in this brief piece makes the reader want to know more. What happened before and after....? And, I somewhat agree with the other reviewer in that the English teacher is kind of extraneous. Your reaction is more powerful in the story. When will you have more for readers?

The Smile (Short Story) - 7/8/2009 8:20:47 AM
This is really great, Julie. I want more, a whole bunch more. I've never read any of your formal writings and I'm deeply impressed. I thought I would comment on 2 things. As an "audience" I felt deflected by the English teacher thing in the beginning because then I felt alerted to put on the editor hat or it put me back in the present instead of the past. Oh, I thought, where are we? I got back on when you wrote, "it was a flat.." This is really crucial to say all this because it's your reaction at the time and that's where you so artfully led me. The English teacher thing just dominates instead of YOUR REACTION at that moment of the phone call. Also, does it matter if the reader wonders why your Mom said, It's just you and me now, when Dad called? Where is Dad? This is amazing, Julie. Wow!

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