Recent Reviews for Susannah Carlson
Remote Control (Short Story) - 2/28/2005 4:32:29 PM|
Nice story. Great characters and description, and you held me on the edge of my chair all the way through.
Remote Control (Short Story) - 5/21/2004 10:34:05 PM
This story made me smile. This one seems to fit more into horror for some strange reason but it isn't a horror story. It does have those elements in there. You got some talent as a story teller. The Horror element appears at the end; making this story really suspensful.
If I Keep My Head Up, Looking East (Short Story) - 3/27/2004 4:26:08 PM
If I Keep My Head Up, Looking East (Short Story) - 5/8/2003 12:25:08 AM
Very nice piece, well written. Poetic imagery with a dreamlike emotional undercurrent. Loved the descriptive language.
Omphalos (Short Story) - 3/30/2003 5:12:16 PM
1846 - Keseberg (Short Story) - 2/25/2003 6:32:49 PM
i enjoyed the read ....... ;0) m
Hands That Will Not Work Together (Short Story) - 2/22/2003 5:38:09 PM
An interesting (but brief) glimpse of life. Well written. If I were you I'd flesh this out.
Omphalos (Short Story) - 2/22/2003 5:34:04 PM
Terrific. Very well written. Powerful and moving. Creeped me out more than a little. Good use of words. Good solid prose. Well done.
1846 - Keseberg (Short Story) - 2/22/2003 5:29:10 PM
Well written, on the brink of being powerful, but a lot is lost when we learn half-way through what this person is having for dinner. I'd rather the story skirt this and leave me confused as to who this person is and why they're alone until the end (as the story isn't that long). It seems this person is injured, but it's not real clear. Can barely move to one side of the cabin and yet can manage to "forage" in the snow. Gender is unclear (I assume male as you said "madman," but gender isn't important). Love the closing sentence.
Omphalos (Short Story) - 2/5/2003 3:28:31 PM
I really, really like that. Wonderful. Moving. Unique. Powerful and impressive.
Omphalos (Short Story) - 1/3/2003 12:21:07 AM
This is so moving.. i really loved reading it and felt all the emotions you expressed .. wow
Poison (Short Story) - 12/21/2002 9:16:19 AM
This brought tears..
Excellent. Very moving.
Hands That Will Not Work Together (Short Story) - 12/21/2002 9:09:11 AM
Excellent! I have been through it but could never have put it into words.
Poison (Short Story) - 12/20/2002 9:01:27 PM
Top-notch work! I remember the helicopters when they sprayed malathion everywhere when I lived in San Jose. This is pretty much the way it was...fruit at a premium and life somehow unbearable at times. Excellent write, Susannah. Have a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year for you and yours.
dark water (Poetry) - 7/15/2008 2:56:10 PM
The water seems a little murky to me. I get the mood but honestly don't understand the meaning. By the way, thanks for correcting enrichen to enrich in my poem Tasting The Night. No one ever corrects my English. I'm an old English and journalism major and editor of my college paper. Thanks! I needed that. I'll get back and read some of your other stuff. I know it's just where my mind is at this moment. Take care. Jerry- Try Gianetta Ellis if you haven't already. You'll like her.
Clyde in a Box on the Bookshelf (Poetry) - 7/6/2005 8:55:39 AM
Clyde in a Box on the Bookshelf (Poetry) - 5/15/2005 3:31:26 AM
It's never an easy decision. My heart goes out to you.
Clyde in a Box on the Bookshelf (Poetry) - 5/14/2005 12:17:56 AM
when i first read this, i was confused. when i read it again, i remembered my own heartbreak for my napolean. truly touching.
If You Were a Cowboy (Poetry) - 2/28/2005 4:10:46 PM
Brilliantly done.. a real slam without being ugly.
A Man (Poetry) - 3/26/2004 7:26:50 PM
just a short note to say i really like your work. look forward to more. dawn.
Friend (Poetry) - 3/26/2004 1:55:35 PM
I agree that this would be a good slam poem. It has a definite edge to it.
Commute (Easter) (Poetry) - 3/26/2004 1:53:43 PM
Eddie is very intuitive. The image of the hawk on the streetlight does stand out. I searched in vain for anything in this relating to Easter, so I must assume it just happened to have been written on or near Easter.
A Man (Poetry) - 3/23/2004 6:52:15 PM
a well networked solution to the madness of it all ...
dark water (Poetry) - 3/17/2004 8:03:43 PM
Dark water indeed Susannah. Your intelligent mind shines through in this poem. Maybe it a poem that has to be relived more than once in a lifetime. Bill Murray
dark water (Poetry) - 3/16/2004 5:24:09 PM
A dark write for sure. Chilling. Excellent imagery and flow.
dark water (Poetry) - 3/16/2004 12:28:07 PM
This one seems full of despair, like a lament to things lost.
Commute (Easter) (Poetry) - 3/14/2004 11:02:17 PM
Truly this speaks to my soul. You have spoken well, Susannah. Love and peace to you. Regis
Commute (Easter) (Poetry) - 2/15/2004 8:27:56 PM
i love the image of the hawk on the streetlight....sometimes our search is fruitless...there is always another day....good poem..made me think.
What's Mine (Poetry) - 2/3/2004 9:31:19 AM
These things that are mine aren't nearly enough in a life. It was me, as in you're the reason you're alone?
Manners (Poetry) - 2/3/2004 9:27:55 AM
This one put a knot in my stomach. I know of waiting with bated breath. Good job, ms. Eisner. If you haven't, please try my Long Gone Love and Ashes in the Wind. I know a writer when I read one and I'd like your feedback especially on these two. Thanks- Jerry
What's Mine (Poetry) - 11/4/2003 9:32:21 PM
And, so we discover how little "things" mean or, at least, how little they should mean to us. Very good,Susannah: brief, thought provoking and very deep in so few words. Visit me sometime.
Love in Christ~~
Commute (Easter) (Poetry) - 10/18/2003 3:41:50 AM
Manners (Poetry) - 9/21/2003 5:13:50 PM
Most creatively and cleverly done, yes yes quite effective and I have very much enjoyed!
Manners (Poetry) - 9/19/2003 5:20:15 AM
I like the way you did this.
Manners (Poetry) - 9/19/2003 4:41:40 AM
It's an interesting read. I especially like your last two lines:
"Growing as goldfish grow to fit
The confines of their world"
Yes, some see others as goldfish, but only to the confines of their own imaginations and their own world.
May Lu a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
What's Mine (Poetry) - 9/10/2003 6:50:23 AM
If You Were a Cowboy (Poetry) - 9/5/2003 9:02:18 AM
Very creative! Love it!
If You Were a Cowboy (Poetry) - 8/28/2003 2:20:57 AM
If You Were a Cowboy (Poetry) - 8/27/2003 10:42:38 PM
Well done poem.
Weeknight (Poetry) - 8/24/2003 12:06:13 PM
Much said in these three lines. Hope the weekends are more cheerful. Very nicely done!
Weeknight (Poetry) - 8/18/2003 7:58:04 AM
It is nice.
The Soft Revolution (Poetry) - 7/12/2003 9:08:22 PM
Susannah, this is very good. A fellow traitor quite liked it!
Friend (Poetry) - 7/12/2003 9:06:31 PM
Weeknight (Poetry) - 7/12/2003 9:05:02 PM
A well chosen few words !!!
Friend (Poetry) - 7/6/2003 4:31:14 AM
But did you explode? Did the clock get to zero? Or was the scream just inside you; not part of the existent world?
Weeknight (Poetry) - 6/20/2003 6:55:52 AM
I like it a lot! Pathos reduced to a few words-where it belongs. Thank you- Jerry
Friend (Poetry) - 6/20/2003 6:49:37 AM
Hi- Susannah- Your foto caught my eye- an interesting looking person. I like the way you express yourself in your bio. I'm an old journalism major myself. Your poem here is very powerful. I enjoyed it. Read my Out, Long Gone Love, Willow, Journey and Old Souls and let me have some real feedback, like I know you can. I'll do three more at least of yours, for an even swap. Looking forward to hearing from you. Thanks- Jerry
The Soft Revolution (Poetry) - 6/7/2003 11:43:16 PM
Weeknight (Poetry) - 5/20/2003 8:25:10 PM
Friend (Poetry) - 4/5/2003 7:58:41 PM
Life is a roller coaster stuck on Let 'er rip, ain' it? Thank God for friends who help slow it down. You have captured the breathlessness very well. Ups & downs &
lurches! Thanks for posting this.
The Soft Revolution (Poetry) - 4/5/2003 7:49:55 PM
Right on! "The grass that cracks the city
like an eggshell" ... "Club-footed pigeons carry word of revolution"... Wish I had found you sooner, Susannah. Phyllis:)
Weeknight (Poetry) - 4/5/2003 7:44:13 PM
Weeknight (Poetry) - 12/25/2002 1:15:45 AM
Ahhh . . . There's nothing quite like a domesticated life.
Weeknight (Poetry) - 12/20/2002 3:14:34 PM
been there, done that ...
Weeknight (Poetry) - 12/20/2002 1:06:29 PM
Short and brilliant! This poem brings to mind a husband and wife trying to have a romantic evening and the sound of their baby crying puts a damper on the moment.