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Recent Reviews for Krissy Brady
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Santa Skipped Town (Short Story) - 4/5/2003 3:35:16 AM
This is a very interesting story, clearly written from the heart. With respect to your writing, I only have one suggestion: Try using the simple word "said," instead of "mumbled, retorted." You do use other words effectively such as "cried, asked, screamed and yelled." But these are one syllable words. You want to end the action of speaking as soon as possible with a short word. I'd also avoid adverbs describing how a person speaks. Usually distracting and unecessary ("she repeated sternly," "Krystal said emphatically").
Overall a commendable effort. Study your craft, don't force the words or try too hard (your best writing in this came naturally when you talk about planting the "seeds" in the sandbox as I suspect you may have really done this as a child), and you'll go far.
Hit and Run (Short Story) - 2/4/2003 8:17:22 PM
This was an excellent write, you grabbed my attention to the very end.
~Michelle~
Apologies to Avril (and celebrities in general) (Article) - 4/28/2003 11:36:47 AM
Hi Krissy!
I listen to Avril in my car all the time and my kids just love her music. A great read, thanks!
Smart Kids Shafted (Article) - 3/23/2003 8:52:18 AM
Welcome to American influence. Keep writing - and READING. The world needs strong voices of reason - the people of your generation may be it's last hope.
Smart Kids Shafted (Article) - 3/21/2003 11:51:05 AM
you have much wisdom for one so young. great thoughts you write here! god help the young in our nation; and god help THE WORLD! :( (((HUGS)))
Expecting a Busy Signal (Article) - 3/14/2003 6:19:16 PM
Krissy, this is very well-written and I can relate to it a lot. I guess we have much more in common than our writing. I've been in the same situation since I was young also. Congratulations on realizing what it is you want and going for it!
Tamekia (chatterbox)
Internet for Introverts (Article) - 3/6/2003 11:28:45 AM
great writing! Your point is blunt, and I would like it if you would check out my teen writing section, it is a great way to be published and heard. here is the url
http://heartswithsoul.com/goa-teens.htm
Best wishes.....Shelley
Internet for Introverts (Article) - 2/11/2003 3:15:54 PM
whaaaat???? no authors den???? i love authors den...have posted on other sites, a.d. has been most supportive...(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :(
Destiny (Poetry) - 7/19/2004 11:30:13 AM
Krissy,
Excellent! Great depth in a tight piece.
Cynthia
Destiny (Poetry) - 5/17/2003 9:17:32 PM
destiny definitely has its twists ad turns... good write!
Destiny (Poetry) - 5/17/2003 8:29:13 PM
Very well done. Bravo, enjoyed reading.
Destiny (Poetry) - 5/17/2003 8:24:45 PM
Very unique and different, but in a very good way. You made me like the world "pedestal", lol, don't ask. Otherwise, I enjoyed it a lot. It really showed truth here in your theme.
Warm Love
*-Brittany-*
Vulgar Correspondence (Poetry) - 5/7/2003 4:22:36 AM
great write and message
Vulgar Correspondence (Poetry) - 5/6/2003 8:20:04 PM
I think you hit it on the head here. Sometimes it seems all people know how to do is swear and curse. It makes me wonder whatever happened to intelligence?
Vulgar Correspondence (Poetry) - 5/6/2003 7:27:49 PM
Well done
Vulgar Correspondence (Poetry) - 5/6/2003 7:21:52 PM
I hope it isn't catching. A nice poem. Glad I stopped by.
Vulgar Correspondence (Poetry) - 5/6/2003 7:16:18 PM
is it catching?
Tradition (Poetry) - 4/29/2003 10:49:28 AM
This is poetry at it's best.
Beautifully crafted.
-James
Tradition (Poetry) - 4/29/2003 8:36:54 AM
i like! :) (((HUGS)))
Tradition (Poetry) - 4/28/2003 8:47:53 PM
I like this......
Weapon of Choice (Poetry) - 4/25/2003 8:19:09 PM
enjoyed the read...
Weapon of Choice (Poetry) - 4/25/2003 11:59:08 AM
My treadmill gained speed
at the same time you
began looking towards the ground
as you walked.
Interesting stanza! Interesting concept! Well done
Weapon of Choice (Poetry) - 4/25/2003 11:40:35 AM
Nicely done. Glad I stopped by.
The Purpose Behind Writers (Poetry) - 4/8/2003 9:24:48 PM
4-08-03
While This Is Good__ Yet It's:
The Purpose Behind Human Beings Is as Long As There's Money To Spend,But Then They Become
Even More $Greedy$_
But Whence They You $Lose$ It_ You, They Become 1 Of Those Welfare Bums!
TRASK
The Purpose Behind Writers (Poetry) - 4/8/2003 5:37:45 PM
the purpose of this write is to get me to thinking. perfect
josie
The Purpose Behind Writers (Poetry) - 4/8/2003 3:33:55 PM
This is REALLY REALLY GOOD......bravo...floria
The Purpose Behind Writers (Poetry) - 4/8/2003 3:28:42 PM
Now this is good !
Whole (Poetry) - 4/2/2003 12:31:05 PM
I like your message and the way in which it is conveyed here. ~Joseph
Whole (Poetry) - 4/2/2003 11:39:19 AM
Well done.......
Whole (Poetry) - 4/2/2003 9:18:40 AM
Krissy, I believe you. I think we really do need the fortune cookies. They make better decisions than we can sometimes. Excellent write. Bill
Whole (Poetry) - 4/2/2003 8:31:42 AM
Krissy, excellent thoughts. Very powerful.
Ten-Year Anniversary (Poetry) - 3/21/2003 1:48:17 PM
Excellent piece
Chrissie
Ten-Year Anniversary (Poetry) - 3/21/2003 1:39:57 PM
Well done.
~E
Ten-Year Anniversary (Poetry) - 3/21/2003 1:11:18 PM
This is the stanza I enjoyed the most, "The world is a whirlwind as we talk in slow motion." Great write.
The Definition of a Word (Poetry) - 2/28/2003 9:26:38 AM
This is very deep and insightful write!!!
Empty Mailbox (Poetry) - 2/25/2003 3:37:38 AM
Brilliant...
I love 'gift of a lighter mind', looks like everyone else did too. LOL
Very good!
Debbie :o}
Empty Mailbox (Poetry) - 2/24/2003 10:26:31 PM
If only gifts could be so simple>>>>gift of a lighter mind.>>.very good!!!
Empty Mailbox (Poetry) - 2/24/2003 9:20:57 PM
Write it all in a letter.
I’ll supply the paper.
Give yourself the gift of a lighter mind.
Wonderful write...cheers...love nlck...BHUWAN
Lost Tomorrow (Poetry) - 2/19/2003 9:37:23 PM
Precious memories, how they linger! Thanks for sharing.
Nobody Noticed (Poetry) - 2/14/2003 12:05:36 AM
A deep write!
God Bless
~Michelle~
Nobody Noticed (Poetry) - 2/13/2003 5:41:44 PM
Very deep write.!!!!
Nobody Noticed (Poetry) - 2/13/2003 4:46:27 PM
This poem is tooo deeep, I couldn't understand it.
Sandie Angel :o)
Momento (Poetry) - 2/8/2003 8:53:29 PM
Krissy, well the clover at least can give you superstitious encouragement. But cannot brings certainty no more than an oujia board... Your are walking on egg shell. Be very careful with each step you take. Bill Murray
Momento (Poetry) - 2/8/2003 5:23:05 PM
Krissy, this is a great write, very deep. :)
~Kari~
Other People (Poetry) - 2/5/2003 10:30:45 AM
Wonderful creation. Excellent!
Other People (Poetry) - 2/5/2003 8:33:00 AM
Krissy, better than good. Excellent! Your brilliant mind shines through in your work. I read your bio. You have planted you feet in the direction of extreme success.
Never waver from you goal. Bill Murray
Other People (Poetry) - 2/5/2003 4:47:06 AM
Wow Krissy, this is bold.
Some wonderful lines here, "I am the third generation who threw away the key. " ....fantastic.
-James
Rounded With a Sleep (Poetry) - 2/4/2003 7:48:28 PM
Hello Krissy....Great write....Very Very well written....cheers...love n luck...BHUWAN
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