Recent Reviews for Elida Gonzalez
The Two Worlds (Short Story) - 12/18/2004 5:45:46 PM|
This is good background for a novel. As a short story, the focus is too wide. Most of this comes off as a story synopsis, not a story. And it has too much of "telling a story" feel. The general rule in writing is show, don't tell. I'd start over with a narrower focus and build the short story around a single problem and its resolution. Either that, or expand on all this to create something novel length. Best wishes with it.
All Alone (Short Story) - 11/23/2003 5:10:11 AM
Not too bad for your first attempt. It has a feel similar to Ray Bradbury or J.K. Rowling if they were colaborating. Very dark story to say the least -- you really have a touch for horror so stay with it.
Sinful Delight (Poetry) - 5/25/2010 9:29:18 AM
Oh, I can relate to this! Beautifully writtne, and a wonderful subject.
Michael (Poetry) - 10/15/2007 8:37:35 PM
Control (Poetry) - 12/4/2004 6:23:54 AM
and with control comes freedom - from fear and loneliness. You've diagnosed the problem and I'm sure the cure is right in front of you, this poem says it in so many words! :-)
Black (Poetry) - 7/24/2004 12:56:24 PM
Woah~! I am amazed! I loved this one, I feel this very exact way sometimes so I can understand where you're coming from! Great job! Keep up the great work! Best wishes.
Time (Poetry) - 7/21/2004 4:42:57 AM
saddness cries from this poem~~beautifully expressed~~
Time (Poetry) - 7/21/2004 3:24:55 AM
Very sad write but very well written. Contrary to many beliefs, " time is on our side " If it was meant to be it will happen. Best to be happy in love than miserable in life and vica versa. Hope everything works out.
Coward (Poetry) - 7/16/2004 5:07:04 PM
Excellently written. This was an awesome poem.
Destruere (Poetry) - 7/16/2004 10:25:00 AM
strenght to the individual of spirit and determination.....its a hard path........youth.........there is a song, i cannot think of the name of it, but its played in the cartoon movie treasure planet.....about a boy growing into manhood......darn i cannot remember the name......and this brings that song to mind........and i love that song.......so goes to say.......i love this tooooooo......pax A
Destruere (Poetry) - 7/16/2004 10:15:42 AM
The demons of youth change all over the universe. This is a poem that tells the difference in a young mans choices.
Insanity (Poetry) - 6/22/2004 8:52:08 AM
excellent poetry.hit insanity right on the head.i've been there .i know.suburb job.
Insanity (Poetry) - 2/1/2004 8:30:50 AM
very good poetic synapsis of insanity's grasp ...
Fessel (Poetry) - 9/30/2003 6:06:20 PM
Absolutely fine work, enjoyed reading this one!
Fessel (Poetry) - 9/30/2003 4:22:08 PM
Fessel (Poetry) - 9/29/2003 2:16:16 AM
Fessel (Poetry) - 9/29/2003 1:29:15 AM
loved this smooth write!!!
Withdrawal (Poetry) - 7/21/2003 6:58:43 PM
This is excellent!
Withdrawal (Poetry) - 7/21/2003 4:57:45 AM
Withdrawal from tobacco was bad enough, I dare not even contemplate worse.
Withdrawal (Poetry) - 7/21/2003 2:59:25 AM
This poem is about drug abuse withdrawal? Sounds marvelous! Real.
Perverse Perfection (Poetry) - 5/24/2003 1:21:36 AM
Love it. A fun read. We are all a little perverse, aren't we? [smiles]Bravo.
"...Perverse perfection your all I ever dread..."[your should be spelled you're]
After Midnight (Poetry) - 4/30/2003 9:30:40 AM
Nope! I agree, nothing could be better... Excellent!
After Midnight (Poetry) - 4/30/2003 2:13:33 AM
This is very unique and bno nothing could be better.
After Midnight (Poetry) - 4/29/2003 11:48:20 PM
A very Unique poem. Love is wonderful isn't it. keep them coming.~Linda~
Sinners (Poetry) - 4/18/2003 9:37:33 AM
my head is spinning with the imagery you lay out.
Sinners (Poetry) - 4/18/2003 7:09:48 AM
Sound like a bad, bad, trip. Well described.
Sinners (Poetry) - 4/18/2003 6:51:27 AM
Very good poem.
Idol (Poetry) - 3/26/2003 5:07:06 AM
same here..... thank you though
Idol (Poetry) - 3/26/2003 2:13:14 AM
Elida, I don't know about your art, but your poetry is great. Bill
Idol (Poetry) - 3/26/2003 12:55:25 AM
Well done. From the heart.
Now the healing.
How Many Times (Poetry) - 3/25/2003 8:59:43 AM
Would all that are addicted hear.
As Dr. Phil would say, "how is this working for you?"
Another Cry For Help (Poetry) - 3/25/2003 8:07:18 AM
This poem was meant for my mother
To My Mother (Poetry) - 3/25/2003 8:05:21 AM
Even though she is a "bad mother", I still think she cares. Just like the poem says, I do still lover her, even when I'm not so sure. Thanks everyone.
Another Cry For Help (Poetry) - 3/25/2003 8:00:45 AM
This is so heartbreaking! The visions are clear,,and the cry for help is obviously forthright, Lisa
To My Mother (Poetry) - 3/25/2003 7:20:28 AM
To My Mother (Poetry) - 3/25/2003 7:05:00 AM
Heart breaking write--my heart goes out to you, dear Elida...
I cannot fathom how some parents can be so ruthlessly cold and hurtful towards their children. Never...never...
To My Mother (Poetry) - 3/25/2003 6:42:49 AM
Elida, sometimes it is those closest to us who are the most distant; sometimes for all our lives. I understand how you feel and the solution is so hard to reach the conclusion you need. God love her anyway.
She is still Mother. Bill