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Recent Reviews for Patrick J McCormick

Ultimate Terror, Ultimate Sacrifice (Book) - 10/27/2006 5:51:04 AM
Patrick - This is very good. You are immediately bringing the characters alive to the reader. A few suggestions: I see at least 7 possible chapter-breaks in the first part (before getting to CHAPTER 6). Rule-of-thumb: 1) when changing the story to introduce each character, break to a new chapter; 2) if with the same characters, and one chapter gets too long, break to a new chapter when a new day, new situation, or a new location begins in that particular story line. By giving each character their new chapter, the story line and characters won't co-mingle and maybe get confusing. Hope you get the idea of what I'm trying to say. I've read many books where chapters contain only a couple pages to separate diverse plots (explanations so to speak) within the whole story. Let us know when this has been published! Micke Another thought...you begin by mentioning "a young boy is found dying from an overdose...and brother is running from scene" - if this is the mainstay of your novel, and if all other characters are a part of mystery of "young boy found dying/running brother", I think the first chapter should begin with his (boy's)story/introduction. Then once the other characters are introduced, their backgrounds explained, the story will go from there and all will mesh easier.

Ultimate Terror, Ultimate Sacrifice (Book) - 10/21/2006 3:25:52 PM
holds reader interest

Jim, Where Are You. (Book) - 9/22/2004 5:19:48 PM
I obtained an early copy of the book and found it not only easy reading, but fairly fast paced. It has suspense, some sex, some humor, sympathy, several twists, happiness, sadness and if you are the type the ability to draw a tear. I thoroughly enjoyed it, and look forward to his next book.

A division between friends (Short Story) - 11/4/2006 9:39:30 AM
A most engaging story, Patrick. Well done! Thank you for sharing it. Love and peace to you, Regis

A division between friends (Short Story) - 3/18/2006 4:38:56 AM
Very good read read Pat. Thank you, Pam

A division between friends (Short Story) - 3/24/2005 9:21:22 AM
Patrick, An exceptionally well-penned, intriguing, and fascinating story ... I hope to go to Ireland someday and trace my Irish roots ... thanks!! Best to you, Robert

A division between friends (Short Story) - 3/23/2005 10:59:39 AM
(((Pat))) This is a very well done story; thanks for sharing! Very well done; bravo!! (((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D

A division between friends (Short Story) - 3/23/2005 9:12:37 AM
A very intriguing story, that was well written; kept me wanting to read faster. If added to (deeper involvement of the many situations) this would make a great novel! Micke

A division between friends (Short Story) - 3/23/2005 7:46:19 AM
Quite a gripping story, Patrick - and quite sad how organized religion ironically often drives men farther apart than bringing them closer together - under the same God.

A division between friends (Short Story) - 3/23/2005 6:01:13 AM
This is so sad Pat. I am very lucky I live in a country where the practice of religion is left up to me. It is too bad for Gerald and mary, cause they would have made a decent couple. It is too bad, that now, in 21st century, Ireland remains divided and religion is the reason for that division. Why can't other countries, practice all rights for their consituents, instead of just a few. This story Pat, made me cry, and even more so at Gerald's death, because of some crazed lunatic's, fascination with same sex behavior. I am so glad that I am who I am, that way no one can blackmail me, tell the neighborhood my so-called "secrets," or tell my employer, who already knows. Because of the strife around the world, and we even have our problems here, I would not trade the USA for any other country. Even when the director was found dead, by apparent suicide, I was depply saddened, as I do not believe that other human beings should kill other human beings, no matter what their faults. This is a very sad, profound and very deep write Pat, and even though I enjoyed reading it, it did make me cry. May the Lord be with you always, and at your side constantly. With much love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & (HUGS))), Barbie "If I have to...Then I may as well be."

A division between friends (Short Story) - 3/22/2005 10:19:18 PM
poignant read

A division between friends (Short Story) - 3/22/2005 9:11:16 PM
Thank you.. Great story. I only hope to be as good! By the way, Ireland is one of my favorite places! I do hope to be able to finnish the story soon. Rhonda

A division between friends (Short Story) - 3/22/2005 8:16:13 PM
Excellent story. A very sad and traumatic story of heartwrenching events of prejudice and all that it brings and destroys. Very Emotional good, happy and sad, fear, and many emotions. This is really a good story!. Excellent. I really enjoyed this. Thank You Pat Tracey

God (Article) - 8/1/2009 11:45:45 AM
Amen Patrick! Thanks for sharng! We really need to put God first in everything that we do, and think about Him daily!! Love And Prayers Always!!

How to clear the snow from your driveway (Article) - 10/11/2007 7:15:01 PM
You missed this one. Move to a warm climate. I have not seen snow in years and when I did, it usually was gone by noon. My son made a snow angel, and I had to ask my husband what a snow angel was. That would work for us when we have snow.

Ann Margaret (Article) - 3/31/2007 9:28:40 AM
Very Good. Famous people aren't always so aloof. They're human and caring too. And I always thought Elvis Presley made a big mistake when he didn't marry her. Now I know I was right. Carolyn

How to clear the snow from your driveway (Article) - 2/17/2007 8:48:15 PM
Patrick, This is your second writing on which I have commented. I again received my money's worth enjoying your cents of humor. There is one problem you omitted. It does not matter which method you choose to clear the driveway. After you have finished, the town's street plow will immediately come through and fill up your driveway entrance once again with more snow, this time densely packed.

Misused phrases (Article) - 12/5/2006 1:17:20 PM
A very cleverly written theme. Its significance should not be misunderestimated.....

A Mind of its Own. (Article) - 10/23/2006 5:59:22 PM
Patrick: there are books, by Rita Mae Brown & Sneaky Pie Brown - Mrs. Murphy Mysteries - that each (about a dozen thus far) contains a Cast of Characters at the onset. Not sure of any other books with this "cast" used. One point on adding the "cast": if you plan on continuing to write other Sgt. Bob White novels, I'd not use the "cast". Usually the throw-away "cast", are dead-ringers on who will not be around (the guilty parties) for future novels, as I've discovered in Mrs. Murphy Mysteries. Interesting information to learn from in this article. BTW, I've begun reading your book-chapters, and have it bookmarked to continue reading. Will leave a few comments when I complete the reading. I like the character of Sgt. Bob White...sorta like Michael Connelly's Harry Bosch character. Later - Micke

A Mind of its Own. (Article) - 10/22/2006 1:46:46 PM
enjoyed the read

The Passing of Pudge our much loved pug (Article) - 9/1/2006 12:44:53 PM
Hi Mr. McCormack, I loved your story about Pudge! I'm sorry for you and Sonia about her passing. It was both beautiful and heartbreaking. I know what it's like to lose a beloved pet. I recently lost my cockatiel Sunny. I had her since I was 16 years old. She was going to be 9, but she passed before her birthday. I hope that you get another pug soon!. I have five other birds, but of course they don't take the place of Sunny. Loved your story, thank you so much for this beautiful tribute. Very touching! Marissa

Divide and Conquer (Article) - 4/6/2006 3:49:28 AM
I'm not sure what I think about what you have written. I was born in Australia, Irish descent from my great grandparents who were born in Dublin. I have a fire within me that I choose to credit to my 'Irishness' and I am proud of that fire and the heritage. However I wasn't brought up to think Irish at all, it was never mentioned. I never knew my grandfather as he died before I was born. I would have loved to have known him though as I hear he was a thoroughly lovely man, and I bet my Dad took after him. I have red hair, fair skin, brown eyes, and lots of freckles lol. I definitely don't belong in Australia, the sunburnt country. When I was growing up I was drawn to books about Ireland, and I didn't know why. I had a 'thing' about the Catholic Church and yet I was christened CofE. My father would never allow any of the family to say he was Catholic when he was in hospital for fear a priest would visit him; he never went to Church nor did he mention it. But I can remember a story of how my Grandfather hated the priests and my father inherited this hate. Why? I never found out but I imagine it stemmed from my great-grandparents and maybe what they found in Australia with the priests as well carried the hate on. I had a very good friend, Catholic, not Irish, when I was growing up and I would go to church with her whenever I could. I can't explain the feeling I always had when I walked in the doors and sat in a pew. Even as a teenager it got to me somehow and I was always sad that my father decided none of his children would be Catholic. I noted your comments that a lot is blamed on religion and in the case of my family it appears that was pretty much where the problems sat. I don't know why my grandies left Ireland and it's too late to try to find out except for the bit of family history we have managed to salvage courtesy of an uncle and a cousin. My father's family are almost all gone now and I don't think they know much anyhow, those that are left. Seems it wasn't a topic of discussion or of pride to be Irish. I'm hoping to make it 'home' as I call Ireland later this year and I am excited at the prospect of standing on the soil there and thinking about a past that I never knew, but feel. I often wonder about the millions of Irish who live overseas and why they never get the yearning to return home. I guess you had to be born there to know the reasons why. I have such a strong pull to go there and I'm really not sure why. I wear a claddagh ring and pendant and never take them off. An interesting read for me though, some history to take in. Oh and I love Irish music - the sadness of it gets right into my soul. And then there's the other music, the beauty of it. Maybe in another lifetime I did live in Ireland. I hope so, and when I go back I will feel that I have been to the places I visit before. An exciting prospect. Thank you for your story and I will read more soon of your writing about Ireland. Take care. Vena

Patriotism (Article) - 12/14/2005 8:19:19 AM
You know, here in America we can come up with some very quirky bumper stickers. But the tatoos are even more bizarre. Talking about the "lap dance" thing--that was nothing like a tatoo I saw on a young woman's arm at a McDonald's restaurant in Grand Rapids Michigan that showed the backside of a nude woman with legs wrapped around the back of a man's body. What's worse. . . she had a young child in her company. And we wonder where the kids get this stuff? Amazin', ain't it? Politeness and Chivalry will never go out of style in my book. blessin's to ya Brother Patrick, cynth'ya lewis reed

God (Article) - 12/11/2005 11:05:31 AM
i got it too, and enjoyed it each time, glad to see it here again. truisms noted!!

Patriotism (Article) - 12/11/2005 11:04:31 AM
well done

God (Article) - 11/30/2005 9:59:50 AM
Patrick, This is so true; so sad how we have shoved God aside! Much needed write; hope you are okay! (((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :( Nice to see you again; you have been missed! :)

Ann Margaret (Article) - 10/31/2005 6:41:16 AM
Patrick, I was reviewing some of your work while I was taking a break from doing some of my family (McGovern/Kennedy) research from Caval and read Ann Margaret first. This is great. I intend on reading everything you have placed in print. Thank you for being a writer. Pam Kennedy Texas

Ann Margaret (Article) - 7/9/2005 11:02:44 AM
I once impersonated a movie star as a comedy routine, but I had no idea I was causing a public disturbance. In fact, I never learned about other people's ideas of women until I had become a mother and received a computer as a gift.

A belated New Years Resolution for the Silent Majority (Article) - 7/9/2005 10:52:18 AM
The mingling of races is in no way an advancement for society. It is instead a breaking and splitting of families and good times shared with our loved ones in the joy of happy memories and common traditions. America is mostly lost, and greatly in need of true wisdom.

Ann Margaret (Article) - 5/31/2005 9:06:08 AM
wonderful write, pat; thank you for sharing!! (((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in tx., karen lynn. :D

Ann Margaret (Article) - 5/30/2005 5:00:48 PM
You said, "I now make it a point to say "Thank you" to every person I come across who served in our Armed Forces. Freedom does not come cheap and I am grateful for all those who have served their country." This nam vet's wife sez thank you.

Ann Margaret (Article) - 5/30/2005 4:13:32 PM
Patrick, I cannot say Thanks enough thank you so very much for bringing this here today and I am sending this on to EVERYONE in my address book. This is THE MOST wonderful reminder and touching story I have ever heard. two little words that make a world of difference to someone so Brave and Courageous. Beautiful!! Thanks so much. xooxxo and MY THANK YOU to ALL THE VETERANS OF THIS FREE WORLD !!! THANK YOU!!I appreciate you I never once have forgotten any of you and Never Will!! SALUTE!!! All my Love Always for Each and Every one of You Everywhere as the team!!XOOX Tracey

Ann Margaret (Article) - 5/30/2005 2:15:56 PM
THIS welled up tears in this old farts eyes, let me tell you. Thank you for sharing this, thank you very much

Ann Margaret (Article) - 5/30/2005 12:33:13 PM
Thank you, Patrick, on behalf of all the Nam vets of my aqaintence as well as for those unknown and who gave their lives overseas...

Ann Margaret (Article) - 5/30/2005 10:29:28 AM
A wonderful testiment for those who remember our vets, from Viet Nam, and all other wars. Great that you posted this for all to see! Micke

Christmas Remembered (Article) - 5/8/2005 3:35:47 PM
Patrick, I enjoyed this article. I know that people usually only like to read Christmas stories around Christmas but I like to read them anytime. It's interesting that just recently I had a conversation with a friend about how I long for the simpler times of yesterday when the world I do beleive was a better place to live in for many reasons. Yes, it is nice to look back on the good times. I do that quite often nowdays. Sorry for your losses. I've had some of those and I can identify.

Divide and Conquer (Article) - 3/27/2005 8:53:07 AM
A wonderful insight into the basis of the Irish problem. Seems the world over, the "culprits" are those that cause the breaks between the "haves" and "have-nots", no matter the religion or tribe or politics. Ironically, the scare tactics "...about being controlled by the Catholics...and interference from Rome" was used in the U.S. against the candidacy of an Irish Catholic for President, John F. Kennedy; fortunately, it didn't scare all the people! Enjoyed reading this, Patrick. Micke

Divide and Conquer (Article) - 3/26/2005 6:21:11 PM
Excellent and very intersting article Pat. We are taught to hate Excellent! excellent! reminder and message to all All around the world!!! We need Good Memories to replace the bad. Perfection. I know they would rather have that. Thanks so Very Much Patrick Tracey

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 3/18/2009 12:05:37 PM
A GREAT poetic taspestry of your kind heart. May you always be as you are today. Amen! JMD

I'm Rich (Poetry) - 2/26/2009 2:45:14 AM
I work in a high school, and when i had to have brain surgery, I found out how many great friends I really had. What an outpouring of love. great poem thanks Randy C S mith

I'm Rich (Poetry) - 1/10/2009 1:12:33 PM
Thank you for this~`*

I'm Rich (Poetry) - 7/18/2008 12:12:24 PM
A GREAT reminder for all! Very colorful!!! JMD

The Lone Lady-of-the-Night in the Cold (Poetry) - 6/9/2008 3:28:25 PM
You would of landed in prison eventually, it would of not been worth it either, Know a friend who's son is having this problem with an internet friendship supposedly, that was an undercover police lady. Do not be trapped with the tangle of life, you did good to let her stay and get cold in her life. I admire you for doing it, and don't feel guitly, it was a bad scene you came across. You would of hurt your wife and your family too. Sometimes you cannot help others especially that kind of person.

Intimate moments with a special person (Poetry) - 6/9/2008 3:25:31 PM
Had a good time talking with my hubby Tom, We always could talk things over and agreed before marriage that that is what would hold our marriage together. It lasted til death parted him from me, a very sad time, I felt I had to go with him too and soon, but now 8 months and still grieving but still here. He will be waiting at the pearly gates for me to enter in, that is a nice thought to keep me going. Thanks for the write, so romantic and sentimental. We both were that too and life was worth living then with him.

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 6/9/2008 3:22:50 PM
Good tale of love and love that lasts and lasts until eternity. I had it too but he left Aug 17 07 to go with the angels in heaven and his Lord and Savior. He is in my spirit now too and I will love him always, He was so touching a person to me and sounds like you treat yours as he treated me. Nothing can keep love from growing, but death. Yours is still growing, I am sure.

I'm Rich (Poetry) - 6/9/2008 3:19:35 PM
Rich without all the money, but the feelings and the love that you have for her. Friendship means a lot and that is what life is about too, being friends and keeping them and trying to please them and letting them know things as this write says.

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 4/8/2008 10:46:02 PM
Written with a classic style and deep sincerity. Beautiful flow and meaning. Love the ending! Bravo~ Sheila

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 3/5/2008 9:11:20 PM
Patrick, You have done something in poem I think we all should do. Remember that everyone of us has been influenced for good or evil by others along the way. This is a great expression of acknowledging that no one is an island unto themselves. Good work! May your readership increase, as you touch others. -Zach

Intimate moments with a special person (Poetry) - 6/18/2007 10:47:29 PM
This was so beautiful and blissfully romantic! You possess what everybody dreams of, but few actually get! Blessing and happiness to You and Your Lady Love! SC

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 6/3/2007 2:06:30 PM
Beautiful poem, written with a true heart. An Irish gift for language. Barbara, a fellow Torontonian whose mother was born in Belfast.

I'm Rich (Poetry) - 5/10/2007 9:16:12 AM
that's fab and amusing!! quaint and pretty! =p ! keep it up ! Lilo

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 2/19/2007 5:50:41 PM
Such a beautiful write! Holly

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 1/14/2007 1:42:09 PM
beautiful and tender-glad i stopped by

Intimate moments with a special person (Poetry) - 12/4/2006 10:49:55 AM
What happened Patrick? There is so much hustle and bustle today. People don't take time to know one another before the relationship that perhaps should not have been is ruined by making a move too soon. This is so wonderful. I feel like singing 'how much is that doggie in the window, the one with the waggly tail, I do hope that doggies for sale'. While I walk and hold hands. (SMILE)

Intimate moments with a special person (Poetry) - 12/4/2006 2:59:48 AM
Hello Patrick, nice to 'meet' you. This is romantic poetry at its best and I commend you. I do hope you gave your love a copy of this beautiful poem. My warmest regards, CJ

Intimate moments with a special person (Poetry) - 11/16/2006 4:56:43 PM
Patrick, This is splendid poetry, which goes beyond the mundane...and into the realm of being connected spiritually. Having this depth of appreciation, for this kind of love which you share, guarantees its continuance. God bless you both. Rhonda

I'm Rich (Poetry) - 11/16/2006 4:51:37 PM
"Gold and silver have I none...but what I have, I give you." Sounds like you have a heart, after our LORD's, Patrick! Magnificent..and a REALLY REALLY BELATED HAPPY RESURRECTION DAY!!! Blessings, Rhonda

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 11/15/2006 6:46:03 PM
Sweet and wise and sincere. Thank Y O U !! 'Pea' <3

I'm Rich (Poetry) - 11/13/2006 9:25:12 AM
You sound like a good friend. Wealth isn't measured in coins. (Love, however, is a prized token.) Very good! C.S.H.

I'm Rich (Poetry) - 11/10/2006 6:49:10 AM
I found your work after you left a couple review... reviews lead me to others, Thank You. I love it when people find true gratitude in the things that really count. Wonderful reflection of graitude! Thanks, Linda (L. K. Craft)

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 11/6/2006 11:18:00 AM
A very stirring write, Patrick - you have, indeed, been blessed! And so was I, reading it. Rhonda

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 11/3/2006 9:26:48 AM
Wonderful write! A great journey called life and to know love is to be a part of it! It's so obvious you've been Blessed! Love and Peace ~ Kimmy~

The Touching of my Heart (Poetry) - 10/30/2006 9:27:33 PM
So very smooth, elegant and loving dear Patrick!!!