Identity Matrix (Poetry) - 5/20/2001 8:37:10 AM
I feel I can connect with you on this poem simply because I too know the complex "matrix" swirling around High School(yeah, I'm only 18 =/ Graduating in five days... *sigh*) Anyhow, I'll basically go through stanza by stanza and explain what I thought...
Stanza #1. Good, I like the way you give some examples and suddenly slam us with "One more vicious mind raped", Was the mind vicious before it was raped of the identity?
Stanza #2. I like the way you explain that they print a false ink and have to "rhyme" and have to hate certain individuals or beliefs.
Stanza #3. You use extensive color and landscape/nature imagery in this one, which is up my alley.
Overall : I liked it.