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Recent Reviews for Sidney Schwab
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Cutting Remarks; Insights and recollections of a surgeon (Book) - 5/23/2006 1:29:19 PM
Dear Sidney;
I immensely enjoyed reading the above excerpts! I don't know how extensive your gift was for surgery, but you certainly have a gift for story-telling. I wish you every success with your book. If these excerpts are any indication... you have a winner!
Hanley Harding (don't wanna use my "Doc" nickname around a REAL doctor!)
Thought Process (Short Story) - 11/29/2007 6:20:53 AM
Interesting take on a story that has been done before. No complaints except for something that reminds me of Bye Bye Birdy. The male lead, an author of musical comedies who is leaving Broadway to attend dental school (hey, I thought only med school washouts went to dental school!) has to write a new song for Conrad to sing to the female supporting actress before he ships out to Fort Dix for basic.
"One last kiss,
One last kiss,"
And then he blocks before coming up with a rhyme:
"I love your dentifrice"
At which the female lead opines "Too clinical."
I don't have a problem with the graphic description of penetrating abdominal trauma (though I suspect some readers stopped at that point) and it's not really a problem, but sometimes the lingo sends me to google (even though I was offered entry to Downstate as a second year subject only to completion of A&P) and the jargon is sometimes a bit much. And I don't get "jellyfish in systole" (well, I do get it, it's just that I never thought of a jellyfish as having systole or anything else referring to a heartbeat).
One final thought: after setting up the colostomy angle and how very angry/depressed the narrator is about that aspect of the injury, you did not say anything about the perp going home in a bag of his own.
As always, your writing is lucid, expressive, and illuminating. I just do not think you have dumbed it down enough to have mass market appeal, for which you have my applause.
Thought Process (Short Story) - 11/28/2007 3:29:38 PM
What a great story! This would get a 5/5 in my book, the imagery is wonderful.
Thought Process (Short Story) - 11/28/2007 11:03:23 AM
Dr. Schwab,
I think you're a wonderful writer!
Sincerely, Justine Hemmestad
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