Recent Reviews for Lorna Ochieng'
My Memories (Short Story) - 3/22/2009 10:58:33 AM|
Excellent. You got a lot of talent. This story is unmistakably yours, in the way it is constructed, in its perspective and in its complexity that is fully developed in so concise a text.
What impression would it make to you if the last line read: "Thank you, Mark. You are always there when I need you.", in the present tense instead of the past? Isn't the thought of him and the memory of the moments shared changing the mood of the protagonist and making her aware of things that are greater and wider in scope than her initial frustration? So even now the beloved and his spirit are present and still has the power to console (consolemight not be the right word in this context but you'll see what I mean:)). That, to me, is exacly what makes this story precious.
Beauty (Poetry) - 3/22/2009 10:39:01 AM
Very well stated. The gift to see beauty makes your soul shine. Your images here are very deep.
Heart in my arms (Poetry) - 3/22/2009 10:29:42 AM
Rhythmd and meter are first class, musical and easily flowing. What you say is very true, Miss Lorna, and realistically reflects basic experiences most people will be able to identify as their own, save those, of course, whom love has spared. :) Love is indeed the greatest insecurity there is and the greatest risk we ever run. But it is, paradoxically, also the only security, the only thing certain we can ever attain.
I like this poem, you see. I'd like to hear it set into music.
Heart in my arms (Poetry) - 2/7/2007 7:34:45 AM
The author has done a commendable work in trying to package all these emotions of loveless, desperation, sadness, loneliness and uncertainty of being loved.
Beauty (Poetry) - 2/7/2007 6:54:38 AM
Beauty is all about the simple things that make it great. Simple things like the sun rise in the sky, the beauty that never dies and is ever born again, in a world that dies. This beauty that is everywhere, the world should open its eyes in order to see it even through what others call ugly.
Heart in my arms (Poetry) - 11/7/2006 12:27:44 PM
"Heart in my arms"
Heartfelt and a devine write.
Just simply loved it!
Thank you for sharing,
From the Heart of an Artist Quiet Storm
Heart in my arms (Poetry) - 10/30/2006 12:27:58 PM
Missing one that you have grown to love is always sad when parted...........expressed so well.
Heart in my arms (Poetry) - 10/30/2006 12:56:46 AM
I miss the feeling
of your heart in my arms.
I miss the way
you would melt to my charms.
Dear Lorna...great opening verse....perfect...this is something which I will read again and again...written straight from the heart...cheers....love n luck....BHUWAN
Heart in my arms (Poetry) - 10/30/2006 12:54:07 AM
Great longing and sentiments!Wonderful write!
The Invisible Crowd (Poetry) - 10/30/2006 12:50:32 AM
Excellent write! very moving and powerful.Thank you for sharing