Recent Reviews for Sara K. Penrod
After Mars (Short Story) - 4/18/2005 9:19:57 PM|
"His warm breath is familiar on my neck.
When I step out into the hot Florida sunshine, my husband, Lonnie..."
This was so effective I physically cringed and was left grinning for having been affected. I'm always gladened to see an author physically affect it's reader; it's like a kind of victory for the hometeam to see writing actually [B/]work[/B] on people.
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The children are well captured. I find it impossible to write belivable children. They're so [I/]random[/I].
"She presses her hand against the window. “Daddy missed you.” "
Also quite effective.
"He said that’s how the Indians used to do it, really and truly."
This is cool. I'm not sure if the child is still paraphrasing her dad when she says "really and truly" or if it was her own touch; either way the repeated speech patterns among members of the family (Erin having used the same line earlier) is very real.
I guess my only real critisism is that I had started reading this strory before, was turned off by the first three paragraphs, and moved on; and I'm a big fan of yours, Sara. Just after the landing the story becomes very [I/]human[/I] and holds me.
She kisses him once, hard, and drives away. I dig.
Chasing Storms (Short Story) - 5/30/2004 2:30:52 PM
WOW! intense, scary write--i could never do this, i love to study weather, but from inside a safe place :) A BASEMENT WOULD BE NICE LOL
great job! a keeper--thanks for sharing
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)
Alcoholics, Unanonymous (Short Story) - 8/14/2003 11:35:43 AM
I know how difficult it is to live a family member who was an alcoholic. I am myself an adult child of an alcoholic twice over. Let yourself heal.
Swallowed (Short Story) - 2/10/2003 7:52:19 PM
Great idea, great writing. Some of the dialogue between Alicia and Becky could have been improved.
How to Get Over Therapy (Short Story) - 9/4/2002 6:47:00 AM
I really enjoyed your story. It was well written. I am a therapist and have had a kid or two to react to me this way.
After Mars (Short Story) - 4/24/2002 2:33:58 PM
i agree with Katharine this is such a lovely story...in a way magical*
After Mars (Short Story) - 4/19/2002 10:15:41 AM
I like the way you help the reader to understand the adjustments one might go through as they return to the earth and how the character continues to feel drawn back into the skies. It would be easy to turn this short story into a full book. Good write.
Bonaire: A Brief Sketch (Short Story) - 4/9/2002 11:26:13 AM
I have seen (first hand) people die of alcoholic related deaths and it sickens me that these parents would do this and then laugh about it.
Losing Faith (Short Story) - 4/6/2002 2:45:13 PM
This is a good story, but it felt like you were leaving something out, or something had gone by unsaid, still it was good
Theism (Article) - 5/15/2002 5:51:34 AM
Awesome thinking! Loved this article. T h e i s m: strange word, isn't it. Makes me want to ask, what is a The that makes it an ism. LOL
I know I ask strange questions.
On Reading Yeats's The Second Coming (Poetry) - 12/15/2002 3:23:58 PM
I like this very much. "The Second Coming" is one of my favoriet Yates' poems. Your poem is worth reading more than once and gives the reader plenty to think about.
Basilica de Nuestra Senora de Los Angeles: Cartago, Costa Rica (Poetry) - 11/12/2002 11:38:44 AM
very good imagery, and a very good write! loved this; thanks for sharing! love, your friend, karen lynn. (((HUGS))) :)
Basilica de Nuestra Senora de Los Angeles: Cartago, Costa Rica (Poetry) - 11/12/2002 10:31:37 AM
Terrible Twos (Poetry) - 10/8/2002 1:01:35 AM
Well that certainly brought back memories. Well done. ~E
On Reading Yeats's The Second Coming (Poetry) - 10/1/2002 2:14:06 PM
... your 'take' on the second coming is proof positive that "the falcon can not hear the falconer."
Terrible Twos (Poetry) - 9/26/2002 2:31:16 PM
Wow! As cute as kids can be...I don't think I would want to visit that part of them. I suppose it would take too much out of me if that were day in and day out to be a babysitter.
Terrible Twos (Poetry) - 9/26/2002 9:29:38 AM
Oh wow how many memories those twos bring...yes all the stages lol
Visiting My Father for the First Time in Eight Years, in the Hospital After a Heart Attack (Poetry) - 9/24/2002 12:09:45 PM
packed with emotion
hope all is well
Visiting My Father for the First Time in Eight Years, in the Hospital After a Heart Attack (Poetry) - 9/24/2002 11:06:55 AM
well written. sorry you had to endure what you did; i know you wanted to see your daddy, especially after driving all that way. (((HUGS))) love, your friend, karen lynn.
Visiting My Father for the First Time in Eight Years, in the Hospital After a Heart Attack (Poetry) - 9/24/2002 10:50:38 AM
hits home to me too. Dont be harsh on yourself.
Visiting My Father for the First Time in Eight Years, in the Hospital After a Heart Attack (Poetry) - 9/24/2002 10:38:11 AM
Visiting My Father for the First Time in Eight Years, in the Hospital After a Heart Attack (Poetry) - 9/24/2002 10:28:19 AM
That just sux but the way that you wrote that last line brought it all together. I have a similar story. (((HUGS)))
Drifting Toward Detachment (Poetry) - 8/22/2002 5:15:25 PM
Love the imagery and words you used here. Very enjoyable to read.
Downtown at Noon (Poetry) - 8/22/2002 5:11:48 PM
Very smart poem. I'd probably have to read Stafford's poem to get a better sense of how yours was modeled. I did exercises just like that at one time. My poem was based on Paul Laurence Dunbar's "We Wear The Mask." I found that writing in someone else's style was instrumental in finding my own.
Parque Central, Alajuela, Costa Rica (Poetry) - 8/22/2002 4:17:03 PM
Very good write. Seemed to know your subject well. Keep it up and you will get better and better. Bill
A Letter Regarding Current Events (Poetry) - 8/14/2002 12:51:33 PM
what a powerful piece. your anger clearly showed through! may we ~NEVER FORGET~, but we ~HAVE TO GO ON WITH OUR LIVES~!
Waiting to Die (Poetry) - 7/9/2002 3:47:52 PM
very though provoking sara..well thought out ;) Hugs, Pam
Drifting Toward Detachment (Poetry) - 7/9/2002 3:45:17 PM
Beautifully done..I see a great talent here...never give up! Hugs, Pam
The Arrogance of American Triumphalism (Poetry) - 5/15/2002 6:59:10 PM
Repairing Freaks (Poetry) - 5/14/2002 7:15:06 AM
I hope I never need this kind of repair. :) But seriously I thought this was very insightful. It tells us something about ourselves that we don't really want to hear.
Drifting Toward Detachment (Poetry) - 5/10/2002 7:38:23 AM
Excellent way to capture a moment. I felt I was there.
Drifting Toward Detachment (Poetry) - 5/9/2002 2:55:38 PM
I agree with Eileen!!
Drifting Toward Detachment (Poetry) - 5/9/2002 12:13:50 PM
creatively said... nice progression...well done
How to See (Poetry) - 5/6/2002 3:18:55 PM
good write indeed...
On an Unavoidable Death (Poetry) - 5/5/2002 12:48:01 AM
spiritual stalking at it's finest...
On an Unavoidable Death (Poetry) - 5/3/2002 1:14:41 PM
An excellent write, chilled to give one the creeps!
Even Though You Won't Answer (Poetry) - 4/24/2002 1:37:02 PM
Very evocative, touching, sad. I hope it helped you, just a little, to write it.
I must say I don't understand what the spacing is intended to convey. I found it distracting but that's probably just because I'm not smart enough to "get it."
Hugs to you, Sara. I am a dad, I have two daughters (and three sons) that I adore, and stories like yours absolutely break my heart.
Cops and Robbers (Poetry) - 4/24/2002 1:27:46 PM
Respectfully disagree with the previous two comments. :)
I think this piece is about the contrast between "then" and "now." Th e author has grown up (or *should* have) and it isn't a game anymore.
OK, I would have liked the specifics, I'll admit it...but I think that has something to do with the fact that I can communicate with the author, so I'm curious on a more personal level. If I had read this in a book or mag, I'd be less curious. I think th epiece should be judged that way.
Gray (Poetry) - 4/24/2002 1:23:34 PM
Hi Sara! This is well-written, I like it. I do share a little bit Sandie's reaction and John's first comment. I think I get the overall idea but would like to see it developed more. Some of the details early on don't really add anything, IMHO, so they are at present a well-written distraction. If you were to expand the whole thing, the details might seem more at home. But what do *I* know? :)
Gray (Poetry) - 4/23/2002 1:52:41 AM
I reread this and it does not deserve such a low mark good write
Gray (Poetry) - 4/14/2002 12:31:36 PM
Even Though You Won't Answer (Poetry) - 4/6/2002 2:57:55 PM
I know the feeling very nice
Stillborn (Poetry) - 4/6/2002 2:52:12 PM
Sad and real..very good
Cops and Robbers (Poetry) - 4/3/2002 8:27:25 PM
Yes, you do need to add to it. What where you charged with. Did you do it and such. Or, the person that you are writing about do it. It is interesting, but I had to read between the lines to try and understand it. SD1
Even Though You Won't Answer (Poetry) - 4/1/2002 3:28:44 AM
Thats good it conveys why u are the way u are.
Cops and Robbers (Poetry) - 4/1/2002 3:26:23 AM
I liked it, its right up my alley. But u should add to it it feels incomplete
Gray (Poetry) - 4/1/2002 3:22:21 AM
Interesting but it goes nowhere. Is this a work in progress?
Gray (Poetry) - 3/30/2002 6:32:21 PM
Well, perhaps I'm dumb tonight. I just didn't get this poem. I don't know what it's all about.
Nice description though!
Sandie Angel :o)
Why I Hate Therapy (Poetry) - 3/20/2002 8:20:49 PM
rough, real, very involving
Cops and Robbers (Poetry) - 3/20/2002 8:18:36 PM
I loved it and I think it stands alone
On Trying to Write (Poetry) - 3/7/2002 6:32:28 PM
Nice work, Sara K. Penrod. Sestinas don't come easy, but you have drifted through this one with a certain, admirable ease. I think your name, too, should be relegated to poetic status. The meta-fictionistic nature of the narrative reinforces your theme as well as the technical process you're up against. "At My Child's Funeral" is excellent, too. I'll bookmark you and try to read more later.
Even Though You Won't Answer (Poetry) - 2/26/2002 7:07:48 PM
Even Though You Won't Answer (Poetry) - 2/26/2002 12:24:37 PM
Hi Sara, this is very well put together..
Lady Water Dove *~*~*~*
Even Though You Won't Answer (Poetry) - 2/26/2002 12:18:07 PM
Very visual. Nice Job.
On Trying to Write (Poetry) - 2/1/2002 4:00:06 PM
Oh, I loved this one. I won't mention the incredible arrogance of your friend (because that is not what this is about) and I won't mention that your poem has more honesty in it than many journalistic type articles I've read (because darnit that's not what this is about). What it is about is your incredible gift. You already are a writer. You know that.
Gunshots (Poetry) - 1/31/2002 10:36:05 AM
A graphic case of dying by the sword one lives by. The matter of fact tone gives it extra impact, really liked it. Janet & Alan
Stillborn (Poetry) - 1/17/2002 8:31:53 PM
I like the bravery of the poem. It is unafraid to focus on the energy of the imagery. I like poetry that doesn't force feed the image, I like the fact that you have given credit to the reader... Thank you for sharing.
"It's how you walk through fire that counts..." - C.B.
Stillborn (Poetry) - 1/17/2002 5:04:09 PM
Very good writing. I really like this Sara. Have you read the book, The Red Tent? I can't remember the author right now, but after reading your poem, I know you would love the book. Thanks, Lana
How to Live and Die in Ottumwa (Poetry) - 1/12/2002 1:41:09 PM
Waiting to Die (Poetry) - 1/8/2002 10:27:49 PM
For Poets Dead Too Soon (Poetry) - 1/8/2002 10:26:49 PM
Excellent, I do wonder where their 'voices' have gone, maybe they live on is us. It also reminds me of Anne Sexton as well. All of their words are burned into my mind. Janet
Waiting to Die (Poetry) - 1/8/2002 4:04:25 PM
very well written and thought provoking.Sensitivity on a tragic subject.
well done. Gregg