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Birth Rites (Book) - 1/22/2002 6:23:24 AM
Very graphic and powerful. The reader is brought into a frightening scene that makes one's heart begin to pound. Can't wait to read more.
Birth Rites (Book) - 1/20/2002 10:41:37 AM
Saviour From Darkness (Short Story) - 8/30/2004 9:19:50 AM
Oooh, good one! I like your style :)
Untitled (Short Story) - 1/14/2004 2:17:57 AM
Laura;
"That Wingless Thing" would be an intriguing title. May I suggest, though, that what you have written is not a story but a poem. It has the imagery and rythmns of poetry, and could be easily adapted. The first paragraph might read like this:
It is a wingless thing,
But not flightless.
For it soars within the mind,
Deep in the psyche there.
Dark is its coat,
However feathers nor fur
Keep it warm,
Only hate and anger.
It nestles like a
Cozy bed bug,
All snug until its tendrils
root deep and are penetrating.
I think I would change that last line to read "Penetrate and root deep."
Adapt this and put it in the Poetry section and you may get some surprisingly terrific reviews.
Dan S.
Untitled (Short Story) - 1/13/2004 9:31:51 PM
Dear author,
Your tangible description of the lusts of the flesh(centering on violence in the piece) was a delight to read.
The Locked Room (Short Story) - 11/28/2003 3:10:33 AM
Nicely written, the combination between the poetry and prose works in a well crafted work here. Powerful combination of the poem into the story.
Self Infliction (Short Story) - 10/27/2003 8:18:39 PM
Good story you got going here. It had been a long time since I read your work so here is one that I thought I would comment on. I noticed that you found your way to Rev. Fry's website -- some of his writing is something you would be left mindblown. As I am here, this is very mindblowing as well. I got some new work here as well.
The Hunter & The Hunted (Short Story) - 7/6/2003 5:40:04 PM
I swear you have created life with this marvelous piece! My head spun with the shifting perspective and I think the present tense lends a sense of immediacy. This is nothing short of a brilliant treatise on the nature of desire.
Adam
The Wolf & The Dragon (Short Story) - 7/6/2003 5:14:30 PM
This is short but I don't that anything is missing. I really felt that moment of suddenly seeing something fantastic amid the familiar. wow.
Adam
Saviour From Darkness (Short Story) - 7/6/2003 5:07:00 PM
A masterful character sketch. I got a real sense of a lifetime(deathtime?) leading up to the moment of the end.
Adam
The Hunter & The Hunted (Short Story) - 7/1/2003 4:01:18 AM
strong modern Gothic tale here. Coming from a person who as an eye for the gothic this is good.
Saviour From Darkness (Short Story) - 7/1/2003 4:00:03 AM
this is a good one from you, haven't seen you around in a long while writing in the short story genre. I guess you, Diane and Ron were the first writers I picked up on with the talent when I came here a year ago. I got some longer ones here since you were last here -- three Cthulhu Mythos stories as well as one which is an original nasty, all are original but the one titled "Library of Bones" is the nastiest one I have on the den until I wrote "Shadow of the Gathering."
The Hunter & The Hunted (Short Story) - 5/26/2003 9:09:00 AM
A very poetic like read. Detailed stories are the best, because it allows the reader to interact with the story's characters. I liked this story.
Death At Midnight (Short Story) - 5/29/2002 8:48:24 PM
I am giving this one a six -- not bad but the horror erotica been done to death. My friend writes in this style, tip for you -- try a different influence. I am giving it this rating because of the Anne Rice influence.
Death At Midnight (Short Story) - 1/20/2002 10:51:13 AM
Raven King (Poetry) - 10/6/2012 6:41:11 PM
Intriguing poem Laura! Thanks for the share.
Debbie
A Child's New Toy (Poetry) - 4/17/2012 6:41:37 AM
Nice use of words. Hospitals are freaky now lol
A Child's New Toy (Poetry) - 8/28/2008 11:14:35 AM
ewww.freaky.scary loved it
A Little Tasty Morsel (Poetry) - 2/22/2008 9:56:13 PM
Nice write. very Texas Chainsaw horror.
A Child's New Toy (Poetry) - 2/22/2008 9:52:26 PM
Nice, makes me even more frightened of the hospital. Good and gory. My kinda stuff.
A Gift of the Soul (Poetry) - 12/24/2007 8:02:06 AM
Beautiful.
A Vampire's Last Pledge (Poetry) - 10/23/2007 8:22:47 AM
Methinks your male readership doth protest too little.
The Dying Moon (Poetry) - 10/2/2007 6:55:49 AM
nothing less than pure talent. i love it...
A Child's New Toy (Poetry) - 8/15/2007 3:22:02 PM
The making of a true Gein.
my raven (Poetry) - 7/15/2006 11:44:07 PM
nicely done, laura. haunting emotion wrapped in wonderful imagery.
peace,
carolyn
All Knowing (Poetry) - 4/13/2006 12:50:39 PM
nice
shadows (Poetry) - 2/21/2006 3:49:33 AM
very well done, dark and compelling.
shadows (Poetry) - 2/15/2006 7:14:27 PM
Wisdom is definitely lost...excellent poem.
Black Rose (Poetry) - 1/21/2006 8:24:20 PM
wow
Society's Mask (Poetry) - 1/21/2006 8:14:07 PM
i like this alot... expecially the last line
A Freudian Nightmare (Poetry) - 10/3/2005 4:12:59 AM
I'm in the proces of writing a poem called "Necrophyliac vampire" and your poem ,gothic and real, is resembles an Anne Rice novel.Great write. Anne pawlak.
Lightning Bug (Poetry) - 7/12/2005 6:49:22 PM
Laura, your poem has such an uncanny twist... I have so enjoyed watching lightning bugs, as a child and now as an adult... but you've given it another perspective, of entrapment and passion and torment... you've made the usual unusual.
Lightning Bug (Poetry) - 7/12/2005 3:56:32 PM
The rage of the lightning bug is well-written. Enjoyed.
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
The Dying Moon (Poetry) - 7/8/2005 6:49:05 PM
I have been reading poetry on this website for
a long time and this is the first time i've
written a comment. I enjoyed this very much.
You can feel the melancholy longing one feels
at the loss of one so loved.
The Dying Moon (Poetry) - 7/8/2005 12:23:25 AM
a very haunting and well penned poem ...
The Dying Moon (Poetry) - 7/6/2005 5:53:49 PM
haunting, beautifully scripted piece, Laura. Very much enjoyed the read.
The Dying Moon (Poetry) - 7/6/2005 1:39:21 PM
powerful piece; very well done!
Oceans Alone (Poetry) - 7/6/2005 1:35:15 PM
Haunting verse with imagery that will linger for a long while--beautifully and achingly expressed! Well done, Poet!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. :(
The Dying Moon (Poetry) - 7/6/2005 1:34:11 PM
Brokenness and despair seep from the page and into the reader's heart; very effectively written!
(((((HUGS))))) and love, Karla. :(
The Dying Moon (Poetry) - 7/6/2005 1:27:17 PM
A very powerful write and very well done
God Bless
Michelle!
The Dying Moon (Poetry) - 7/6/2005 1:27:12 PM
Paints a picture of desolation and despair
However the darkest hour is just before Dawn
Peter
Puddle Dancing (Poetry) - 3/13/2005 3:03:41 AM
Sweet, simple but thoughtful.
No Longer - Tanka (Poetry) - 1/26/2005 7:23:39 PM
either way, its a bery good short poem ...
No Longer - Tanka (Poetry) - 1/26/2005 7:02:43 AM
Yes this is a very emotional write and interesting.
No Longer - Tanka (Poetry) - 1/25/2005 11:01:06 PM
a very powerful and strong poem,
Reindeer
No Longer - Tanka (Poetry) - 1/25/2005 10:07:14 PM
Short, Sweet and spiritual.
Good write.
Love, Bonnie
Society's Mask (Poetry) - 12/11/2004 9:09:16 PM
It's always best to be your own unique self.
Take care
HH
Society's Mask (Poetry) - 12/9/2004 4:07:29 PM
This reminds me of the idiots directing traffic yesterday when a big rig overturned. You sure put a spin on the state of affairs today.
Society's Mask (Poetry) - 12/9/2004 3:41:45 AM
A well penned poem of pure truth
Society's Mask (Poetry) - 12/9/2004 3:03:15 AM
Very thoughtful. It's too bad that it's true.
M.Rose
Society's Mask (Poetry) - 12/8/2004 10:55:44 PM
Interesting write on some very valid truths.
Allen
Society's Mask (Poetry) - 12/8/2004 9:36:05 PM
a generalization but nicely conceived truisms ...
In the Night (Poetry) - 10/27/2004 11:13:32 PM
The abyss deeply delved into ...well done!
In the Night (Poetry) - 10/27/2004 10:05:44 PM
excellent!
In the Night (Poetry) - 10/27/2004 8:39:29 PM
very profound poetry ...
Dance Within The Flames (Poetry) - 10/27/2004 6:30:02 PM
This is another great write. Wow...
Flutter of Souls (Poetry) - 10/27/2004 6:28:12 PM
This is very haunting and moving at the same time. Vey much enjoyed reading this.
In the Night (Poetry) - 10/27/2004 6:25:54 PM
Very nice...so much said with so few words.
In the Night (Poetry) - 10/27/2004 6:04:40 PM
A measure of writing skills is the ability to say a lot with a few words and you have that skill.
A Parched Mind (Poetry) - 10/1/2004 10:51:09 AM
yes i agree with bonnie, it felt like you combined two poems into one, i was still with writer's block when you moved to another subject but it is well written and i can sympathize with the block
A Parched Mind (Poetry) - 9/30/2004 9:34:56 PM
Hi Laura,
I enjoyed this write, until I reached the
second to the last verse. It's a lovely
verse, but jumps too quickly from writing,
to spirituality. The last two lines blend
the subjects, but leaves the reader hanging.
Try another verse, before "Parched is the soul that".
Introducing spirit into writing. It will make it all
come together nicely for the reader.
It's a good write. Please accept my review in good faith,
as it is intended.
Love, Bonnie
P.S. Please do the same for me. Thank You
A Parched Mind (Poetry) - 9/30/2004 9:00:49 PM
Nice write. I hate the times of drought. The ending is a gem.
Flutter of Souls (Poetry) - 9/30/2004 4:33:27 AM
Laura, this is so lovely! Mystical, haunting, moving, bittersweet. So skillfully composed, as well. Very much enjoyed this read!
The Ballet (Poetry) - 9/13/2004 6:15:22 PM
excellent ... i really like how you approached this poem ... if you ever get he chance, please read "Dancing Dreams" ...
The Ballet (Poetry) - 9/13/2004 9:00:47 AM
The hardest things to achieve also bring the greatest joy.
Dance on and love on, ballerina Laura
Joy and carefree days
HH
The Ballet (Poetry) - 9/13/2004 4:24:16 AM
Life is a compulsive dancer. We must always dance to the tune, no matter what it is.
I once wrote a poem "Compulsive Dancer", not sure if it is with this ID or my Sandie May Angel's ID; but you can check on both to read the poem.
Sandie May Angel
Puddle Dancing (Poetry) - 9/13/2004 4:15:16 AM
This one is excellent! Like this a lot!
Sandie May Angel
Her Name's Zoe (Poetry) - 9/13/2004 4:13:57 AM
Very nice Laura! A well-written piece that is close-knit and flows well.
Sandie May Angel
A Single Tear (Poetry) - 7/17/2004 6:17:48 PM
pain has a way about returning ...
A Single Tear (Poetry) - 7/14/2004 12:47:15 AM
Powerful expression of emotion. I just posted a poem with the same name and basic theme. Nice job.
Mixing Emotions (Poetry) - 7/13/2004 3:26:30 PM
The alliteration in the first line drew me in as a reader. The ending is excellent. Nice job.
There Sits a Raven (Poetry) - 7/13/2004 2:40:04 AM
really cool~~martin
There Sits a Raven (Poetry) - 7/12/2004 9:56:21 PM
Intriguing and very well thought out lines. Great metaphors.
There Sits a Raven (Poetry) - 7/12/2004 9:07:31 PM
Fabuolous poetry.Many excellent lines all great my favorite one though is
*******
'yet together we stand in rampant memories'
********
I have been there once and can relate...excellent work!!!
and another beauty I wish I'd thought of is:
'Twitterpated is the heart – '
I love the sound of that.
Best wishes
from
kay
Frozen July (Poetry) - 6/19/2004 8:13:17 PM
Well done Laura, a flicker can start a forest fire.
Just wait and see.
Rose and summer days
HH
Pills & More Pills (Poetry) - 6/19/2004 5:34:49 AM
this poem is so very true.they think they know your body more then you do.just maybe we want to be able to realize our true problems.instead of drowning them in a pool of medication.this is there way of controlling you instead of healing you.PILLS AND MORE PILLS?HITS THE NAIL ON THE HEAD.
On the Brink (Poetry) - 6/19/2004 5:21:03 AM
DISTURBING..BECAUSE THIS IS THE WAY I FEEL . THIS MOMENT AS MY WRISTS ARE HEALING...GREAT INSIGHT..GREAT INSIGHT
Frozen July (Poetry) - 6/14/2004 3:53:50 PM
Excellent,i.e. More Like Frozen In Hell!
TRASK
Frozen July (Poetry) - 6/14/2004 2:01:34 PM
Very deep and well written write!
Dance Within The Flames (Poetry) - 6/6/2004 9:54:14 AM
Some great imagery and meaning here, Laura. Thank you for sharing this offering. Love and peace. Regis
Dance Within The Flames (Poetry) - 5/21/2004 2:07:43 PM
wow!
The Lone Wolf (Poetry) - 4/20/2004 8:58:43 AM
Beautiful. The emotion captured here is amazing.
Within the Abyss (Poetry) - 3/28/2004 5:44:27 AM
This poem is inspirational and also loveable. This can be read in more than one way.
~ Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu ~
Dangerous Cherubs (Poetry) - 3/27/2004 10:19:08 PM
Brrr..., Laura. That was your intent right? Love and peace to you. Regis
Dangerous Cherubs (Poetry) - 3/27/2004 10:01:17 PM
Gives me chills! Nice work.
Dangerous Cherubs (Poetry) - 3/27/2004 9:12:41 PM
Dark and fun- I liked this.
Within the Infinite (Poetry) - 3/26/2004 10:06:39 PM
I can totally relate to this! See my post "Healing" and you'll see that it is true. Powerfully short and effective, Laura. Thank you. Love and peace. Regis
Within the Infinite (Poetry) - 3/9/2004 1:03:37 PM
Short but sweet. Infinite wisdoms and a playful melody. Just my speed.
Little Doll (Poetry) - 2/23/2004 6:28:32 PM
very unique!
Borderless (Poetry) - 2/21/2004 8:03:21 PM
I like this one. My soul wants some chaos divine.
Joy and starlight
Little Doll (Poetry) - 2/21/2004 3:00:59 PM
Wow! How did I ever miss this one? Great write indeed!
~ Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu ~
Harvest of Cycles (Poetry) - 2/20/2004 6:37:36 PM
EXCELLENT write on couplets..
The Rose Gauntlet (Poetry) - 2/9/2004 5:00:59 PM
This is a great touching write!
Burn Out (Poetry) - 2/2/2004 2:49:50 PM
It's better to burn out I hear,
than to fade away. Let me
become ashes so that I might
be scattered to the winds.
..what a glorious verse..love it!1 Ty Laura!!!
vesna :)
Burn Out (Poetry) - 1/30/2004 2:53:05 PM
I really like this one Laura...
Thanks,
Rodd
Burn Out (Poetry) - 1/13/2004 10:19:46 AM
powerful writing Laura, I not sure which is best.
perhaps I little R & R is needed
best wishes
Death Is Freedom (Poetry) - 1/13/2004 10:15:18 AM
Whether or not death is freedom, who knows.
This is a very gripping poem Laura. I started to say much more, but not knowing if this is nonfiction or fiction. I decided not to. If this is real, then you need help and a new environment and I hope you get it.
peace and happiness to you Lady Laura
Reversal Effect (Poetry) - 1/10/2004 11:55:17 AM
Ooops I almost forgot to say, I like the playful feel of this poem.
it is amazing what the human eye can see
peace and happiness
Reversal Effect (Poetry) - 1/9/2004 7:37:17 AM
and the ultimat reversal - digital cameras with negatives
I guess you have answered the question, "what color is the sky in your world"
loved the whimsey - good write
Kindred Missed (Poetry) - 1/8/2004 5:53:45 PM
a really beautiful poem. i dig this.
Kindred Missed (Poetry) - 1/8/2004 4:18:46 PM
Wow, Laura. We must be on the same wave length today. Have you read my poem "Moving Out"? It's uncanny we're dealing with similar topics at the same time. Thanks.
Space Flight (Poetry) - 1/8/2004 9:43:55 AM
This little soul of mine, might not know much about time, but it likes your poems.
peace and happiness unto you, Lady Laura
Tendrils of the Mind (Poetry) - 1/8/2004 9:38:52 AM
I agree with Leland, "It's good when it goes both ways".
Loved the line about wanting to gag the mind.
Have a wonderful day Lady Laura
Tendrils of the Mind (Poetry) - 1/6/2004 12:56:23 PM
Reaching out and touching. It's good when it goes both ways. Excellent expression.
Best regards,
Leland
Whispers In the Dark (Poetry) - 1/4/2004 6:20:58 PM
Ouch! This was powerful emotion indeed!
Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu :o)
Whispers In the Dark (Poetry) - 1/4/2004 9:17:13 AM
I agree Laura this is a powerfully penned piece!
~Nikki~
Whispers In the Dark (Poetry) - 1/4/2004 8:38:27 AM
Very powerful piece, Laura. Well done!
Packrat (Poetry) - 1/3/2004 12:24:15 AM
all it takes is one good memory to mash all those bad ones into smithereens
peace and best wishes for Lady Laura in 2004
Packrat (Poetry) - 1/2/2004 12:17:19 PM
Misery loves company. Enjoyable to know others are packrats for everything, too, including memories.
Best regards,
Leland
Packrat (Poetry) - 1/2/2004 11:18:10 AM
You ought to see MY apartment...stuff all OVER the where! NO KIDDING! LOL I am a packrat DELUXE! Wonderful write, Laura; enjoyed! (((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D
Packrat (Poetry) - 1/2/2004 11:11:10 AM
Nicely done, Laura.
Midnight's Magick (Poetry) - 1/1/2004 8:47:48 PM
i like the approach to this and the imagery it envelops ...
Midnight's Magick (Poetry) - 12/30/2003 10:34:04 PM
Fine writing Laura, a good poem to bring in 2004 with, I'd say.
Happy New Year to the Midnight Magick Lady.
Midnight's Magick (Poetry) - 12/30/2003 7:41:59 PM
Tingles.
But A Dream (Poetry) - 12/24/2003 3:33:38 PM
very lovely poem ...
But A Dream (Poetry) - 12/22/2003 9:40:57 PM
Fine writing Laura, emotion packed. Some dreams take a long time to come to fruition, maybe this is one.
I hope you get some snow tomorrow that is expected; could be fun to play in and bring back a sweet dream.
peace
But A Dream (Poetry) - 12/22/2003 12:23:19 PM
Beautiful, simply beautiful.
But A Dream (Poetry) - 12/22/2003 9:58:05 AM
Yes, very emotion-filled. Lovely poem.
But A Dream (Poetry) - 12/22/2003 9:31:37 AM
Beautifully written, filled with emotion! ~Z~
Tempest's Rage (Poetry) - 12/21/2003 8:40:24 PM
the sea and its shore can either be our mother or our slayer ...
Tempest's Rage (Poetry) - 12/21/2003 7:50:48 PM
this is quite a watery picture you have painted
surely the sea of madness, thou will calm over time.
peace
Tempest's Rage (Poetry) - 12/21/2003 8:47:25 AM
Beautiful imagery and depth of feeling...
'Mine soul aches for the
freedom from thy caress'
Soulfelt and heart wrenching. A lovely write!
Antoinette
Island of the Dead (Poetry) - 12/21/2003 2:31:25 AM
welldonbe! enjoyed reading ...
Darkness Calls (Poetry) - 12/19/2003 9:07:39 PM
Well spread those wings of your and soar soar soar
peace
Island of the Dead (Poetry) - 12/19/2003 3:26:40 PM
a wonderful and interesting write. love what's going on in this
Island of the Dead (Poetry) - 12/19/2003 10:40:49 AM
Excellent work Lady Laura, once more.
I enjoy your dark writes.
"Not even mine own ghost can penetrate as
I continue to eat thy pain as it mingles
with mine own."
wow very powerful, made my say ouch ouch ouch and my thoughts wispered in my ear, she needs something more nutritional to eat.
Perhaps a bucket of freshly picked romantic berries.
Happy Holidays
Weaving Reveries (Poetry) - 12/18/2003 8:39:54 PM
Interesting how you write a paen to lost love and others here have been saying that we should forget the past and move on. Somehow I like your take on things better.
The Docks Are Quiet (Poetry) - 12/17/2003 9:16:42 PM
Great poem Lady Laura, I really like the opening stanza. How lucky the wind to be able to buffet her skin.
"And I cry
an ocean in the name of love"
cry on cry on, in the name of love why not cry
Crying can be beautiful when done for the right reasons.
peace
A Gift (Poetry) - 12/17/2003 2:07:30 AM
Lady Laura this a soft and warm poem, how sweet, something a little different. I'll have to snoop around in some of your older poems.
Happy Holidays
The Black Phoenix (Poetry) - 12/16/2003 8:57:23 PM
soar on and enjoy the view above the clouds
peace
The Black Phoenix (Poetry) - 12/15/2003 11:40:42 PM
flows well ... imagery is vivid and eclectic ...
Mental Instability (Poetry) - 12/11/2003 8:54:59 AM
Powerful writing Laura, another gem.
With your talent I imagine you just about anything
peace
Dust (Poetry) - 12/9/2003 7:17:28 PM
Interesting take on this that Larry had. It seemed to me that the poem was written from the point of view of someone recently deceased to a loved one left behind. Intriguing write anyway.
Dust (Poetry) - 12/9/2003 5:58:32 PM
We often wish to be gone, but often that's a sham. We long to be captured, not blown away. Thanks, Laura.
Angel Dove (Poetry) - 12/9/2003 4:55:12 AM
An angel/dove in one, how nice. Did his handsomeness birth a smile on the poet's face?
a warmish write for this cold winter day
best wishes
Rockwell (Poetry) - 12/6/2003 3:15:56 PM
I agree...Very True...and wisely and wonderfully written!
~Nikki~
Rockwell (Poetry) - 12/4/2003 10:26:16 AM
excellent....and true
Twisted Is Love (Poetry) - 12/2/2003 9:38:06 PM
The lady's pen is flowing mightily today.
Sometimes licorice is more enjoyable to consume when you untwist it, maybe so is love, assuming it is still fresh.
best wishes
The Flute (Poetry) - 12/2/2003 6:19:57 PM
the flute must be handled with tender care and proper mouthing and the tones will flow ...
Blood Swoon (Poetry) - 12/2/2003 6:12:11 PM
Great write!
Tick Tock (Poetry) - 12/2/2003 1:00:22 PM
Very good essence of feeling!
The Flute (Poetry) - 12/2/2003 9:24:55 AM
I happen to think the flute is magical...I love it...I am sure you will master it as you have done with writing...nice poem..floria
Splinterize (Poetry) - 12/1/2003 9:33:16 PM
But Chaos has beauty too.
Adam
Liedrops (Poetry) - 12/1/2003 9:30:11 PM
I've been feeling just this way about TV. When I do watch it has to be PBS. I can't stand the commercials, all of them premeditated poisonings and the people just keep ingesting it all blindly. Sometimes I think society is trying to take random factors out of the equations so that everything is neat and predictable, so that we have a clockwork world who's workings can be easily manipulated to fit the sick fantasies of those in power. It just makes me ill to think about it.
Adam
Damaged (Poetry) - 12/1/2003 9:17:13 PM
I've known numbness. I don't like it very much.
Adam
Ticking Heart (Poetry) - 12/1/2003 9:11:14 PM
After reading this I multiplied it by 6 billion. If we could hear every heart beat of every person on earth we wouldn't really hear anything, not even a hum. The sound would be beyond the range of human hearing. We would hear silence. And perhaps that silence would be filled by the thunderous heart beat of God itself. Thanks for the thoughts.
Adam
Dark Fancies (Poetry) - 12/1/2003 9:02:33 PM
You've given lungs, throat, tongue,lips,voice to an open grave with this one! Brilliant!
Adam
A Child's New Toy (Poetry) - 12/1/2003 8:56:57 PM
Reminds me of a band called Carcass. They write about surgery and disease and gore in general. This is exquisitely morbid. I just love it. Also, some good line breaks. If you say each line in one breath you end up breathing quite fast. This lends a feeling of excitement, frenzy even. Very good.
Adam
Dark Fancies (Poetry) - 11/29/2003 1:14:47 AM
Oh. my. God. This one is impressive but takes you into the fineline of nightmares and madness. Very strong write coming from you here.
A Child's New Toy (Poetry) - 11/26/2003 9:32:48 PM
Ouch!!!!!!!
What happen to dolls and easy-bake ovens?
peace
Damaged (Poetry) - 11/24/2003 3:30:18 PM
(((laura)))
o, i felt this one--sometimes it hurts so much, it chokes you
been there--deeply felt this one--powerfully written
(((HUGS))) and love,
karla. :(
Damaged (Poetry) - 11/24/2003 9:44:07 AM
Wonderful poetry! Excellently done! (((HUGS))) and much love, your frien d in Texas, Karen Lynn. :(
Damaged (Poetry) - 11/24/2003 2:47:22 AM
Would that i could reach out, and take this person by the hand, and heal the pain, I would do it for I feel the pain.
Well done.
Robin
Damaged (Poetry) - 11/24/2003 12:35:36 AM
Beautiful soulful write, Well done,Laura.
Blessings,
Libby
No Key (Poetry) - 11/22/2003 4:46:45 AM
You are brilliant-period. Excellent work Laura.
Thank You,
Teresa Emilie
Liedrops (Poetry) - 11/21/2003 8:29:39 PM
I don't think I've seen anyone describe what lies do better than you. Maybe if the people who told them actually understood the damage they do, they might not do it so much.
Liedrops (Poetry) - 11/21/2003 10:03:29 AM
A most unique write Laura, I felt a few of these liedrops before, they do hurt.
Best wishes, now open up your umbrella and stop the pain
Splinterize (Poetry) - 11/20/2003 4:03:59 PM
Very pretty write Laura! I like!
Jack
Call of the Wolf (Poetry) - 11/20/2003 11:30:20 AM
Wonderfully melancholy write...full of soft imagery and feeling. The perfect image of "the lone wolf."
No Key (Poetry) - 11/19/2003 1:45:58 PM
Your form is incredibly complimentative to your poetry and your words. Not to mention the "story line" behind it is pretty well thought out and written. Interesting, intriguing and makes you think.
Blessings, + Brittany
www.brittanyrenee.com
Relentless Search (Poetry) - 11/18/2003 2:04:41 PM
Very Nice!!
Jack
Ache (Poetry) - 11/18/2003 9:36:10 AM
Wonderful imagery. Excellent.
Ache (Poetry) - 11/18/2003 9:03:58 AM
Ending perfection for this poem.
Dancing Tongue (erotic) (Poetry) - 11/18/2003 3:27:10 AM
Oh my what a delicious write!
Is there a dancing school that teaches this? lol
peace
In Reality (Poetry) - 11/18/2003 3:15:53 AM
Yes you can hope, yes you can dream, now set no boundaries and enjoy the soar of your spirit as you laugh in the face of reality
best wishes
In Reality (Poetry) - 11/18/2003 2:36:19 AM
Dreams are a window of the soul, but sometimes the company is grand.
Love this piece.
Robin
In Reality (Poetry) - 11/17/2003 10:00:54 PM
Eternity is the limit and it has none of the latter. This inspires my soul. Thank you, Laura. Regis
In Reality (Poetry) - 11/17/2003 9:24:29 PM
never limit yourself...
very powerful poem...
Hanging Hope (Poetry) - 11/17/2003 6:57:33 AM
"A taste of honey is worse than none at all" Smoky robinson wrote. But I live for that taste.
Adam
Smoothing of Time (Poetry) - 11/17/2003 6:50:30 AM
This is really quite profound. I find that the contemplation of time can take up a lot of it. But then one aspect of life is experience of time. So whether we try to or not we know what time is.
Adam
The Hallway (Poetry) - 11/17/2003 6:40:10 AM
This horrible place you write of does exist but we must remember that it's just one small part of the whole. Life is mostly beautiful.
Adam
The Hallway (Poetry) - 11/16/2003 1:19:13 AM
the horror of existence is always at hand, even when it seems least obvious... powerful depiction of the extreme lower manas...
Better Off (Poetry) - 11/14/2003 9:27:15 AM
I think perhaps we have all felt like this at times Laura! Sometimes we just have to learn to love & believe in ourselves enough to know it doesn't matter and go on being who we are and doing what we do anyway! Doesn't matter what others think, what matters is what you think! This piece speaks to the aloneness that all humanity feels!
Within a Migraine (Poetry) - 11/13/2003 12:27:36 PM
Laura...sooo truly spoken. I've decided they are 'Spiritual happenings' and are asking us to slow down and look within or maybe without...to see if we are 'intune' with our true selves and beliefs. This has really helped me to have 'fewer' or at least one's that are not quite as intense as they once were. Honest and beautifully written piece. Many Blessings, Libby
Smoothing of Time (Poetry) - 11/13/2003 9:20:12 AM
Awesome write. I love the imagery of the hourglass when referring to life. I could definitely relate to it.
Karen
Seeping Death Slowly (Poetry) - 11/12/2003 9:19:51 PM
Hi Laura, this is a dark one indeed, and well written.
Thanks for pointing out where/were..I changed it...
Seeping Death Slowly (Poetry) - 11/12/2003 12:07:14 PM
a very sad poem, well done laura
Seeping Death Slowly (Poetry) - 11/12/2003 9:41:00 AM
Very dark and depressing... I like it.
I Am Taking Control (Poetry) - 11/11/2003 7:53:16 AM
taking control of our lives is as important as breathing... excellent write...
Dancing Tongue (erotic) (Poetry) - 11/10/2003 9:33:43 AM
Holy hell, Laura! All I can say is Yum!
Adam
I Am Taking Control (Poetry) - 11/10/2003 9:27:24 AM
Good for you. I can't say that I've been there but the sentiment at the end is something I can relate to. Of course as a man not a woman.
Adam
I Am Taking Control (Poetry) - 11/10/2003 6:27:16 AM
Fantastic write!!!
I Am Taking Control (Poetry) - 11/10/2003 6:16:43 AM
Laura, it's a great feeling to get your life back.
I Am Taking Control (Poetry) - 11/10/2003 5:07:40 AM
This is BRILLIANT!
Dancing Tongue (erotic) (Poetry) - 11/8/2003 10:47:53 AM
WOW!
What write...
I find that cold showers often work to. ha ha.
Great job here keep up the good work.
Glenna
Dreams and Family (Poetry) - 11/7/2003 8:08:50 AM
Enjoyed much!!!!
Dreams and Family (Poetry) - 11/7/2003 5:32:01 AM
Great write, Laura!
Upon the Winds (Poetry) - 11/7/2003 1:09:04 AM
This is so beautiful Laura. It's almost biblical in its grace and peacefulness.
Adam
Death Is Not the End (Poetry) - 11/7/2003 1:04:16 AM
I wish I could have read this at the service for my aunt. I find here many of my own thoughts on death mirrored.
Adam
One Thrust (Poetry) - 11/7/2003 12:59:43 AM
I'm panting!
Adam
Lost In a Dream (Poetry) - 11/7/2003 12:56:43 AM
Ah, love.
Adam
Death Is Not the End (Poetry) - 11/6/2003 5:54:54 PM
a wonderful one laura
Death Is Not the End (Poetry) - 11/6/2003 5:39:38 PM
death is just another beginning...
very nicely written...
Death Is Not the End (Poetry) - 11/5/2003 11:36:04 PM
Love overcomes death. Long live the sweet memories.
Death Is Not the End (Poetry) - 11/4/2003 5:41:11 PM
Death Is Only The Begining,i.e. How You Get There Is How You Made It In This World To Heaven Or Hell!
TRASK
Death Is Not the End (Poetry) - 11/4/2003 1:18:50 PM
This is wonderfully expressed from the soul and the wisdom can be applied to much of life. Thank you.
Death Is Not the End (Poetry) - 11/4/2003 12:39:54 PM
beautiful write, healing thoughts
Death Is Not the End (Poetry) - 11/4/2003 11:52:11 AM
wonderful tribute to your pop-pop and nanny! they will live on in memory, thanks to this beautiful, heartfelt write! my prayers are with you! (((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in texas, karen lynn. :( >tears <
Unwanted, Berated & Trapped (Poetry) - 11/4/2003 4:35:16 AM
Self-persecution is a bitch!
Adam
Meditative Stasis (Poetry) - 11/4/2003 4:28:13 AM
This is truly beautiful.
Adam
Meditative Stasis (Poetry) - 11/3/2003 10:47:58 PM
a very lovely poem!
Meditative Stasis (Poetry) - 11/3/2003 6:13:06 PM
Deeply touching piece, very beautiful.
Pills & More Pills (Poetry) - 11/2/2003 8:49:57 AM
I've been on meds since I was about thirteen. Currently I'm on Geodon, Effexor, Klonopin in the mornings and Geodon, Trazodone, Zyprexa at night. i was misdiagnosed and was on various meds until about five years ago when I finally got on meds for schizophrenia. If it were all as beautiful as it so often is I might go off my pills permanently, but every heaven has its hell.
Adam
Make Them Stop! (Poetry) - 11/2/2003 8:38:41 AM
If I could I would. Believe me. It all began for me when I was feeling lonely and gave the gift of independence to some of my thoughts so that I'd have another me to talk to, someone who would understand. But it got beyond my control and not all the thoughts to which I shared out my will were friendly. There's good and there's bad in life and our minds are microcosms. But this analogy runs deeper in some than in others. But life goes on.
Adam
Make Them Stop! (Poetry) - 11/2/2003 7:36:40 AM
Laura, you and I are in the same boat. Check out my latest poems.
Keep speaking what you feel, and to hell with what everyone thinks,
or says; they could just be venting because they're jealous. :0)
Much love, Evelyn O. Simon.
Pills & More Pills (Poetry) - 11/2/2003 7:02:59 AM
This is sad, but I know this can happen to anyone. Some doctors put patients on pills when they don't know what to do with them.
Good write!
May Lu a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
Ticking Time Bomb (Poetry) - 11/2/2003 5:55:26 AM
I hear you, loud and clear. I understand too. Great expressed emotions in this piece!
May Lu a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
Orange Daydreams (Poetry) - 11/1/2003 10:25:16 PM
Could almost taste it.
Adam
Urban Legends & Local Tales (Poetry) - 11/1/2003 10:19:26 PM
There's this alley in the neighborhood where I used to live that I got the weirdest feeling about as if something terrible had happened there. Maybe it's just that it's shadowy, out of the way, I don't know... Just made me think of that. I enjoyed reading this.
Adam
She Flowed (Poetry) - 11/1/2003 7:59:09 PM
A sweet write Laura. She must have an erotic ghost captivated with her or a great imagination.
peace
Urban Legends & Local Tales (Poetry) - 10/31/2003 10:56:25 PM
This reads like the pictures on a movie screen. Nicely done!
Urban Legends & Local Tales (Poetry) - 10/30/2003 9:43:02 PM
Interesting write....BHUWAN
Metaphouric Is Love (Poetry) - 10/30/2003 10:50:47 AM
Excellant profound work Laura! Truly one of your best, and this one just singssssssssssss!!!!
~Nikki~
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