my beloved mother (Article) - 6/4/2007 6:40:56 AM
That is brilliant, apart from the bit where he sees the thief and in doing so decides to kill himself? I mean wouldn't you go for some kind of twist here, like the thief tells him, "I thought I had it bad but you...you have made me see sense in my life." Or something along those lines. And then you can have Jayakumar do whatever he has to....ie kill himself, or the thief kills him or he becomes a swami and seeks liberation from these infernal human realities. And why do Jayakumars possessions get thrown to the waste dump? Have another twist like the thief doesn't even want that guys possessions because he feels so sorry for him. And what does this all have to do with J's mother? What about his Mum? Okay just adding a few pointers here, for you to think about. Other than that it did have me intrigued.