Recent Reviews for Vesper Darby
Turkey Hat Jack (Short Story) - 7/21/2013 6:13:32 PM|
Perfect. This is story-telling at its finest. Reminds me of my adventure with a cornered roadrunner. He had to give up three feathers too! M.True
Eliza Blue Captures Hearts At St. Mary's Film Festival (Short Story) - 7/21/2013 6:08:13 PM
To twist the darkness into light, a neat trick! I loved the dandelion image. Too cute! M.True
Cement Dancer (Short Story) - 7/21/2013 6:03:16 PM
Again you demonstrate an uncanny way of putting so much into so few action-packed paragraphs. If you have not already, I do hope you find a way to publish and circulate your emotionally intense prose. M.True
Eliza Blue Captures Hearts At St. Mary's Film Festival (Short Story) - 7/14/2013 10:04:05 AM
I can only say "Wow"
Cement Dancer (Short Story) - 7/13/2013 11:13:16 AM
This is excellence. Can't wait to read more.
Eliza Blue Captures Hearts At St. Mary's Film Festival (Short Story) - 10/10/2012 9:39:36 AM
This is a wonderful story for Eliza to have and hold. Your imagination and literary flair is certainly showcsed in this piece.
Cement Dancer (Short Story) - 7/10/2012 1:32:28 PM
So real is this that my face hurts from reading it, which is the best way I can express how greatly I found this to be written. ~~ DIana
Cement Dancer (Short Story) - 7/10/2012 10:31:41 AM
Wow. A tremendous piece of writing here. Human drama, not sentimental but affecting. Felt it.
Cement Dancer (Short Story) - 7/3/2012 4:56:24 AM
Dark...and very dramatic....clearly defined characters...well penned, Pat...enjoyed the story...
Cement Dancer (Short Story) - 6/28/2012 1:47:28 PM
Pregnant is pregnant and this topic will always illicit debate. What I find fascinating is she seems to be bullied into a. Choice when ironicaly this is not a person you would want her to have a child with. She can dance alright. Right out the door. Dark and interesting
Cement Dancer (Short Story) - 6/28/2012 10:39:11 AM
Strange story, Pat. I liked the directness of it and the mood of the man, dark, and darker. Her leaving the two rings (engagement and wedding band?) in the man's hand before being led to the abortion room(?) I'm question my comments because I'm wondering if you haven't misdirected the story and it isn't an abortion after all. I think so though, she was only seven weeks.
Turkey Hat Jack (Short Story) - 4/3/2012 7:11:29 AM
Tall Tale. The g-kids are coming tomorrow and I will be sure to read them this one.
Eliza Blue Captures Hearts At St. Mary's Film Festival (Short Story) - 9/29/2011 12:29:53 PM
Captivating, I really enjoyed the story...M
Turkey Hat Jack (Short Story) - 9/29/2011 12:20:38 PM
I really enjoyed this tale . You have captured them in a lighthearted story which holds the readers attention....M
Turkey Hat Jack (Short Story) - 5/28/2011 6:28:34 AM
Oh Pat, this is delightful! I, too, have a grandson named Jack ... he's just as precocious, too! I especially love the western flavor you've used here in the story -- you have made a new fan.
Eliza Blue Captures Hearts At St. Mary's Film Festival (Short Story) - 9/19/2010 5:54:26 PM
Enchanting...delightful...are two of the words that come to mind. What a treasure awaits Eliza Blue when she is old enough to understand! Sounds like a truly magical day to me...Hugs, Ruth
Eliza Blue Captures Hearts At St. Mary's Film Festival (Short Story) - 5/17/2010 7:43:48 AM
soft and alluring, just like your description of Eliza Blue. My only nit-pick has to do with formatting. I think this would be adorable as a magazine article-- but since that is NEVER going to happen, I ask myself, okay, so how can you make it LOOK like one? Answer: it's in the formatting. You'd have to set up your page in columns-- two would probably be best, with both sides justified. And then, perhaps a pic or two placed strategically within the text, and a BLAZING HEAD LINE with a captivating lead-in. You could get some roll ends at your local newspaper, and cut it down to size to fin in your printer, and print it off, and even then go so far as to "clip it out", laminate it, or frame it for the darling, perhaps with purple daisies dried and preserved with it inside glass... just me day dreaming.
What an adorable gift, this little vignette, and what a great way to soften a traumatic event. So.... did she get the part? --Charlie
Turkey Hat Jack (Short Story) - 5/17/2010 7:27:26 AM
This is a story for "Turkey Hat Jack" to treasure forever! Aside from a couple of typos, the story is perfect-- just enough flair to be fun, and compelling without being weighted down by deep, underlying meanings, etc. The two typos I caught were 1) fifth paragraph "heard" instead of "head", and 2) the second "squakin"...where we was doing it "like he was losin his mama". For reals, the word is spelled "Squawk", but that's not as important as getting that "u" in the right place.
I love the wide-western accent used here-in. I can see young Jack's eyes getting wide with all the hero-worship he's hearing. Gotta love the whole grandma being rescued by the young-fry feel to this story. There are some words you could weed out just for more smooth reading and more colorful imagery-- like adding "of his" after the intro's first paragraph, or like the deleting the word "horse" when you introduce your big red Ned -- little things like that...
But most of all, you could improve this story by creating a chapbook with drawings or clippings from magazines or downloaded images. Word has a magnificent feature called "book fold" that you should look into. You could split the text up, and make a wonderful birthday gift. Some stores even carry blank books for doing projects like this. And since you've done a story for Jack Flash, you'll need to do one for his cousin/sibling? as well. but coming from one who was the recipient of such gifts, they are precious, and priceless! And believe it or not, a good percentage of children's books that are widely known today, began in just such a way-- including Alice in Wonderland, Through the Looking Glass, a few of Charles Dickens tales "The Magic Fishbone" being one of them... the list goes on and on.
Turkey Hat Jack (Short Story) - 3/10/2010 4:25:15 AM
Great story to tell the kids!
Turkey Hat Jack (Short Story) - 3/9/2010 3:02:44 PM
Cute! Very creative! My kiddo's enjoyed it too Pat! Thanks for sharing.
Eliza Blue Captures Hearts At St. Mary's Film Festival (Short Story) - 2/25/2010 5:03:23 PM
You were surely inspired by the Lord to make a hospital visit an occasion for stardom. Eliza is blessed to have a Grandma like you! Connie
Eliza Blue Captures Hearts At St. Mary's Film Festival (Short Story) - 2/1/2010 3:48:22 AM
Oh! what a marvelous way to tell a story! A keeper for sure. Never have heard, read, or knew of such a way to tell, grandma. I am sure to let hear it to the great-grandchildren so they can look at hospitals as adventures places where fear has no place.
Broken Or Dead (Poetry) - 11/2/2013 6:06:44 PM
If it's political, chances are it's incorrect. But that does not mean I'm against all politicians. Irreverence does not mean irreligious, or that all such traditions are as bereft of spirit as a dead doctrine, a credo for Cretans, or a series of stale sonnets. But to deny the spiritual side of humanity or conflate it with some kind of altruistic ecumenism is equally ignorant folly. Be they liberal or conservative, they be brainwashed and bankrupt of any legitimate moral or ethical center, regardless of what masks of kindness and peace they may wear. And if the mask fits, wear it.
Dew Drop Words (Poetry) - 10/23/2013 8:17:10 AM
Your words are captured in the reality of relationships that are the walking dead refusing acknowledgement for far too long. It is like this in too many lives. This is an excellent write that could not have been stated any better than this.
Broken Or Dead (Poetry) - 10/22/2013 6:54:15 PM
I am always amazed at how quickly we forget history, I am so tired of PC, go into any school system in the greater boston area, don't tell me you need to be a fanatic to think differently, ask the little boy why he thinks he should be at the front of the line, and in front of his teacher, I could go off on this topic but will stop here. Thanks for the write.
The Other Side Of Yesterday (Poetry) - 10/21/2013 11:59:06 AM
Love & Peace
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 10/14/2013 8:08:46 AM
I felt the thrill of the dive with them.
Tea With A Flea (Poetry) - 10/14/2013 8:07:44 AM
Short and sassy. I like it.
Oodles And Boodles Of Books (Poetry) - 10/14/2013 8:06:52 AM
Ah, yes, the dilemma of us readers. I really relate to her plight. Loved it.
Broken Or Dead (Poetry) - 10/14/2013 7:27:19 AM
You have a way of using words in a intriguing light bringing forth visions though imagery which is a form of "a picture is worth a thousand words" so superbly done, Vesper
Broken Or Dead (Poetry) - 10/12/2013 8:32:41 PM
Broken Or Dead (Poetry) - 10/11/2013 9:30:22 AM
Religion caters to extreme. I have a few Muslim friends and have stayed in Muslim homes in other countries. Our perspective is skewed by focusing on fanatics and the media emphasizing certain aspects.
Whatever religion that you claim… and most do, it's no better than any other. Each religion has its good and bad points. Individuals tend to use religion to carry out their agendas. That's why we have freedom of religion. I find that all religions are weird and dangerous.
Eyes rolling or no, your kids are right. It's time we accept the whole world for what it is. Emphasize freedom of, and freedom from, religion and work on what's best for all of us, not just what's best for Americans… our piece of the pie is already too big.
My poem, Alienation, is a better explanation for what is happening.
Broken Or Dead (Poetry) - 10/10/2013 8:55:33 AM
There will always be those who question our actions as a society, as a nation, thinking their visions are more pure, more purposeful. What is sad is that we choose to kill what we cannot control. M.True
Broken Or Dead (Poetry) - 10/10/2013 5:39:59 AM
Broken Or Dead (Poetry) - 10/10/2013 5:39:52 AM
a great write then and now
Broken Or Dead (Poetry) - 10/10/2013 4:55:13 AM
This a great in-your-face penned poem, my friend. It seems to me that immediately after the horror which took place in New York the word was out that you'd better not utter words which contained Muslim or Islam because that would land you behind bars. Politically correct had been around for a good many years, but after 9-11 it took on a dangerous and spiteful meaning,
Oodles And Boodles Of Books (Poetry) - 10/9/2013 11:03:43 AM
I caught this poem on a quick visit: My mother was an avid reader from early on in life, me too. Our home was a library. Books in every room. A bagillian is a lot of books! Fun read. M.True
Oodles And Boodles Of Books (Poetry) - 10/8/2013 5:43:32 PM
Delightful and meaningful too, I believe. I am once in a while inspired to write "children's stuff." It sure seems to inspire you and your readers benefit. Thank you for sharing. Love and best wishes,
Dew Drop Words (Poetry) - 9/27/2013 3:35:00 PM
So many carefully chosen words to say, no words will ever mask or make clear the message of goodbye. May the clarity of these words and your heart guide you to sunnier days. M.True
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/20/2013 8:23:54 AM
Honest, lively, and delightfully presented; thank you. Love and peace,
Tea With A Flea (Poetry) - 9/20/2013 8:22:15 AM
Delightful and imaginative; thank you for sharing. Love and best wishes,
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/10/2013 9:38:23 PM
Smiling as I write to tell
you that I enjoyed this poem
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/9/2013 6:31:51 PM
I just love the happy-go-lucky ring of this poem, and I found it to be quite cute. Also, I get an instant image of your "sticky-up bed-head hair. I've known a few people like this over the years, and I can tell you one thing about them: they are unlikely to die from high blood pressure doing something to each little cell of their bodies.
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/9/2013 4:06:01 AM
Giggle...sounds like the only way to live...no stress in this poem....thanks for this uplifting write...
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/9/2013 3:24:00 AM
be as you are
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/8/2013 4:21:06 PM
Are you sure you're this grungy? Many of us aren't neat as a hairpin clean fanatics, that's for sure, but a lot of us are in-between. Funny poem and as usual, well written. I enjoyed V. Bob
Circle Of Minds (Poetry) - 9/8/2013 3:44:40 PM
What is in a name..but,
poetry the same...
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/8/2013 7:48:49 AM
First, based on your new identity, you may actually be trying to appeal to young people with this about household behavior.
I am not a neat-nik, but I am organized and relatively uncluttered. Through the years I've known grunges and recall one particularly offensive one as a roommate. I find that most of them are mama's boys who can't figure out how to grow up. They are the bane of the earth. It's hard for me to find them to be funny… even in the movies.
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/8/2013 5:35:02 AM
I love it! I'm all about grunge. There can't be anything happier than a worm in a pear.........as long as it isn't a pair of those socks. Just kidding!
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/8/2013 3:16:15 AM
My kind of people, hang losse...Wonderful poem, fun to read and good to remember.
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/7/2013 9:09:51 PM
This is quite cute, I like it...I love grunge too...;-) e
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/7/2013 6:25:57 PM
Never visualized a worm in a pear as being a grunge stereotype. Good one! Your poems are so much fun! M.True
Circle Of Minds (Poetry) - 9/7/2013 5:56:34 PM
those corners throw you for a loop, maybe squares a circles are good and never a triangle.....just a thought. cool poem.
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/7/2013 5:53:20 PM
yes, grunge works!
I'm Good With Grunge (Poetry) - 9/7/2013 4:33:59 PM
Ahhh . . You are what you are, and the only thing you can do about it is flaunt it. You just did that.
Circle Of Minds (Poetry) - 9/7/2013 9:36:07 AM
Vesper, Would never have guessed it was you. Hoping all is well...
Circle Of Minds (Poetry) - 9/7/2013 9:26:13 AM
My, how you've changed, Vesper! I sense a certain affront here in this poem. I hope I haven't caused you to feel this way.
Circle Of Minds (Poetry) - 9/7/2013 6:01:49 AM
'Love the name and the message.
Circle Of Minds (Poetry) - 9/6/2013 11:19:05 PM
Fact or friction? Communication and geometry can be difficult sometimes. You said it all! M.True
Circle Of Minds (Poetry) - 9/6/2013 7:43:27 PM
A unique new name I see. I love the phrasing here. Reading in sharp angled circles? Very unique word hook. You have me with this one. It speaks to the natural goodness of people, trying to be nice, but misunderstood. Sometimes we have to be mean to be nice you know. Good work. Bob
Circle Of Minds (Poetry) - 9/6/2013 3:49:03 PM
WoW! New name. Same brilliance. This is a perfect poem.
Circle Of Minds (Poetry) - 9/6/2013 3:48:29 PM
Succinct but powerful in thought-eliciting and meaning presented; thank you. Love and best wishes,
Circle Of Minds (Poetry) - 9/6/2013 3:46:49 PM
You've changed everything, but still have your intriguing mind. Hope we meet some day.
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/26/2013 3:30:04 PM
Loved your "Nit Picking," Pat.
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/24/2013 8:11:26 PM
Like Nuts and Honey
of a good write!
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/24/2013 6:51:24 PM
silence can be golden
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 8/24/2013 6:08:28 PM
Ha, ha! All that's missing is the SWAT team! Love this tongue-in-oh-so-cheeky humour, Pat.
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/21/2013 12:10:20 AM
I really enjoyed this poem.
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/20/2013 4:39:10 PM
Yes, this is perfect for childrens stories and even for big kids like us.
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/20/2013 2:58:55 PM
awe that's so sad in the ending :(
Sacred Herbs & Purification
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/20/2013 2:56:18 PM
lol...I can be good at nit picking
cute little children poem Pat
Diddle Me A Rainbow
with marshmallow slides
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/20/2013 10:40:04 AM
Great for children... ...and since I have been told that I never "grew up," I love this, Pat. Delightful! Love and best wishes,
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/19/2013 8:17:32 AM
I would also put this in the “humorous” category because I was laughing all the way. What a wonderful thing for children to read.
Your poem also reminded me of an article that I'm putting together called, “Why do they call a,' [word],' a,' [word?]'.” Need all the help I can get with it.
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/19/2013 7:10:22 AM
i belive they are much akin
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 8:51:28 PM
I guess it depends on how much nit you can pick! Is this nit wit or what? M.True
While Shaving My Cat (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 5:38:15 PM
Funny how rhymes just pop into our minds, sometimes! cute. M.True
Why Don't We Talk (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 5:33:51 PM
Made me think back to my early college days when every dream seemed possible and breaks between classes were spent cloud surfing with the soon to be mother of my children.
World of Difference (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 5:24:43 PM
Someone for everyone? Alas, another hopeless romantic. M.True
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 5:15:59 PM
Creative write, Pat. I loved it!
Love and blessings,
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 2:50:22 PM
Oh, Pat! You gave me the good laugh that I so needed today! Thank you.
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 1:25:33 PM
Hey! Maybe a nit turns into a nat, and then lands on your hat, and then where does it 'goes?' It flies up in your nose.
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 10:40:22 AM
This has sort of a Dr. Seuss ring to it. Of course, I always enjoyed reading Dr. Seuss to my boys (just between the two of us, I enjoyed them myself), so "Nit Picking" is a hit with me. This play on words is a gem, Pat.
David Lee Thompson
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 9:09:06 AM
What a great sense of humor about a perplexing problem. I think you got it figured out, the last line tells me that…
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 9:02:21 AM
a kool play with words
Nit Picking (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 8:49:32 AM
Beautiful. Not the nit. Nope. But your treatment(?) of the nit. I'm sure of one thing, I do not want the nit in my nose.
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/18/2013 4:57:42 AM
I love it! I got butterflies in my stomach with this one.
A Fine Nose Indeed (Poetry) - 8/17/2013 12:56:38 PM
Marvelous dialog and imagery. There has to be a book of children's poems in the making. M.True
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/17/2013 12:52:36 PM
I am a bit puzzled by the "Aloneness" being a healing element. I do know that too few are willing to go along for the ride. Been there, done that! M.True
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/17/2013 9:58:27 AM
Wow! I loved the ride. Even the letdown at the end.
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/17/2013 7:33:36 AM
A meaningful sharing that can be interpreted personally depending on the reader. Thank you, Pat. Love and best wishes to you,
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/17/2013 5:31:37 AM
Very familiar with Manic Depression. Well done . . . xo
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/16/2013 4:43:32 PM
The thrill wears off after awhile.
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/16/2013 4:31:11 PM
How can you read this and not be taken to some unwanted place...and then taken again. Great writing Pat.
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/16/2013 4:22:48 PM
Brilliant. So many different visions come to mind...
A Glimpse Of Mania (Poetry) - 8/16/2013 4:22:01 PM
Ahhh . . . Takes me back to when I was driving a '57 Merc, dragging main and looking for trouble in the form of female companionship. My luck ran hot and cold, but the Merc could attract them if I couldn't. Of course if didn't matter what attracted them, just get in the Merc. A&W's for root beers and drove to a place I knew where nobody came around. Your poem ended with "Aloneness will heal him." I think it did, Pat, and I am still alone. This one touched me.
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/16/2013 11:53:13 AM
Clever work, Pat Well done
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/16/2013 4:27:53 AM
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/15/2013 6:09:16 PM
ohhhh that was good, real good!!!
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/13/2013 9:25:47 PM
Precious is the sharing of your
talents in poetry, Pat
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/12/2013 7:49:08 AM
Yes, what one person thinks another will say.
You know who is a true friend for they accept
you faults and all.
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 8/11/2013 10:49:34 AM
Good humor and good riddance! Read "Mosquito Dawn" for a view from their perspective. Love to read about your charming characters. Your wit is superb. M.True
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/11/2013 8:17:15 AM
Love it! I touch of humor I have very touchy subject. Many hide little secrets like that.
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/10/2013 12:19:22 PM
Ah yes, secrets! My Cajon uncle suggested putting cyan pepper under my nails for a week. It worked. M.True
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/10/2013 7:33:32 AM
We all get caught up in our own imagination.
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/10/2013 6:54:27 AM
As usual, your beautiful simplicity for such a cute story.
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/10/2013 6:46:42 AM
...awe this is cute
from womb to crib
& now under the bed :)
children cat napping
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/10/2013 6:27:44 AM
You tell a story in few words and do it so well.
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/10/2013 5:40:48 AM
I can just picture this and it touches my heart. Love it!
Edward's Thumb (Poetry) - 8/10/2013 4:21:49 AM
Heh.Heh The good news is he wasn't sucking his toe.
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 8/9/2013 10:36:35 AM
An awesome work that touched me gently and tugged at a similar feeling within me.
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 8/7/2013 8:30:29 AM
What great complementary stanzas! I'm beginning to understand you, Pat...and that worries me.
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 8/4/2013 7:01:37 AM
''unclouded by darkness of heart''----- I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 8/3/2013 9:56:36 AM
Pat Medlin's poem, Road to Invisible, is very moving, touching on a subject that affects us all:
facing the slow slipping away of a loved one, and contemplating the same thing happening to oneself. Her metaphors are apt and very touching. She handles the subject very well, in a way that makes you see it, and get emotionally involved. I like this poem a lot.
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/26/2013 6:55:11 AM
well the chuckles make life worthwhile
She Did...Yes She Did (Poetry) - 7/25/2013 12:59:36 AM
How elegant. A wonderful poem. M.True
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/24/2013 11:38:19 PM
As you move us through your observations it is your reflection that makes it happen. Life is the experience. M.True
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/24/2013 9:14:15 PM
Had fun exploring this little jewel,
Pat, with a light, silly laugh
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/23/2013 10:45:33 AM
Yes, by all means, get out of the murky deep waters into the joyful clear waters...........I'll have those chuckles!
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/23/2013 8:58:56 AM
Swimming with happy visions! A fun summer break... M.True
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/23/2013 6:27:18 AM
They've all said it before me, but your metaphor is perfect for the situation and the ending is very uplifting, warm, and friendly. I just hope that you keep dry through all this immersion. ;-)
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/23/2013 4:20:59 AM
I LOVE this...and I'm keeping it to re-read again and again...that last stanza is brilliant!!!!! Very well penned, Pat!!!
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/22/2013 9:08:13 PM
Carry on pat, so wonderful!
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/22/2013 5:09:31 PM
You are there Pat. Safe and sound and blessed!
May peace be with you, the love of God flow through you and blessings overwhelm you with happiness and joy,
John Michael Domino
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/22/2013 3:12:43 PM
I hope all your days are as wonderful as this poem is
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/22/2013 1:12:31 PM
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/22/2013 12:01:31 PM
Pat, Here's hoping your swim back is a pleasant one...Enjoyed.
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/22/2013 11:06:34 AM
my pockets stuffed with chuckles."
Great, great line.
Good Stuff Pat.
Swimming Back (Poetry) - 7/22/2013 9:28:46 AM
There you go. Good to see that you are looking toward the sun, just take it stroke by stroke as you swim back.
The Other Side Of Yesterday (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 6:32:27 PM
This piece is a symphony in and of itself. Each passage building until the final tympani and cymbal crescendo! I immediately thought about the survivors of Civil War amputations, thinking that that was the only time of such horrific surgeries. But you remind us, these operations happen every day. Amazing write! M.True
Zigging Without A Line (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 6:23:31 PM
Even the best of us create our own words and silly rhymes sometimes. (Thank you Dr. Seuss.) What fun! M.True
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 6:17:45 PM
Should title this Woozey Wog. A new critter to be watched out for when in the bog! Nice. M.True
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 5:48:04 PM
Oh, this is good! It's a jolly tale in a good meter.
I Really Don't Think You Should (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 5:46:20 PM
A hazard indeed. Have had my encounters. "Don't make any sudden moves
that may startle or confuse" I love it!
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 5:43:39 PM
I want to write more praise but much here has already been said. Beautiful and emotional images juxtaposed. M.True
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 5:36:51 PM
As a writer of songs the title made me look. The cleverness of your verse sent shivers. In the end I knew exactly what you meant!
Lovers Of The Sea (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 5:32:40 PM
When I saw you writing on the deck of a sailboat I knew I had to read this piece first. You have spoken volumes in so few lines. And Neptune may be the one to give answers to your nautical inquiries. Write On!
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 3:28:45 PM
Ha Ha Ha
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 12:25:12 PM
Clever and Witty,
liked it a lot, Pat
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 11:18:05 AM
exsqusite quilting of prose!!
may yur light never fade or dim...
Shining Stars & Super Moons
Zigging Without A Line (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 11:14:18 AM
Zag A Riffic!!
tip toes & tulips
Word Preeners & Dancing Plumes
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/21/2013 9:07:03 AM
are mosquitos are disease ridden pests that cause fear and create mom's who are extremely spray happy. It's applied heavily after the layer of sprayed sunscreen, If you watch it's somewhat of an art form here. great poem. ;)
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/20/2013 8:06:12 PM
Very astute questioning, So
relative to many of us in
such a gentle way...
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/20/2013 11:52:07 AM
Capice!! Yep! not much left..
Lady Mary Ann
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/20/2013 11:48:32 AM
Great poem...lov'n purple bellied woozy wog..and the wet wagging tail
of herbethatfield's hound dog. Delightful.
Lady Mary Ann
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/20/2013 9:35:37 AM
The great campfire story to keep the little ones wondering. Nice ending.
I Really Don't Think You Should (Poetry) - 7/20/2013 5:14:01 AM
I try to avoid them as much as possible--tho one night when I thought it was a cat near a garbage pile and then this " cat " raised its tail and I saw the white stripe---I threw the garbage bags at it and ran--LOL-it missed me--LOL
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/19/2013 10:49:17 PM
This poem took me away from my somber train of thought. I like were it's going now!
May peace be with you, love surround you and blessings abound you,
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/19/2013 5:53:20 PM
Lots of fun to read...nice image building.
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/19/2013 12:01:04 PM
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/19/2013 10:18:27 AM
It doesn't get funnier than that, and A+ for originality.
Herbert Hatsfield (Poetry) - 7/19/2013 10:18:13 AM
Heh.Heh Herbert Hatfield's hound dawg is a hated McCoy in disguise. Ssssh!
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/18/2013 1:45:17 PM
Cool write, Pat.
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/18/2013 5:10:50 AM
Very clever indeed, Pat.
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/17/2013 9:15:08 PM
Song of the South, Pat
Dew Drop Words (Poetry) - 7/15/2013 11:16:52 AM
You have just put into words my current situation, and this write is almost a year old. It does not get any better than this, tear jerker that it is.
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/15/2013 7:17:32 AM
Love the slang. Very creative and hilarious. You must be writing about Florida or the Georgia coast, because even though I lived overlooking a 3 acre pond/lake, I never experienced any mosquitoes on Bear Mountain. But then, you live far below, closer to the river.
In northern Wisconsin, where I spent many an evening, the zapper got quite busy and we either had to go inside or put on netting. But the ones just off the beach on the Texas Gulf Coast have hypodermic needles and need to be blasted by the laser gun of a monster from the Pacific Rim. ;-)
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/15/2013 7:01:39 AM
Hahahahahaha!!!! Just when I needed a good belly laugh!!! Thanks so much, Pat...(think I'll recite this to our little backyard savages too)...giggle.
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/15/2013 6:58:38 AM
We're all travelling down the same road to invisible...and I have come to a point in my life where I don't fear death...I firmly believe it's simply the transition to another existence! Loved this poem!
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/15/2013 6:47:50 AM
We have a law in Oregon outlawing Mosquito's ... if they can't show a valid Oregon drivers license they are deported immediately. You are very funny Pat, cute write.
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/15/2013 5:46:01 AM
The "Godmother" has spoken!
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/15/2013 5:04:03 AM
How funny! And I am writing something where mosquitos are mentioned. Like minds.L
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/15/2013 4:43:52 AM
They are really hungry this year. I've had 4 bites and the season has just begun. I haven't used my zapper in years but may get it out of the moth balls.
Good Bye Mannie Musqueeto (Poetry) - 7/15/2013 4:08:01 AM
Heh.Heh Kick 'um into the next state, the dead state.
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 7/14/2013 2:01:12 PM
I continue to be amazed by your perspective and creativeness.
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/14/2013 1:43:35 PM
You have a wonderfully creative mind. This is beautiful and sad, as so many of us won't revel in the vibrant hues.
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/14/2013 8:05:23 AM
Thank you Pat...Comparing your life to colors, which many of us
are doing right now. Througly enjoyed!
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/13/2013 2:11:25 PM
Life is full of twists and turns--some we like and others well..Loved your poem
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/13/2013 1:54:18 PM
Life is full of expectations, but it is in the now that we must live and be born to the love at hand. Wonderful poetry.
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/13/2013 11:24:53 AM
Touching emotional write of pathways..invisible
Lady Mary Ann
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/13/2013 7:48:32 AM
Insightful write! I really enjoyed this!
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/13/2013 7:47:35 AM
Oh please continue to revel in the vibrant hues and if you be drunk let it be with the anticipation of rebirth.
I was looking around on your Author page/background info and must say I can so relate to the last line "Perhaps beginning with fictional characters will lessen the intimidation to write some of the darker things that continue to fester in my heart."
Thanks for sharing Pat Medlin with us.
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/13/2013 7:42:33 AM
An interesting quandary. I'll leave the answer up to you.
I, too, have kept blankets far too long until they were faded in threadbare. For me, familiarity bred contentment.
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/13/2013 7:40:11 AM
peace be with you
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/13/2013 7:23:46 AM
Ahhh . . . Please, Pat go for this . . . "Or will I revel in / the still vibrant hues within... / drunk with anticipation /of rebirth."
Be true to yourself forever and a day and never, ever stop trying.
Road To Invisible (Poetry) - 7/13/2013 7:22:44 AM
Pat, you ask really good questions, and for many of us, the answer comes in the gift, the joy, the hope of anticipating rebirth...I do on a daily basis.
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 7/11/2013 6:20:52 AM
This poem stirred up the dust and let loose big action and visceral aliveness. Neat swish-off ending line. Enjoyed! ~~ Diana
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/30/2013 12:11:37 PM
very clever. great write!
I Really Don't Think You Should (Poetry) - 6/24/2013 10:15:00 PM
enjoyed the laugh
To Drop A Farthing (Poetry) - 6/20/2013 5:05:40 AM
A profound gem thank for sharing
Peace be with you
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/19/2013 10:11:40 AM
Pat - poem reminds me of my youth. Nothing about horses but that doesn't matter! The exultation of feeling "special" and the feeling of summer on my skin. Good work!!
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/18/2013 7:11:41 AM
rightly done *Pat*
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/18/2013 5:24:46 AM
enjoyed you write pat
I remember something similar but it took place on a large city street
I wasn't a cowboy, never wanted to be, but I was kool in my Marine dress blues during furlough somewhere
along the line, she was divinely beautiful short black hair, poodle skirt, white shoes and bobby socks carrying her books across her breast, chewing gum cracking snapping bubbles, remember it just like it was yesterday
Peace be with you
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/18/2013 3:55:16 AM
Very nicely done, Pat...brought me back to those magical feelings when I didn't have a clue what it was all about, but it was exciting nonetheless...
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/17/2013 4:40:33 PM
I have been down that trail before-loved your poem
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/17/2013 8:12:52 AM
have been there for this one, let me tell he felt the same
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/17/2013 7:42:42 AM
Will we ever find out if they eventually rode off into the sunset together? Wishful thinking on my part…
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/17/2013 7:34:58 AM
Sounds a bit autobiographical. But still has a lot of magic regardless. Makes me want to hop on a stallion and ride. With her behind me, or at my side.
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/17/2013 7:13:58 AM
I think we all had a "magical week of youth" now and then. Damn those cowboys who smell of Juicy Fruit and Jergens!
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/17/2013 7:06:40 AM
The cowboys always gets their gal
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/17/2013 6:07:13 AM
Ain't dat da way it goes sumtime? Yew git all charged fer tha dance and the song quits slap-dab in da middle. Drat!
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/17/2013 5:57:11 AM
Pat, great piece of writing...love it!
Only Half The Song (Poetry) - 6/17/2013 5:53:41 AM
Brillant pat. Great.
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 6/5/2013 9:04:51 AM
What a clever gem!! It is so true...accept one for who one is, not what you want one to be. Love it!
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 6/4/2013 9:05:19 AM
Clever, entertaining and enjoyable, Pat!
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 5/30/2013 5:15:14 PM
This is awesome. ~ Morgan
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 5/28/2013 2:29:27 AM
cool i liked this a lot
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 5/27/2013 9:27:36 PM
Clever like a fox!
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/27/2013 2:11:40 PM
I can feel your emotions as I read your poem, the quiet as you sit, you pull your readers in by the fire " Learning of Alone. "
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 5/27/2013 8:06:31 AM
Delightful story and message. Playful smack-on truth in these lines. The marriage of Barefoot and Barnacle. Wonderful treatment of this situation, Pat. ~~ Diana
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 5/27/2013 5:04:22 AM
Giggle...sage advice in your verses, Pat...can't turn someone into what one considers the perfect mate...
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/27/2013 3:58:38 AM
Leaves the reader breathless! Stunning, Pat!!!
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 5/26/2013 3:01:07 AM
Again, Pat, your approach towards
the "topic" is inventive and bold.
Thank you for sharing.
Perhaps ? (Poetry) - 5/25/2013 6:56:00 PM
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/25/2013 3:59:36 PM
So much Beauty in the Stillness,
thoughts not alone, Pat!
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 5/25/2013 2:46:03 PM
There you have it! You'd better want what you take.
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 5/25/2013 10:41:18 AM
I like your Dr. Suesse style...
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 5/25/2013 7:40:41 AM
Heh.Heh Yep, reality in a humorous, well-thought out and written way . . . You betcha!
An Unlikely Two (Poetry) - 5/25/2013 7:33:00 AM
Clever write and it happens in real life also.
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/25/2013 6:04:29 AM
Vickie you're right...it is a romantic aloneness...as when one goes off to war...the adjustments of learning to be alone.
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/24/2013 12:57:27 PM
this is such a romantic kind of alone...or is it me?
such an embraceful tenderness Pat & too the visuals
are stunning..I want to sit by this bon-fire
Applewood & Marshmallows
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/24/2013 7:06:21 AM
Hauntingly remembering quiet time by the fire watching the embers die before going to sleep. It's always nice to have a companion. I'm not sure is so good to rely on the one that you seem to be referring to. Much prefer a real warm body in my arms.
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/23/2013 7:55:12 PM
The absence of a love that once was only shows us that love always is.
A powerful message, Pat, and written with such eloquence.
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/23/2013 3:06:08 PM
Pat, you know the secret writers struggle with for years and you do it well...the secret of drawing the reader into your world and taking them on a journey...well done!
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/23/2013 3:03:57 PM
Beautiful poem with eloquently chosen words to tell the sad tale. Very moving indeed.
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/23/2013 2:36:55 PM
"A silence so profound as to be recognized
as a gift of soothing balm
to the clenching chaos of my mind."
Your choice of words is profound!
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/23/2013 1:24:11 PM
much sadness in the silence
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/23/2013 12:31:40 PM
Sadness in heartbreak the reverie of his hour ends as it must.
Treasure the silence of peace.
Lady Mry Ann
The Learning Of 'Alone' (Poetry) - 5/23/2013 11:32:19 AM
Heartbreakingly real are the words you have chosen for this poem of being along, with thoughts and wonderment of another. The last three lines is a sad foretelling.
She Did...Yes She Did (Poetry) - 5/22/2013 3:24:46 PM
LOl-loved reading this--I agree with one review that said ' Where is the Like Button"-that is something we need at the Den
Lovers Of The Sea (Poetry) - 5/21/2013 8:58:55 PM
Rough or calm the sea..
you rule the waves in
this verse *Pat*
Lovers Of The Sea (Poetry) - 5/21/2013 6:22:14 PM
Sounds like the Prince of air is overruled! great one, Pat.
Lovers Of The Sea (Poetry) - 5/21/2013 6:02:10 AM
Awesome! Love your beautifully crafted phrases...