Recent Reviews for Toby H Russell
Monday (Short Story) - 9/15/2008 10:24:00 AM|
This is what I'm thinking: Tim is either on death's journey, what happens after death, or he is in a comma and his mind is still active. His body is in a hospital and there are tubes running into almost every orifice keeping him alive. From the vivid description of his body wasting away, it seems he won't wake form this comma or if he is already dead, reach heaven or hell. Eventually all that will be left is his skeleton walking, walking, walking. Now if he is still alive and in a comma there’s always a chance he will wake up and return to the material world.
Monday (Short Story) - 9/8/2008 10:55:56 AM
That is an imagination!!
This Is Done (Poetry) - 9/21/2008 5:30:34 PM
Excellence of expression! Yet, did I read you wrong? I get from this the sense of a worn-out, deeply grieved divorced/abandoned mother, struggling on welfare. (I say that because her work/toil seems all related to staying at home.) And, it all rings true down to the last two lines, which deeply confound me: where does the "my" come in?
To me, dropping the first six words of the next to the last line (and adding a comma after concern )would still hold it, pull it altogether. At the moment, as is, I do get lost at the end; that "my"" is really a not understood what -- such a odd switch/turnabout... that leaves me baffled. Nevertheless, all that has gone before is unique, expressive, and good poetry! Regards, Toby. Keep going.
Neat Trick (Poetry) - 9/15/2008 3:48:48 PM
Interesting perceptions in this piece of wonder...
Be always safe,
Neat Trick (Poetry) - 9/15/2008 10:40:06 AM
Interesting pen indeed...be well and safe always...Hugssss
Scrotum Sonnet (Poetry) - 9/15/2008 10:13:21 AM
Thank you for taking part of the male anatomy that seems to get bashed far to often today and making 'it' into something worthy and real--also part of man. Have you written a poem about what it means to be a man? If so, I want to read it.
Neat Trick (Poetry) - 9/15/2008 9:40:37 AM
A very good poem,thank you for sharing it,take care
Virgin Eyes (Poetry) - 9/14/2008 2:54:08 PM
What a splendidly lovely gift, Toby. Thank you for sharing it. Love and peace to you,
Scrotum Sonnet (Poetry) - 9/14/2008 2:53:00 PM
Original. Thanks for sharing, Toby. Love and peace,
Virgin Eyes (Poetry) - 9/13/2008 5:52:54 PM
Virgin Eyes (Poetry) - 9/13/2008 2:41:13 PM
Very beautiful,I enjoy reading it,take care
Virgin Eyes (Poetry) - 9/12/2008 9:48:39 PM
"pots of witches' dreams... hot wet brews" stunningly descriptive.
Although, where does the "Virgin" fit in? Really enjoyed the
way you play, twist, and entangle the words and images. Very fine.
Tomcat in the Wee Hours (Poetry) - 9/12/2008 9:34:57 PM
One for the cat lover, I'm sure. Rather effective, and close-on to the actual thing. (See, you CAN use spacing to effect!) I think I liked your first line, and "runningdownbumps," with also the last 4 lines best of all. Very cat-minded realistic.
Like it or not, however, poems do crave some sort of title... opposed to phrases. Or did you just omit entering them, because you do list them at the top?
Scrotum Sonnet (Poetry) - 9/12/2008 9:26:23 PM
A poem not for the dainty of taste, ahem. Rather striking in a way.
Perhaps only a guy could appreciate the puns and fun of it, with the still wriggly seriousness underneath. But you lost me on the last line: "less charmed by emptier confection." Were you alluding to pre-pubescence -- or castration? Certainly the "empty" would hold little charm... to whomever.
There Is Also Love (Poetry) - 9/8/2008 9:57:23 PM
Wow Rick, thanks for the positive comments. I have indeed tried to get published but have experienced only rejection so far. What I desire above all else is feedback and interaction, although publication would of course be great. My aim is to try and make a career out of writing and figure the best way of doing that in a climate like today's, with publishers inundated with unsolicited material, is this route.
Anyway, thanks again for taking the time to read and comment on my work.
Virgin Eyes (Poetry) - 9/8/2008 9:52:47 PM
Thank you for taking the time to comment on this one. I'm happy that you liked it.
Virgin Eyes (Poetry) - 9/8/2008 5:10:51 PM
Very sensual piece of deep love and inner beauty....
Be always safe,
There Is Also Love (Poetry) - 9/8/2008 10:48:35 AM
I have caught a few of your poems. I am more than impressed.
Have you submitted to the major literaries? Indeed, I see you as a major emerging talent. While I personally find you on the upper intellectual strata, and like things a bit simpler, I can recognize you are headed to a markable outcome. And are certainly above most of what I have witnessed on this site.