Recent Reviews for Scott Allan Tacke
Zenthevenon (Book) - 9/1/2012 4:44:26 PM|
Zenthevenon is equally intriguing as Zenparaven as a murder mystery, continuing the protagonist's quest to unearth the identity of the gruesome killer, keeping the reader on her toes, wanting to know how the events will unfold. The novel is not only fascinating in terms of plot, but also artful and impressive in its usage of language--memorable, to say the least! I recommend this one as well as the previous novel to all readers who are interested in mysteries! www.litmuse1.blogspot.com
Zenparaven (Book) - 9/1/2012 4:22:38 PM
An intriguing fantastical murder mystery! It is one of those books you cannot put down as you just want to keep on reading to find out what happens next. The protagonist's struggles endear him to the reader, and you find yourself identifying and sympathizing with him. A fascinating story, one which I recommend to anyone who enjoys mysteries! www.litmuse1.blogspot.com
Delusions of Reality - Hardback (Book) - 9/1/2012 4:11:37 PM
Masterfully crafted verse! I have been drawn to perusing Delusions of Reality again and again, each time discovering something novel, some new food for thought. The collection is a compilation of different types of poems--there are, among others, emotionally effective love poems, powerfully engaging epic poems, perceptive and acutely intellectual ones, and also witty and entertaining ones. Delusions of Reality therefore offers a variety of reading experiences, and I recommend it to anyone who loves poetry!
Delusions of Reality - Hardback (Book) - 12/24/2007 7:01:26 AM
Powerful! Like movie shorts for the mind! I've never read poetry with characters and dialogue. It was simply an awesome experience! I was completely drawn into each creation. Part movie, part meter and music; Part cartoon, and part emotion and philosophy! I get something different each time I read them! A must-buy for poetry connoiseurs. There's nothing else like it!
Delusions of Reality - Hardback (Book) - 12/22/2007 6:35:01 PM
I have read and re-read this collection three times since I purchased it in early November. Quite honestly, I can take no issue with the statements that have been made concerning this author or this titles incredible originality. Through the course of these many reading I have been touched, moved to sincere emotion, and most importantly, compelled to the deepest of thoughts. In describing this book to a friend, I described it as a collection of 'brain vitamins'! These are one-a-day poems to ruminate on and contemplate over, and all done in the most delightful, imaginative mini-epics! This is TRULY something special!
Syd (Poetry) - 9/9/2012 6:24:12 AM
An enchanting narrative poem! As always, the meter and rhyme are artfully created, and as a reader, I adore the child-hero, the sweet Syd, who assists his companions and also cares for the piper thus transforming him to believe in loving and giving again. Syd's selflessness has convinced the piper to return to playing his "flute of silver and gold" thereby enabling "the birth of the morn in a golden sunrise." The emotionally gratifying lines of verse are filled with hope and love at the end--how could this be but satisfying for a reader? It certainly is, and I truly enjoyed it! litmuse1.blogspot.com
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 9/9/2012 6:10:52 AM
A beautiful love poem--this is an emotional reading experience that stays and lingers with me as a reader. And even though "the purity of mutual love that moment" for the speaker, in this instance, appears short-lived, for she flees, this encounter changes the speaker permanently. As a reader, I regard the poem as a hopeful one, despite the brevity of the encounter, for the speaker declares that he will "keep searching in the clouded skies above" until "she be found." It is the speaker's passion and promise to find her and "[prove] she can trust in [him]" that makes this poem so memorable and effective. Simply beautiful work!
Yin and Yang (Poetry) - 9/8/2012 5:54:50 PM
A very skillfully written narrative poem--I like how the two participants of the story act in a parallel way throughout. While one "With leather fingers grip[s]," the other "With latex fingers touch[es]" and so the "stealthy gator" and the "faithful bloodhound" complement each other. The poem is very effective; it is structured very thoughtfully and carefully. As a reader, I do welcome the ending where the "faithful bloodhound" would "never abort/The sense of morality only he saw." While the poem of course needs to have the two different sides to be what it is, as a reader, I am left mostly, at the end, with a feeling of embracing the "crusade" of diligence and discipline.
ALOO (Poetry) - 9/8/2012 5:09:19 PM
Very powerful narrative verse! I enjoyed not only the interesting story, but also the protagonist's development as a character. It is impressive how Aloo is determined to defeat the mighty tempest, the Dokeedow, even though he seemingly, initially, is much too small and powerless to fight such a being "Whose features and intensity/Were fuming, fierce, and mad!" But the persistent protagonist is impressive as he travels through "barren dunes of waste and blight" and endures all the hardships of the journey, and he just keeps going, regardless of his momentary hesitations, and faces and defeats the tempest by "cut[ting] into the cyclone's core." As a reader, I appreciate the intriguing story, the carefully crafted stanzas, and the main character with "spirit, unconstrained and true"!
A Boy And His Flower (Poetry) - 9/5/2012 2:02:50 PM
Such a lovely, touching poem about love and endurance when faced with doubt and ridicule by others--I really enjoyed this one! It is wonderful to read your poem about "love, delight, and happiness," and to be reminded of the lesson "very, very deep" that "A lack of age or wisdom should not turn sweet love to sour"!
Life Cycles (Poetry) - 9/5/2012 1:21:24 PM
A beautiful, positive, hopeful poem about parenthood! I love the ending wih its suggestion on "break[ing] this iron wheel of fate," by pointing out that if the child can "[learn] this lesson too" of "tak[ing] notice of the summer breeze," he (and the parent as well) will have the opportunity to "start anew," and "burn life's candle bright/And love its glow by dy or night." A memorable, endearing account!
ALOO (Poetry) - 9/17/2008 4:43:35 PM
This was truely a delight to read, gives one thought, very interesting, Blessing's valerie
ALOO (Poetry) - 9/15/2008 10:01:13 AM
Interesting indeed ...be well and safe OK...Hugs
Yin and Yang (Poetry) - 9/14/2008 8:29:48 PM
Your narrative poem and great skills make the reader follow the story and yet, the philosophical answer is in the title made of complementarity.
Yin and Yang (Poetry) - 9/13/2008 2:13:28 PM
It's a bit too long for a poem, this could have been made into a short story. However, this has been a good read.
Sandie Angel :o)
Yin and Yang (Poetry) - 9/13/2008 5:44:34 AM
Interesting indeed...stay safe and well...HUgss
Right Where I Belong (Poetry) - 8/22/2008 6:23:39 PM
With this style that is quite timeless
and this kind of clear philosophical content,
I think that your work can be appreciated by many.
The 'Grown Up' Way (Poetry) - 8/21/2008 4:29:13 AM
I especially like the part about how learning should never end. This is a great poem for children to read. Not only does it stress the rules of manners, but it teaches to follow the heart. It's also a great reminder for adults. Being an individual is so important in life. Who wants to be one of the cows/bulls following the herd? Not I.... Nicely done, Scott! Love and Hugs,
A Boy And His Flower (Poetry) - 7/27/2008 11:53:35 AM
Great. Teaches us not to make fun of anyone and what they do. Everyone has to grow things and do things for themselves and make their days happier. We can all do nice things if we try and come a long way in life with simply doing things and keeping at them and not giving up.
Gnosis (Poetry) - 7/18/2008 8:05:02 PM
A beautiful message of oneness that is so important today.
Great imagery, especially in the opening stanza.
Right Where I Belong (Poetry) - 7/18/2008 2:08:39 PM
A nice take on a subject dear to me heart.
A Boy And His Flower (Poetry) - 7/18/2008 3:46:10 AM
Gnosis (Poetry) - 7/17/2008 7:13:06 PM
Gnostic nostalgia; the keepers of the secrets, to bad the Romans rubbed them out; good thing they documented well.
Gnosis (Poetry) - 7/17/2008 12:48:20 PM
Love it. You broke it down right nicely, here. Great job!
Gnosis (Poetry) - 7/16/2008 4:25:35 PM
Gnosis (Poetry) - 7/16/2008 1:07:21 PM
Reading this is like opening a different door in the hallway that is you. Many of your poems teach, bravely state the truth, or delve into the psyche. This one dives deeper and expresses your belief system; God is in everything and everyone. Very beautiful. I like how you pair both sides of the picture to express that view. As usual, your rhyme scheme is complex and brilliantly done. Love and Hugs,
Gnosis (Poetry) - 7/16/2008 5:55:01 AM
Superb poetry and I absolutely agree with the sentiments expressed. It's great to read you again Scott.
Syd (Poetry) - 7/6/2008 1:15:19 PM
Brilliant piece. You are a great storyteller Scott! Great to be reading you again.
Syd (Poetry) - 7/4/2008 10:37:21 PM
A fantastic tale, masterfully told! Bravo~
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 7/4/2008 9:55:08 AM
Soft and wise, your words have their own heartbeat.
Are all dragonflies the same?
Does one replace the other?
Your poem makes me wonder... trust, such a difficult word.
Syd (Poetry) - 7/4/2008 9:55:04 AM
An epic fable. AD sees little of this kind of talent. My only foray was From Little Acorns Grow. Syd is wonderful and I hope it is widely read.
Syd (Poetry) - 7/4/2008 8:49:48 AM
Ahhhh, I remember this one dear Scott from your book. Your works are masterfully penned in such a way that these collections only do justice in my library and not just the net. This poem has a C.S. Lewis twist to it. The Voyage of the Dawn Treader -- one of my favorites. Now I have another favorite to add -- Syd. Well Done! Deborah
Distorted Vision - Part Three - Bitemporal hemianopia (Poetry) - 7/3/2008 3:48:22 PM
I am in errie feelings of true emotion
as this write evokes the Important Truth of Life
& the passage of death
and perhaps workaholics will see that when they are on their death beds (as I mentioned this to my X & indeed it will be to late) they very well may have the last thought of....or not.....of..
"Gee! I Wished I would have spent more time at work"
Scott I So Enjoyed The Power Of The Message Of Your Pen!
Much Love & Inspiration To You Poet
Embraced ~ Embrassé
Medieval Sensibility (Poetry) - 7/1/2008 7:20:28 AM
I love the way you think so deeply about the quality of life in this piece. I know there's still a lot of kindness in the world, but it seems to me people were kinder when things were less advanced. I guess we must embrace the way the world is now, though. A thoughtful and profound write. Love and Hugs,
Life Cycles (Poetry) - 6/29/2008 5:58:55 PM
To live it up, to taste, see, smell and hear. That is the most enjoyable of life and little chldren learn each in time as their growth pattern comes along. Life is a cycle over and over again I find God's love in everything, though.
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 6/29/2008 5:54:01 PM
Nature does give back love, and takes you into the unknown sometimes and into the future too. Love can be found, I found my 2nd husband Tom and he is now a butterfly in Heaven, if not an angel. I put butterflies on his grave and have poems about them too.
Distorted Vision - Part Three - Bitemporal hemianopia (Poetry) - 6/29/2008 5:51:07 PM
I do hate workaholics who need money but neglect their families and let their wives to raise the children. There is a limit to working, and life should be enjoyed because life is too short for all work and no play. I am 63 years old and certainly know this.
Beauty (Part 6) (Poetry) - 6/28/2008 1:09:19 PM
A heartfelt good ending. Enjoyed these write and cannot wait to read more of yours.
Beauty (Part 4) (Poetry) - 6/28/2008 1:07:25 PM
Good she is coming home, took time to read the write, and am going to be late for the carnival I am going to tonite.
Beauty (Part 1) (Poetry) - 6/28/2008 1:04:08 PM
I am going to carnival tonight to see the scenes you made. But I hope no children disappear. It is quite possible though. must read your other parts to this, when I have time must leave for carnival now.
Medieval Sensibility (Poetry) - 6/16/2008 10:12:32 AM
Intriguing, thought-provoking composition with a unique construction. Nicely presented.
Medieval Sensibility (Poetry) - 6/13/2008 3:33:19 PM
Wonderful wise words, spun in silken style for the reader to savor.
Medieval Sensibility (Poetry) - 6/8/2008 9:07:14 PM
Such great thoughts here and so much truth-love it
Medieval Sensibility (Poetry) - 6/6/2008 12:43:34 AM
Excellent questions to open our eyes. A profound poetic lesson.
"There’s still a puerile greed" captures today's fake needs.
Medieval Sensibility (Poetry) - 6/5/2008 7:13:03 AM
Oh my,I must say this is wonderful writing sweet man..excellent indeed..have a wonderful and safe day OK...Hugss
Medieval Sensibility (Poetry) - 6/5/2008 6:15:57 AM
Love this very minute,
Cling to fleeting hours
All have bloomed and now are
Slowly, wilting flowers.
So, we must carpe diem,
Reach out and pluck the day,
Take each golden apple
And savor what we may.......
Absolutely beautiful trance through time you have penned dear sweet man. Brought back the days of playing kickball in the middle of the street until darkness forced its end, BBQ's with neighbors, doors unlocked; without a computer, cell phone or even TV to interrupt life's adventures. I agree wholeheartedly with your direction, ponderings and advice. I for one take it to heart. Life is short, meant to be savored in everyway and everyday. I for one plan on letting nothing stop me from that golden apple. Well Done! Deborah
Medieval Sensibility (Poetry) - 6/4/2008 6:05:14 PM
A well learned lesson shared on the journey each of us walk until the day comes when it is our turn to return home....
Be always safe,
Medieval Sensibility (Poetry) - 6/4/2008 5:41:12 PM
Fine thoughts and worthwhile details here
In My Defense (Poetry) - 6/4/2008 7:35:32 AM
Lyrical and vibrant spin, blossoms everywhere blooming into a story so captivating, I smile.
In My Defense (Poetry) - 6/4/2008 3:24:51 AM
Dark, light - does it matter? Quality is what's most important. Poe was dark but genius. King makes a fine living with dark. We write what's in us to write. I must say, this piece has the mark of your usual creativity - reminds me a bit of Pink Floyd's "The Wall" video. I never know what to expect when I click on one of your poems. You challenge yourself here - another mark of a great writer! Exceptional:)
Love and Hugs
In My Defense (Poetry) - 5/23/2008 7:35:52 PM
Excellent writing dear man,well done indeed..stay safe and well OK...Hugs
In My Defense (Poetry) - 5/23/2008 10:42:57 AM
A brilliant piece of writing both lyrically and philosophically. You have a gift for creating some remarkably thought-provoking tales and animated poems.
It's a shame the punishment was so severe, because you deserve a retrial and a decent publisher! If anything, your poems go some way to making the reader feel less cynical. Perhaps your friend will lighten his/her perspective after such a robust defense!
Just Admit It (Poetry) - 5/23/2008 8:09:39 AM
“Just Admit It”
An outstanding composition for its subjects dealt and artistic flow. From the first to the closing lines all is art, knowledge and poetic task fully accomplished.
The poem flows over the river of critical analysis of our society, and the voice of the Poet sounds wit and wise through the lines of “Just Admit It” and materializes depicting of our social realities.
The fifth, sixth and seventh stanzas recall SODOM, which is now represented by the priesthood of Aglican, Episcopal and Roman churches, and many other affiliated criminal cartels that practices sodomy and pedophile. They also show the background of the time when abduction was a "natural practice", all done as a regular trade by Christians, Anglican and Catholics; time that kidnapping was good business for the ABDUCTORS, and good business for the Christians that bought the “product” in the “NEW WORLD” to be traded in the name of their Christians gods, – the head of Canterbury and the Vatican.
Disdain used to be kids’ training for vandalism and other wrong-doings. The word “NICE” was a must then to express disapproval, disgust and to tease negatively. It comes from Latin NESCIUS, moron, ignorant, stupid, and RETARDED. It is exactly what the word “NICE” means, no matter what the lexicographers say. The fourth word of the ninth stanza is a simple example of our indifferent and ignorant society.
I have enjoyed the reading of poem that honors the langauge and enriches the pages of Poetry,
Keep Your pen busy, Poet.
In respect and admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
In My Defense (Poetry) - 5/21/2008 3:24:26 PM
I admire your work. This one took a lot of thought. I, too, have often dealt on the dark side. Just a bit of exercising the imagination.
In My Defense (Poetry) - 5/21/2008 1:26:03 PM
It is a pleasant time to visit Your Den and learn from Your powerful Engine ~ that functions with fuel of creativity ~ and powers the dynamo of imagination.
This poem shows the author's outstanding vocabulary and full demain of courts' lexis. I am really impressed, and I mean truly amazed.
It seems to me that a theater producer and director could take this poem and stage it right from its magnificent lines... (LIGHTS ON, Please!) ~ What I mean is that a true live court session is totally revived throughout its magnificent lines that form the great stanzas ~ of "My Defense", a poem that enriches the treasure of Poetry, and make THE AMERICAN FINE LETTERS glow.
Yes, it needs a little polishing, and I know You will make it brighter... "In My Defense" is a Diadem for the crown of Erato.
May You enjoy a long healthy creative life.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
In My Defense (Poetry) - 5/21/2008 9:27:48 AM
Hello Scott, you are a literary Genius! First and last words that blend is amazing and was delightful to read. Poetry is as varied and diverse as are people. Each line tracking our own personal life's journey and world as seen from the unique perspective we call -- ME. Nothing more precious than the freedom to pour out of our soul and pen to paper words meaningful to the life stage we are in and share them with others who choose to read them. All life stages include many faucets and arrays of emotions. Without the dark times, light wouldn't feel so good or be appreciated quite as much. Keep penning and keep sharing. Your a beautiful man with much to say. Well Done! Deborah
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 5/11/2008 5:27:59 PM
Beautiful. Someone once told me "If you have a butterfly, then let it fly. If it comes back, then you know it's real. If it doesn't, then it never was." Love often disappears in the face of fear, but if it's true, your magical creature will never be far away. I love the rhythmical flow in this poem as well as the imagery and feeling expressed.
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 5/6/2008 10:20:33 AM
Passion so delicate and intricate as is the wings of dragonflies. You are a true weaver on this uncertain loom of life and love!
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 5/2/2008 3:51:25 PM
Passionate encounter with a tired insect that took advantage of your largess for awhile. Cleverly creative.
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 5/2/2008 2:29:26 AM
Lovely indeed..great writing sweet man...have a wonderful and safe day..HUgsss
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 5/1/2008 9:36:11 PM
She'll be a shy one for sure, --in cocoon just now... go out then, look under the milkweed leaves and find her... --Charlie
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 5/1/2008 9:19:52 PM
Dragonflies are amazing creatures created with God's love, with an array of wonderful color and this tale of enchantment is creatively lovely....
Be always safe,
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 5/1/2008 8:54:54 PM
Hello Scott, I'm taking a time-out from the den to get some much needed things done, but couldn't help escaping into your writing this night along with my 17 year old moonbeam daughter Rachel.
She says -- "When my mom read this to me I felt inspiration and hope to people that true love still exists and you wrote it with such gentleness. I loved how you incorporated God's beautiful nature like a movie playing in my head."
I say -- You've outdone yourself this time Scott. Almost to the point that I can't describe the feelings evoked from reading this outstanding piece. I wish I could do it justice, but I can't. The depth of what you write truly points to what God intended true love to be and look like. Any broken dragonfly would mend well and blossom on an honorable arm such as yours.
Well Done! Deborah
Of Dragonflies & Love (Poetry) - 5/1/2008 7:37:18 PM
This is nearly perfect. Very very well-written, publishable for sure.
Right Where I Belong (Poetry) - 4/27/2008 8:31:02 AM
Honest, true, wise words, quite frankly, delivered...
Right Where I Belong (Poetry) - 4/21/2008 9:31:44 PM
Wow, I love this. Your thoughts are really directed and keeping in time, great message, too. I could never understand carrying the past around with you and have had so many friends and ex's who did just that to their detriment and self-destruction. I have to put this one in my library, great work.
Right Where I Belong (Poetry) - 4/15/2008 6:42:43 PM
Words of truth and wisdom and yes perhaps all is predestined....
Be always safe,
Right Where I Belong (Poetry) - 4/15/2008 4:12:52 AM
Such words of wisdom...
You are correct we need to work on what we can change today...
Right Where I Belong (Poetry) - 4/14/2008 6:53:57 PM
An exquisite take on embracing and living in today, forfeiting the err's of yesterday, and endeavoring to ever change for tomorrow. Anguish and regret have a place in our lives for just a time, as it halts our misguided path like a brick wall, causing time for self reflection, healing with new paths and new beginnings. Its when we Wallow and constantly Revisit our Hindsight that the claws of Regret sink into our bloody hearts ripping that which is trying to heal. Your words above are yet again like a modern day Proverb, and those that heed your wisdom and put it into practice are wise indeed. The colors of our life, whether good or bad, paint a picture that is beautifully unique and priceless.
"I do not forget,
But I do not regret
Whatever in life has gone wrong.
I will not forget,
And will not regret
That right here is where I belong"
Taking to heart your words this night and replacing them with the regrets I have laid to rest still trying to shadow me.
Wonderfully Written and Much Needed this Eve -- Deborah:)
Right Where I Belong (Poetry) - 4/14/2008 6:44:47 PM
This reminds me so much of Longfellow's "Psalm of Life"... a timely mesage in a more modern voice. --Charlie
Animals (Poetry) - 4/14/2008 6:32:45 PM
Something I like about your work is its immediacy. It can be read, enjoyed and understood by all readers, I think. Nice tale and message.
Inspiration (Poetry) - 4/13/2008 6:28:31 PM
Inspiration such as yours is uniquely missing in this day and age. Its easy to write about painache, heartache, toothache, headache, naturache, loveache, earthquake.....!....but NOT so easy to create new worlds, new characters, new visions to behold that takes the mind and stretches it beyond comprehension while artistically drawing the words together poetically while doing so. Bravo Dear man as you are not just another pretty face you are a gorgeous soul that just happens to be blessed with looks too! So rare indeed!
"Oh no, my thoughts are savage wild!
The public wants the meek and mild.
"The standard themes of verse don't hold
The shapes my dreams take, strong and bold!"
Create, create and NEVER stop! Wild and Bold go for the GOLD!
Childhood Lost (Poetry) - 4/13/2008 7:42:02 AM
How interesting. I know so many people who had their childhood stolen from them, like me. I've never given this scenario much thought; where someone purposely murders those days and longs to forget them. Unfortunately, the words in this poem are right. You cannot hide from the past because it will find you. Those without closure are haunted. I speak from experience, and I'm certain thousands of others can say the same. The imagery in the middle part is exceptional - the killing of one's childhood self...very chilling, and disturbing until the message is clear. I like how you end this on a positive note, proving it's possible to come full circle in one's lifetime if one's willing to face the past. I also like how you change the flow from part to part - sort of like marking cycles in life. Great write! Love and Hugs~
Just Admit It (Poetry) - 4/10/2008 7:44:30 AM
Bold, thought-provoking and unbeleivably packed with truths...
Just Admit It (Poetry) - 4/8/2008 10:12:01 PM
This is a very bold write, which shows a strong sense of identity. The news is full of stories based on frivolous lawsuits about offended feelings. As if the courts are not backlogged as is? Radio and TV personalities must watch every word or they are subject to fines or dismissal. America goes from one extreme to another. I think one of the biggest and most shameful changes has been the elimination of The Pledge of Allegiance in schools. God forbid I go to another country and force them to change their traditions instead of respect them. I also have a gripe about illegal aliens. I don't have a problem with folks coming here, but they should go about it legally and pay the same taxes I pay. Where I work, I met several illegals (toting fake ID cards & green cards) who claim multiple children when they don't have kids. Of course, when it comes time to file a tax return, they are long gone; back to their country. The rest of us pay the price. I respect folks that come here and go by our rules, just like I have to. Not to mention that illegals occupy jobs and cheap housing that could be occupied by hard-working Americans. Sad! You've written a powerful piece about speaking out instead of holding back to protect feelings. This used to be a country proud to offer free speech. I guess the definition of free speech has changed over the years; mandated by politicians who cower before conflict instead of standing proud alongside tradition and some of the greatest documents of our past. Brave, fresh, and provocative! Well done:)
Just Admit It (Poetry) - 4/8/2008 10:05:53 PM
Lenny Bruce had it right, but he'd have no career today. I despise PC crap. I agree with many of your comments throughout this. People are far too sensitive and it comes down to being like the thought police watching we don't say blackboard. This is something people should read and stop taking everything so seriously.
Childhood Lost (Poetry) - 4/8/2008 9:59:46 PM
I felt the grips of Poe and even a bit of Dickens tossed in for good measure, the old world with the new modern bite, I felt tossed down a tunnel of darkness and then come out the end to bright and light, and the beauty of the last 7 lines, (LOVE the last 4). Thanks for the journey.
Just Admit It (Poetry) - 4/8/2008 8:38:40 PM
Read your poem along with my daughter. We are from Portland, Oregon which if you even whispered the way you felt on any given subject you could get in big trouble. It's a very draining experience to be expected to be "politically correct" when it seems those forcing the correctness scream loud and clear whatever they want, whenever they want. I managed to stand my ground of balance in the midst of this circle and found that a gentle, yet firm answer and showing true love for the person regardless of their race or sexual orientation was the way to go. It didn't mean I had to agree or condone or lie my way through the day, it just meant they found out soon enough that I am who I am and if you want to rise above your circumstances stop complaining and do something about it. I know, I did it. I had to train many a person not qualified for my job because they were chosen without regard of skill. Funny how most abhored my beliefs but when they were down and out I was the first one they came to. I count it a true victory that two of the hardest athiest politically correct doctors cried when I left. I'm not trying to pat myself on the back just agreeing with your poem, every word, and hope that my response shows how I handled the above conflicts. Thanks for the boldness to write such words. Your to be commended. Cheers, Deborah
Just Admit It (Poetry) - 4/8/2008 8:17:35 PM
You know, Scott... I think this is a pretty important write. I certainly matters what we think about those who are different from ourselves, but to have it become political is insane!
The other day, looking through some of my dad's old things, I ran across a grammar book he'd used back in his elementary days-- a workbook on manners!! It was adorable. I love that they taught that stuff-- decorum-- the when to's and when not to's-- what to do with that runny nose at the restaurant-- what to say if you really, really need to GO-- funny stuff.
I think we have two very opposing factions here-- those who are just in-your-face-I'll-do-what-I-want, and those who are not-on-my-watch-you-don't... So in the end, this politically correctness forced from the latter on the former, is just simply never gonna work.
My dad's generation had some severe problems for all their proper wordage... and our generation has severe problems as well, for all our scream-and-holler-till-you-get-attention-ness. Your advice is a good moderate voice to squelch the steam-rollers who will vie to out squoosh the other. There's no need to wear your attitude on your chest in bold lettering... but when you speak (in a normal voice, please!) tell the truth without all the paint, for sure!
(Okay...way lengthy...over and out.) --Charlie
Childhood Lost (Poetry) - 4/8/2008 2:45:21 PM
A ghastly subject from which I come away with nothing.
Childhood Lost (Poetry) - 4/7/2008 7:48:19 PM
I've read it three times and each time it speaks something new to me. Stretches the imagination from birth and lost childhood to grasping at rebirth and being free as a child experiencing life's wonders for the first time - fearless. Beautiful ending of a child's pure soul in a true poet hidden within sometimes gruesome adult callouses we incure over time by just merely existing. Thanks for the brain stretch, yet once again........Deborah
Childhood Lost (Poetry) - 4/7/2008 7:33:39 PM
Very fine culmination, Scott. Circular thinking at its best... and the more I think about it, the more I see it's true. But more than that... all young things are children... to try to squelch new-born life-- it will haunt you. Very potent piece. I loved the shifts in cadence with the dark ebbing and receding. Haunting memories are like that--immersing and emerging. I think you captured a lot here. Good write. --Charlie
Childhood Lost (Poetry) - 4/7/2008 5:37:10 PM
Excellent writing sweet man,very good indeed...stay safe and well....Hugssss
The Tragedy of Madame Irf (Poetry) - 4/3/2008 2:57:50 PM
An extremely well written poetic tale. A moral story that does not leave the reader indifferent.
One Trip (Poetry) - 4/2/2008 7:24:21 AM
Could easily go the opposite...Lies, Seduction, Devastation..that in which LSD also offers the perfect antidote -- escape. Deborah:)
The Simile of Life (Poetry) - 4/1/2008 8:22:00 PM
Modern Day Proverbs..........great read. Deborah
Life Cycles (Poetry) - 3/30/2008 5:11:05 PM
My words don't do this poem justice. A true work of art. Deborah
Beauty (Part 6) (Poetry) - 3/29/2008 1:14:12 AM
Skillfully done, Scott. This is a strong and happy ending! A series that 'beautiful people' around the world should take to heart~
Beauty (Part 5) (Poetry) - 3/29/2008 1:02:43 AM
Nicely done, Scott. You keep the suspense going here!
Beauty (Part 4) (Poetry) - 3/29/2008 12:58:46 AM
The Crabs should adopt Marie so they can have a child of real beauty...lol. I hope they do. Great work so far!
Beauty (Part 3) (Poetry) - 3/29/2008 12:53:35 AM
I can't wait to find out if Miss Good connects "a perfect dream"'s description to the girl she brought into her home. Love your ability to tell a tale with rhyme!
Beauty (Part 2) (Poetry) - 3/29/2008 12:49:05 AM
The quote you posted from part one is emphasized here. This girl is currently ugly. She pushed past Beauty on the sidewalk. Hugs~
Beauty (Part 1) (Poetry) - 3/29/2008 12:43:57 AM
I like the original rhyme scheme in this poem. You have me on the hook! See you at the next part~
Beauty (Part 6) (Poetry) - 3/28/2008 7:35:20 PM
Lost at the fair, and the fair lost her...
Beauty (Part 5) (Poetry) - 3/28/2008 7:30:25 PM
"They felt the jerk of wheels at work,"... that "Jerk of Wheels" was a piece o' work...
Beauty (Part 4) (Poetry) - 3/28/2008 7:27:48 PM
Becoming complete, with signs and wonders...
Beauty (Part 3) (Poetry) - 3/28/2008 7:23:45 PM
Good ole Miss Good...
Beauty (Part 2) (Poetry) - 3/28/2008 7:22:07 PM
...this is getting good...
Beauty (Part 1) (Poetry) - 3/28/2008 7:18:58 PM
Beauty (Part 6) (Poetry) - 3/28/2008 6:07:11 PM
Enjoyed very much Scott,stay safe and well...Hugssssss
Beauty (Part 6) (Poetry) - 3/28/2008 5:51:19 PM
A fine fable for our time.
Beauty (Part 1) (Poetry) - 3/28/2008 3:55:33 PM
The fair is no longer the fair place to be? Makes one think.
Terra Purgatorio (Poetry) - 3/22/2008 9:22:13 PM
You write some very thought-provoking lines, sometime making use of a provocative tone. It's really interesting to follow the structure of this piece of writing and see where the author wants to lead us. You chose to emphasize the numerous painful contradictions of our world and I appreciate the intent.
Jesus Presley (Poetry) - 3/22/2008 8:07:47 PM
Scott, this brightened my day so much! What an appropriate read for this day!
Always the best,
Boogers (Poetry) - 3/22/2008 11:03:17 AM
What if we scratch our ass and smell it, does that count? Think I'll run out and buy $80,000 worth of clandestine love. It' a thinker, that's for sure.
The Welcome Rain (Poetry) - 3/22/2008 3:20:51 AM
Some beautiful and powerful imagery here. 'The Welcome Rain' is rich in feeling and metaphor, woven together together by a skillful poetic voice.
Cosmic Relativity (Poetry) - 3/22/2008 3:04:03 AM
A marvelous write! I believe the bees are significant and that somewhere among the jumble of varying philosophies, ideologies and idiosyncrasies, lies one to share with our fuzzy friends. Thanks for the thought-provoking and enjoyable read.
Boogers (Poetry) - 3/21/2008 8:43:23 PM
No matter how together we get, boogers are always needed to keep our feet on the ground and our fingers up our respective noses...e
Boogers (Poetry) - 3/21/2008 8:02:42 PM
LOL, very original, always a good thing. Enjoyed. Michelle
Boogers (Poetry) - 3/21/2008 12:12:00 PM
To weed out the ills of society and all that may entice one to react rather than act. Temptation is always there, beckoning to all who will listen and it takes great strength to ward it off. Nice write...
Be always safe,
Boogers (Poetry) - 3/21/2008 8:07:32 AM
Funny! I knew a beautiful girl once (now a PHD) who when receiving unwanted male attention, would go "digging for gold" with a vengeance. She claims it works every time. I tell her just wait, some guy will come along for whom that will be a turn on. She says, not to worry, her repertoire has that covered, too. I didn't ask ...
Boogers (Poetry) - 3/21/2008 7:19:04 AM
Had to laugh hard at the last comment.
About boogers (aka bad habits and sin): I have a good friend who calls these her "little darlings". She says that like a good mama, she must let them go-- but it's so hard! Because soap operas are much more interesting than cooking a healthy meal for her girls. And favorite t.v. shows come on when she should be excercising, and she can just taste that drink in her mouth, and would't it go well with... and besides... Her motherhood motto: Save my child; loan me a cigarrette. I find her vastly amusing. I'll have to forward your name to her; I know she'd get a kick out of this... and ammo too, to keep her daughter from wiping more "real" boogers on her bedroom walls. --Charlie
Boogers (Poetry) - 3/20/2008 6:55:21 PM
Uhhhhhh.......reminds me of a time at a stop light the car left to my drivers side was digging for gold I say--yep some slimmy green goo!
Soooo....the light is red, I did what any farm girl would do-I Stared At Him Till He Looked At Me!
Yep then he tried to lie (with his eyes of course seeking to hide shame & the humiliation of public embarrassments!)
soooo...yep I kept a straight face of appall & disgust & gave him that bugger flicker finger jester pretending like I had one too-LOL
Terra Purgatorio (Poetry) - 3/17/2008 1:24:08 PM
You raise many issues with this thoughtful write. Seeing sick children really is beyond disturbing. Many ask why it happens if God is just. I like to think that a sick baby is God's way of trying to stir compassion in all of us. It's worked on you, me, and millions of others. But He's still got millions to reach. Morally we are declining as a society. Perhaps many see the homeless as dangerous and that's why they turn their eyes away - as if a homeless person is the proverbial monkey in the jungle one should not look in the eye unless one wants to risk attack. Or perhaps guilt turns their heads? They don't realize that, given the right circumstances, they could just as easily be using newspaper to stay warm. Crime is on the rise, too. Broken families, abuse, the economy, the religious decline, society's lack of condemnation...all of these things are contributors. I sometimes think progress was not in our best interest. Now see how you've got me going? Excellent work on this exploratory piece. This is a wonderful, intelligent example of how we search a lifetime for these answers. In the end, we must look ourselves in the mirror - that doesn't mean anything to some. Hugs:)
Terra Purgatorio (Poetry) - 3/17/2008 3:45:56 AM
Excellent writing Scott,enjoyed very much,stay safe and well...Hugssssss
Terra Purgatorio (Poetry) - 3/15/2008 3:22:52 PM
Wow, loved this, not surprised, great ending, Jean Paul Sartre would be proud and the truth sometimes does seem that "hell is other people." I really loved this. The best part is that you gave some excellent philosophical comments and ideas within a poem that actually works in rhyme and meter, really impressive, I know I for one, would screw that all up, lol. I like the title, being Italian, I would, lol, plus it reminds me of a modern day Dante-being Catholic, I appreciate why limbo has appeal as well, and there is a wonderful book by Cynthia Rylant, a well-known children's author about that-but I digress- I think we all could use a stop over prior to heaven to get our proverbial shit together! There is so much in every line that I agree with, especially the Clinton comment, but too much to go into as a comment here,so I will end this by saying I love it! :) Take care, Michelle
Terra Purgatorio (Poetry) - 3/15/2008 8:40:11 AM
We're all little potatoes floating around in society soup. Sure, we'll all succumb to earth's digestive tract at sometime... in the meantime, the trick is to rise above the burner as much as possible, and stay whole. Once you turn to spiritual mush, you disappear into the societal goop, and saving yourself is pretty much impossible... But there is an Alchemist who can put the pieces back together-- okay, bad analogy. It does feel like that sometimes, though. --Charlie
Terra Purgatorio (Poetry) - 3/15/2008 8:30:59 AM
Methinks we are on Earth, our only home. Deep in our brain we still have reptilian urge to rip the guts out of our enemy and torment the meek. God does not keep it at bay. Only our thin frontal lobes of reason keep us from going berserk.
Terra Purgatorio (Poetry) - 3/15/2008 6:14:31 AM
Good Morning Scott,
Hummm? I think things are for purpose, (questioning that now-AGAIN!) however you have turned my eyes to wonder WHY, like the babies, the homeless, all the perils of man & woman, & child. It is to complicated for me to even try. I think greed & selfishness & control & demands harming another for a self to achieve is a large part of it. There are so many sides you open in your words for perspectives & reflection.
Psalm of Death (Poetry) - 3/14/2008 11:02:36 AM
Exceptional: both sobering and enlightening. A brilliant piece of work Scott. ~ Chanti
The Simile of Life (Poetry) - 3/11/2008 7:54:32 PM
Lighthearted, yet profound, well written piece.
The Simile of Life (Poetry) - 3/11/2008 4:03:16 PM
Loved the rhythm in this, it left me breathless.
The Simile of Life (Poetry) - 3/11/2008 3:34:33 PM
Just a tasty, easy, breezy, read. I remember leaving my mother's bountiful table where I inhaled food, to college where I had no money and was training for wrestling savoring the flavor of every morsel I was able to buy.
Reminds me of a poem that I wrote, called "Simile."
Psalm of Death (Poetry) - 3/11/2008 2:00:35 AM
Well thought-out use of metaphors! Life and death are subjects we ponder frequently, but this poem shows abyss-depth thought over these topics. What I find exceptional is how you show both sides of the coin - the negative and positive views of any one happening; death and life found within each. Be proud of this poem for it reflects depth of character, an awareness of opposites, creativity, and the open mind of a student of life. Excellent!
Psalm of Death (Poetry) - 3/10/2008 7:56:12 PM
Wow, I gotta read more of your stuff, you have a new poetry fan, lol. This is great-the end is such a good climax, really gripping the reader, like a hand to the throat- the message is similiar as the Beethoven quote about seizing fate by the throat-and it is death after all that makes us live in so many ways.
To Paul Anthony (Poetry) - 3/10/2008 7:50:50 PM
Heartbreaking and beautiful at the same time-also, written- well, even more important :)
Play By The Rules (Poetry) - 3/10/2008 7:48:42 PM
There is alot of truth in this. I think alot of these types of observations come from daily living. The opening lines on this are great, the images in their opposition play off each other to make their meaning even stronger-it reminds me of my friend who went to see Gladiator and said she couldn't believe all the violence in it and I wanted to remind her the title wasn't Bambi, lol. And as far as pacifism goes, it doesn't work because it is unrealistic when absolute power corrupts absolutely and eventually, someone's ego will demand that absolute power, whether we like it or not. The "Imagine" idea of things is a nice fantasy, but one needs only read a millenium history to find out how that has worked so far, times have pretty much stayed the same. OK, better stop there, I could go into lots of great discussion about this poem because it is excellent and thought-provoking.
The Welcome Rain (Poetry) - 3/10/2008 7:40:48 PM
Excellent form and rhythym, and the images, especially that last one, so strong. I love the rain, but then, I'm weird, lol, and there is nothing like walking in the rain, there is such freedom and beauty in it-it also has a real sensuality about it (of course, there are all those psychological interpretations of water in dreams and things that help that along), and you wrote this well :) Blessings, Michelle
One Trip (Poetry) - 3/10/2008 7:36:39 PM
There's no high and no trip like the dependency of sex and love. Cool :)
Tits & Tats (Poetry) - 3/10/2008 7:35:10 PM
OMG, this is soooooooo funny and so great and so true, loved it. I am not a fan of artificial when there is so much natural beauty in the world, so I find it really hard to understand that type of thinking, lol, so I really could appreciate this poem. Life is so short, I cannot imagine why anyone would want to spend time worrying about such pointlessness as breast size, glad you showed this here :) Blessings, Michelle
The Simile of Life (Poetry) - 3/10/2008 1:29:19 PM
Love this!!! What a wonderful little lesson wrapped up perfectly neatly in a well-written and timed poem, its humor the bow on top! Blessing, Michelle
Psalm of Death (Poetry) - 3/10/2008 10:00:56 AM
I couldn't possibly give this enough praise, so let's just say that I love it and I do feel that death will be a beautiful experience after having an NDE myself, it was great. Nothing for me to ever fear. Again, what can I say, I love this poem.
Psalm of Death (Poetry) - 3/9/2008 7:54:24 AM
An epic tome on the mystery of death. We are born and while we are busy living, death is waiting silently and chipping away at our body and soul until we slip into that great unknown.
The Simile of Life (Poetry) - 3/8/2008 11:48:12 PM
...well written poetry...moments realized...not to be missed perhaps...within a sneeze.
The Simile of Life (Poetry) - 3/8/2008 10:50:39 AM
I love it, Scott! It reminds me of "You are old, Father William, the young man said..." or "I saw him sitting on a gate"... Very Carrollesque. And the image of the sneeze was awesome. (see my "You Call?") There's a large contrast between this poem and your "Psalm of Death"-- which I thought was going to be a foil for Longfellow's "Psalm of Life" which I love, and memorized when I was about 13 or so... However, I love yours as is.
Take care. --Charlie
Psalm of Death (Poetry) - 3/8/2008 10:43:43 AM
Life and death as you describe would be like a piece of well-woven brocade-- the blue and red on the one side become the red and the blue on the other-- exact opposites of what is believed. These beliefs to some extent follow my own. It is odd-- how the beginning of life is the death of what was before, and how death is a new birth into an unknown life.
But I don't know about having to climb the tree for a poisoned comb to experience life. For me, experiencing life in a pleasant way is all about the simple things: gardening, humming while you do dishes, music-- what's more beautiful than Beethoven? or Motzart? Not much. And, my thought for the day: Color! I mean, God could have given us one color-- say grey. There's a million shades of it. We'd live our life in black and white, and never know better... but He didn't. We experience colors so rich and alive-- each with a life and atmosphere all its own. Silver-backed yellow balloons floating up into the atmosphere, blown away from some rushed birthday-mom... and the sun reflects off the silver, and her son points up to the sky with a huge grin on his face and thinks they're beautiful...
Life is beautiful, and death probably is too, when seen from the other side of the veil. --Charlie
The Simile of Life (Poetry) - 3/8/2008 8:46:24 AM
Excellent writing Scott,enjoyed very much..take care OK...Hugsss
The Simile of Life (Poetry) - 3/8/2008 6:53:33 AM
Your mother was a very wise woman. Time passes so quickly and sometimes, we allow ourselves to become so busy that we fail to stop and appreciate the simple moments we should not miss.
I enjoyed this very well written poem very much.
Psalm of Death (Poetry) - 3/8/2008 5:52:36 AM
I am around death every day,believe me..LIVE FOR TODAY sweetie..and be happy,because we all are just passing through this life of our's..by the way I loved your comment on my last poem,thanks for making me SMILE...Hugssssssssss...stay safe and well OK
Tits & Tats (Poetry) - 3/6/2008 4:32:21 PM
Wow! That was an intense read! Just as I would beging to chuckle at the wit, the reality would bite me rite in my un lifted tush that sits where it does thanks to Lotte Berk's High Round Assets ;) lol
I love this poem. Now where's my 18 year old so I can sit her down, and show her a male point of view of all the silliness women put themselves through, when, as you said, the end is the same for all of us!
Tits & Tats (Poetry) - 3/6/2008 2:46:52 PM
EEeeew! Can you see those plastic parts sitting on a pile of mush and bones? Next millenium's Hugo will see that and come up with some best-selling tale of how that came to be... Important write, Scott.
Sort of reminiscent of Billy Joel's "We Didn't Start the Fire" --Charlie
One Trip (Poetry) - 3/6/2008 7:53:50 AM
Oooooooooooooh. Love SEX DEPENDENCY!
Love it LSD, that is so true!
Kinda sad too huh!
written with eloquency!
Warmest Blessings and Inner Peace, Warrior Purple Lady Sheoooxoo
Scott, I'm thinking - LOVE, SEX and Discoveries! Ahhhh....
Tits & Tats (Poetry) - 3/6/2008 7:45:50 AM
YOU!!! got that right Scott!
I love all your O P E N feelings shared here! LOUD and CLEAR!
and the new thing is NOW, over 40 getting breast enlargements, saying it EMPOWERS, but some say, the C word (Cancer) can be found behind the implants, some choose saline, salt water for those reasons! It is true ( I feel) DEEP INSIDE oF ourselves the self worth has to be shown, they should spend the money ( cuz, Health INSURANCE DOES NOT PAY FOr this body luxuries) on SElf Knowledge, counseling, to GROW day to day! year to year! I wouldn't want em'- ON Tats. I have a thigh and a arm, an arm thorn, about 4" wide and 2 red blood drops, on the points, history around it, back in 2000 I got Divorced, the red tear drop in front, signifies my feelings shown and his is in the back... and On my thigh, a She-Wolf, I wrote a poem on, I am proud of it and smile when I wear shorts, knowing I did for empowerment for ME! and it's body burst out, like incredible hulk...The pict. is about #11 or so down on my poems! Check it out... I love it! and I still want more, but I get older - I think twice! I hope many will read this poem, and let the thoughts sink in!
Warmest Blessings and Inner Peace, Warrior Purple Lady Sweet Shexooo
Tits & Tats (Poetry) - 3/5/2008 11:26:45 PM
I can't imagine living around people who are okay with all the surgery. I do have 4 tats, though, so I gotta comment in favor of tats. I got all four of mine before tats became a fad. Mine, like much of my writing, reflect what is on the inside - the only kind worth getting. One of mine receives many compliments but I shrug them off because the compliments are made with little or no info about me. On my left outer thigh, I have a two-headed tiger which is just over a foot in length. Tigers signify courage - which I needed to survive my childhood. The two heads signify my lack of trust in others. This tat also symbolizes my 2nd degree black belt. At a glance, none know exactly how much my tat reveals. Tats should always have meaning if one is going to bother. Fad tats come with regret. Sorry to carry on...lol. This poem points out some serious problems in our society. The issues are not surprising. Most media puts pounds of pressure on women to look young and trim, though health is the most important issue. Well said and with conviction~
Play By The Rules (Poetry) - 3/5/2008 4:23:49 PM
Enjoyed very much sweet man,stay safe and well OK..Hugsssss
One Trip (Poetry) - 3/3/2008 7:56:13 PM
Tits & Tats (Poetry) - 3/2/2008 9:25:33 PM
...you have said it all...and lastly with grave thoughts.
excellent write Scott...
Tits & Tats (Poetry) - 3/2/2008 1:19:16 PM
Magnificent tirade on the current condition. I'm going to my grave without one iota of augmentation. But then, I've been blessed with fairly good genes, albeit they came from JCPenney (plain pockets -- no designer earmarks for me).
Tits & Tats (Poetry) - 3/2/2008 1:09:03 PM
Well done, all young girls should read this one, this is a subject I have written on a few times myself, but cannot remember if I posted lol
love your song here, your poetry is musical no matter the subject....and your words wise
I am waiting for this day lolol
Someday, the Rubenesque ideal will once more be the fad,
lol pax.....chew chew......A
Tits & Tats (Poetry) - 3/2/2008 10:20:54 AM
Oh my, I'm really happy to say I am so natural..everything on me is mine ...Giggles..LOL..cute writing sweet man,stay safe and well..Hugssssss
One Trip (Poetry) - 3/1/2008 7:29:30 AM
Visually attractive and thought provoking mnimalism.
The Welcome Rain (Poetry) - 3/1/2008 2:16:59 AM
Strong metaphor here. You've carried it through beautifully with a deep message. Bravo!
The Welcome Rain (Poetry) - 2/27/2008 9:28:31 PM
The Welcome Rain (Poetry) - 2/26/2008 5:13:37 AM
In Peru, they call that cactus fruit "atun" -- with the stress on the last syllable. And why you'd want to know that, I really don't know-- but there it is, none-the-less.
The image of you eating a cactus heart calls to my mind the image of "Dances with Wolves" eating a buffalo heart (or was it liver?) --anyways, something throbbing with life, plump and full, being devoured in large, gulping, crispy, power-giving bites -- and the juice running down your chin-- and the wistful glance at what once was...
Here's wishing you a cactus salad. Perhaps some of the flowers are edible-- or their roots? I'll send you a few virtual spuds-- they grow well in the desert plains. Cut them in chunks and poke them in the ground, and pray for rain... Gotta love that rain! --Charlie
PS-- try reading A Pax. She has a similar writing syle I think you'd like. "A Woman's Tale" is a near-perfect foil for this poem of yours.
To Paul Anthony (Poetry) - 2/25/2008 7:28:34 AM
I feel a healing and cleansing HERE1
A sad heart bringing the pain all out!
Time to move forward!
Thank you for sharing your O P E N caring heart Scott!
Warmest Blessings and Warm Hugs, Warrior Purple Lady Sweet Sheoooxo
The Welcome Rain (Poetry) - 2/25/2008 7:25:25 AM
YOur imagery is astounding Scott!
A profound thinker! I appreciate! With the words you articulate!
Love your open, caring and blunt heart too!
I see a similiar style in my writing and yours, the straightforwardness is truly felt!
Warmest Blessings and Inner Peace, Warrior Purple Lady Shexooo
Play By The Rules (Poetry) - 2/25/2008 7:21:29 AM
Things to do need to change Scott!
Great heartfelt write that shines!
The next Generation, we must be thinking!
Write On! Much inspired you! I can tell with your expressions!
Warmest Blessings, LIGHT, LOVE and Inner Peace, Warrior Purple Lady Sheoxoo
The Welcome Rain (Poetry) - 2/24/2008 11:14:12 PM
A most meaningful metaphorical write, Scott. Thank you for sharing it. Love and peace to you,
The Welcome Rain (Poetry) - 2/24/2008 5:29:26 PM
...timeless sands...are quenched with emotional waters...evaporate life...with only nature's thorns to feed the soul.
excellent write Scott...
Play By The Rules (Poetry) - 2/23/2008 4:01:31 PM
...the object of the game...and somtime reverse stategy...set one who rules by the play...apart.
well penned Scott...
Play By The Rules (Poetry) - 2/23/2008 10:41:53 AM
Beautifully rendered prose~commentary on the sad state of society's "me~mine~now~me`me`me" generation.
To Paul Anthony (Poetry) - 2/22/2008 1:56:07 PM
An inviolable, almost child-like observation. The poem flows unbroken when spoken aloud. The mysterious tag on each strophe, though, leads one to feel a bit flummoxed as to what this mysterious version of 'truth' really is.
To Paul Anthony (Poetry) - 2/22/2008 11:09:19 AM
What a lovely and heartfelt ode.
To Paul Anthony (Poetry) - 2/22/2008 12:48:39 AM
...well penned words of sadness...honesty...for one no longer...and a candle of hope...light in truth.
well done Scott...
To Paul Anthony (Poetry) - 2/21/2008 7:02:25 PM
Has a meloncholy feel, and yet an offering of hope for the future as you say "now you see the truth", nice write...
Be always safe,
Life Cycles (Poetry) - 2/19/2008 5:13:52 PM
I found someone who can write long and in interesting detail, as myself in my writings!
This brought back many wonderful happy memories!
YOur style of writing I am enjoying!
And congratulation on being a smart, exciting and tolerant dad! The best blessing there is!
Warmest Blessings, Light and Peace, Warrior Purple Lady Sheooxoo
The 'Grown Up' Way (Poetry) - 2/19/2008 5:10:38 PM
What a treasure to lastingly savorrr...
YOur heart shines bright!
A lucky dad you be
and son who holds the special key! (To your heart without a doubt)
Love your style of writing, I will be back again...
Warmest Blessings, Light and Peace, Warrior Purple Lady Sheooxo
Jesus Presley (Poetry) - 2/19/2008 5:07:23 PM
The KING will always live
well expressed in your lines!
A heart intense, love your mix within the verses!
YOU know much about the Great Elvis, and he is in Heaven, which some would still argue...
Warmest Blessings and Light, Warrior Purple Lady Sheooxoo
Ravenlocks (Poetry) - 2/19/2008 5:03:40 PM
What an amazing flowww and rhythm Scott!
The imagery is impeccable.
A child or adult book I can see becoming very popular!
Warmest Blessings and Light, Warrior Purple Lady Sweet Sheooxoo
I write all genre's, dark, romance, erotica, humor and inspirational, come by my corner of the den when you have extra time.
The 'Grown Up' Way (Poetry) - 2/18/2008 10:24:59 AM
Your style shines and you offer life's lessons as well. Great job. Thank you, Scott. Love and peace,
Ravenlocks (Poetry) - 2/18/2008 10:23:16 AM
What a tale well told, Scott. Your attention to rhyme and rhythm is duly noted and appreciated. Well done! Thank you for sharing your talent. Love and peace to you,
Jesus Presley (Poetry) - 2/17/2008 12:00:40 PM
What a delight to eat this piece up with the eyes!
Life Cycles (Poetry) - 2/17/2008 9:46:00 AM
And so it goes... a little pedantic at the end, but shows a true cycle for sure, and in impecable meter. --Charlie
The Tragic Masterpiece (Poetry) - 2/17/2008 9:39:01 AM
Engaged my sympathy/feelings immediately. Wrenchingly, unselfish thing of you to do-- the left hand not knowing what the right hands doing-sort of feel to it.
I have many friends and family members who were adopted. I'm grateful to people like you who were willing to forgo the glory, and let their beautiful babies go to ready-and-waiting families.
I think you'd very much like the writings of Leo Durrant on this site. He uses cadence similarly. I recommend: "The Greatest Poem I ever Wrote" and "Birdsong at Mourning". There's a similar theme. In fact, I think you'll like his poetry very much.
A very fine tribute, Scott, and like Axilea says, it's very sophisticated. Take care. --Charlie
Ravenlocks (Poetry) - 2/17/2008 9:27:12 AM
Oh, I love it! Alice-like, she learns her lessons, but to the tune of a Christmas favorite. I'm agreeing with Michelle-- highly publishable.
I noticed that you capitalized the beginning of each line. It was a bit distracting, because my mind kept pausing at the end of each line, when much of the time it should have wrapped around to the next one. When you rework it, just capitalize the beginning of each sentence. I think the meter will shine all the brighter for it-- but get another opinion on that.
Very well done. I'd buy the book. --Charlie
Ravenlocks (Poetry) - 2/16/2008 5:11:19 PM
...as a whole...this is brilliant pen...whether published for child and adult...a story told...with impecable meter in rhyme and verse...wisdom is inspired.
Ravenlocks (Poetry) - 2/16/2008 1:50:35 PM
This is SUCH a great idea- if it was halved, I am sure it could get published as a kids book because there just aren't any books out on the topic and it is something almost every kid gets-it would also be an illustrator's dream because of the pig. There are areas that if illustrated would shorten it some. You should really work on the length and get this published, it's great.
The Tragic Masterpiece (Poetry) - 2/13/2008 1:17:00 AM
I like how you lead in to your feelings with other examples of artist's work. By the time you reveal your "masterpiece" the reader is taken off-guard a bit. The strength of your feelings are compounded by those examples because an artist's work is usually his or her passion. Very touching and well written. I hope you find peace...maybe you'll get to meet her one day.
The 'Grown Up' Way (Poetry) - 2/12/2008 2:51:38 PM
Oh what a joyous and chanting tale filled with so many truths, the best of all "Be yourself boy"......
Be always safe,
The 'Grown Up' Way (Poetry) - 2/12/2008 11:15:29 AM
Very well written enjoyed very much,please stay safe and well...Hugssssss
The 'Grown Up' Way (Poetry) - 2/12/2008 10:43:10 AM
I adore this piece! Your rhyne, your flow, your heart and pinch of humor make this a wonderful little gem to devoure!
The Tragic Masterpiece (Poetry) - 2/2/2008 10:17:04 PM
This is a sophisticated story - narrative poem - to explain (metaphorically) the path your thoughts followed. Although I am not sure a child is a parent's masterpiece; it is also his or her own.
It must be a difficult experience because the thought is probably present most of the time.
Jesus Presley (Poetry) - 1/29/2008 11:05:13 PM
I really enjoyed your rendition, although the songs still live on.
Of Governments and Gangs (Poetry) - 1/22/2008 10:25:50 PM
The way things have been going, I can't argue with your analogy ...Excellent poem!
The Tragedy of Madame Irf (Poetry) - 1/18/2008 4:42:47 PM
I had no idea where this was going, initially I thought, ok this is going to take the supernatural route....I had not seen a moral coming in the first few sections....
Very well done
I LOVE POETIC STORIES.....they are fun to read and write!!!!
I wrote one about a gypsy and ghost....and another crazy one about cookie people and an ogre lol....it was a collaboration with another AD poet...
anyway, let me say, my highest compliment to you
WISH I WROTE THIS lol
Animals (Poetry) - 1/13/2008 4:31:16 PM
Again, very original and imaginative way to get out important lessons about life! Really great writing style!
Cosmic Relativity (Poetry) - 1/13/2008 4:27:51 PM
Very interesting work! I can see the comparison to Dr. Seuss! What an imaginative and original way of getting out important messages! I live in South Florida and often wonder if the lizards think we are gods.....
A Boy And His Flower (Poetry) - 1/11/2008 4:42:12 PM
Sweet. Sounds like he found a sunflower!
Distorted Vision - Part Two - Hyperopia (Poetry) - 1/11/2008 4:30:41 PM
Faith is a strangely powerful emotion. What happened to this lady in reality or myth is indeed tragic. The christians who were thrown to the Lions were indeed faithful to the end. Jesus Christ historically suffered on the cross. I do not know the reason for all this pain. My brother lies critical on life support, paralysed from the neck down. he was already born partially blind and is the nicest man you could meet. Yet i pray. what else can I do? Science hasn't found a cure for C2-C4 acute spinal injury.
Distorted Vision - Part Three - Bitemporal hemianopia (Poetry) - 1/11/2008 2:30:18 PM
Very wise advice in part three. As individuals, it's important to step back once in a while to take a look in the mirror. Hopefully we like what we see when we search inward, however there's always room for improvement. If we refuse to take that glance, we risk becoming stagnant. This poem's lesson embraces the 'seize the day' mentality and warns what could happen if you neglect what's truly important in life. You've delivered these messages in an original way. A strong example of irony at work!
Distorted Vision - Part Two - Hyperopia (Poetry) - 1/11/2008 2:16:18 PM
You caught me off guard with this part, Scott. My "Distorted Vision" was expecting more humor after reading part one. I'm impressed when an author can take me unawares. Certainly a different message here. I find myself asking the age-old question - why do bad things have to happen to good people? Very dramatic and perfectly rhymed!
Distorted Vision - Part One - Myopia (Poetry) - 1/11/2008 2:07:27 PM
Very original in content, and I was smiling by the end. Had to laugh about the raisin/fly imagery. A pleasure to read~
Distorted Vision - Part Two - Hyperopia (Poetry) - 1/11/2008 1:42:44 PM
...and on the other end of the scale. You do know how to drive a point home effectively Scott. In the first you employed humour and in this, tragedy. An interesting in'sight.
Distorted Vision - Part One - Myopia (Poetry) - 1/11/2008 1:39:35 PM
hahaha What a great write! How often people become so fixed in their own views. A wonderful way to illustrate this using humour. Well done!
Distorted Vision - Part One - Myopia (Poetry) - 1/10/2008 7:11:55 PM
Cute and very imaginative...
A Boy And His Flower (Poetry) - 1/7/2008 7:53:44 AM
Sooo glad I found your Den!
A Boy And His Flower (Poetry) - 1/6/2008 1:59:29 PM
A truly great write. It should be published.
Cosmic Relativity (Poetry) - 1/4/2008 11:13:06 PM
I can see your background has come into play with this poem. This one is thought provoking. You have tapped into your imagination here just like you did in "A Boy And His Flower" - to personify creatures we normally think of as insignificant or lower life forms. You did it with theory in this piece instead of outright personification as you did with the flowers in the last piece. A great write!
A Boy And His Flower (Poetry) - 1/4/2008 10:58:00 PM
Wow! I'm deeply impressed:) This could be a children's book; one that both children and adults would enjoy. You tell a story, which is difficult to do when keeping rhyme and rhythm in mind. Plus, you have a lesson at the end. Not to mention that you did not forfeit imagery along the way, which is something many poetry storytellers have trouble grasping. I'm not sure if all readers of this piece will understand that they just read a poem which has a mountain-high level of difficulty in its creation, but I do. Bravo!
A Boy And His Flower (Poetry) - 1/2/2008 8:51:08 PM
Such beauty and the sincerity of love throughout....
A Boy And His Flower (Poetry) - 1/2/2008 9:02:32 AM
What a beautiful story! I thoroughly enjoyed it. The characters are intriguing, and the "lesson" is wise and well-put.
A Boy And His Flower (Poetry) - 1/2/2008 8:48:49 AM
Scott, this is a great story...well done, especially the last two lines.
Inspiration (Poetry) - 1/1/2008 8:27:19 AM
You have an original way with rhythm that pulls the reader in. I like the changes in this piece; they keep the poem fresh and unique. There's tons to like about this poem, but I especially love the ending on it. A wonderful work on writer's block that goes beyond the norm.
Animals (Poetry) - 1/1/2008 8:19:10 AM
This is a fun read with great detail! Strong messages, too. Nice attention to rhythm and rhyme throughout.
Inspiration (Poetry) - 12/14/2007 7:02:01 AM
You're a brilliant poet. Immensely enjoyed this read and definitely didn't find it too long. Write on...