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Recent Reviews for Edward w Saint-Ivan
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The Big Question (Short Story) - 6/23/2008 5:16:17 PM
Your remark that we have so much in common, disables me in writing a review about your short. I only could says that it is unique in its way, very different from anything I ever wrote and am too familiar with the happenings in Budapest, including Wallenberg, to view it as a fiction. I am very detached from Judaism and have hard time to relate to anything common with it. I wish I could have been more helpful,
George
The Big Question (Short Story) - 12/12/2006 6:30:40 PM
What a fascinating story. I liked it very much, however (and not that I offer criticisms generally) if I have one criticism at all I felt that the ending was a little abrupt. I felt it needed a little more suspense. Please forgive the comment but, as I may sometimes be accused of having a flare for the dramatic'I look for the ways in which I could try to put my audience on the edge of their seats. May I offer an example of what i mean...
'In another time and another place, maybe I would not have read this story with so much interest. Then again, in another time of course, I would not be cremating my wife's mother in two days time.'
The above happens to be true and, coincidently, I am a non-Jew married to a Jewish lady. I could have mentioned in a more simple fashion that her mother died recently and we were going to her funeral on Thursday but the whole sentence fails to encourage the emotions that such an event should bring. Likewise, sudden revelations need a little suspense before the punchline for the punchline to have the desired effect.
I loved the story - and you tell it well. It is a very good, well structured piece. The twist at the end is also a good one and yet, in my humble opinion I must add, you could have taken just a little more time - just a couple of extra sentences for suspense perhaps - to reveal the twist that should leave the reader feeling a cold shudder down their spine.
I particularly like the clash of belief systems and how it affects those who integrate and those who feel they cannot; pretty topical at the moment I would say.
I look forward to seeing more of your writing.
Shane Ward
Not that the following would improve my writing in any way but I was born in the same London town as Alfred Hitchcock (Leytonstone, East London, right next door to Stratford where the 2012 Olympics will be held). He was a master at suspense; most people would know what was coming but he kept you waiting for it anyway. It is a skill worth aiming for if you want to write this type of story.
Thai Food (Short Story) - 6/20/2006 4:22:53 AM
Interesting story, Edward.
God bless,
Sandie.
The Big Question (Short Story) - 5/9/2005 2:58:55 PM
An engaging, compelling read; well penned! Not related, yet somehow connected--BRAVO!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. :)
The Big Question (Short Story) - 9/1/2004 8:32:49 PM
Oh my god, you are back and good to see you are kicking some ass again. It is almost like when I first debuted on AuthorsDen -- it was your work and Dondiego's scaring the crap out of people. It is good to see you are posting once again.
The Big Question (Short Story) - 9/1/2004 7:34:58 AM
This is an intriguing read!
The Peterson Trial (Article) - 3/20/2005 3:41:41 PM
You know I believe that the first case will be reversed because of the fact two more women in the area that were pregnant disappeared after Laci and there was no public outcry over that.Amber Frye got a lot of mileage out of the fact that she was paid for her testimony and the fact she wrote a book about it and yet California juries decided to find OJ not guilty because of a book.
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